Open Poetry #12 |
In want of a title, that won't give away the subject. Help?!? |
VAS Member Rara Avis
since 2000-11-16
Posts 7450Oregon |
Oceans of concrete wave the midday to an alerted, fevered fervor! Casting bricks and stones about as if shaking dandruff from its shoulders or pebbles from its bed to cast them ashore while seeking more comfortable sleep. A flurry of action, ensues, spinning mindlessly lacking direction or goal clear enough to order their movement, willy-nilly seeking salvation, freedom from the debris surfing the contours of each swell and cars hanging ten minus six with no spare to spare. Rock and roll in its onslaught of the fifty's created no stir equal to the writhing of the land today in the minds and fears of those that begged to sit this one out. |
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Member Seraphic
since 2000-01-18
Posts 22676with you |
I like this a lot.......but a title that doesn't give it away is hard........I'm thinking "shaken" or maybe "reckless" at any rate.......no matter what you title this, it's great. SEA |
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ggrn3 Member
since 2000-08-17
Posts 433Nahunta Georgia U.S. |
VAS I liked this one. It sounds a little "dangerous," like the ride of a life time. I'm sure someone will be able to title this one for you, if you do not come up with a title of your own. Garfield |
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Paula Finn Member Ascendant
since 2000-06-17
Posts 5546missouri |
LOL well I like Earthquake...but that gives it away...california Style hehehe that does too huh |
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nona Member
since 2000-03-03
Posts 139Fla |
VAS like this one great brings vivid pictures to mind...how about just TURMULT for a title. hope you find one for this it is a "keeper" nona |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
Rock and Roll (music by MotherEarth)-- I know...probably a bit light hearted, but that's just ME...loved your poem. |
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VAS Member Rara Avis
since 2000-11-16
Posts 7450Oregon |
Thanks all, and fun suggestions, too! Don't know what I'll call it yet. I just don't want the title to tell the tale. |
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