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vivaldi had no foresight
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gnosis Junior Member
since 2000-05-14
Posts 12 |
please, make no mistake, i know nothing about Four Seasons, except the opening sound... this is just something inspired by the title..... vaguely. /vivaldi had no foresight eight seasons so far, and more to come i'm afraid. not that i don't enjoy the company of love, herself. and that is what you are. but there aren't words for this anymore. you're sick and home and you haven't called or asked for help. "all your excuses turn to lies." we need not to overcome time, but to permeate time itself, the way smoke fills the air when we talk, the way your eyes fill my memories of you. oh, to see like you. to see what you see. it would be like fire. and that is what you are. "...never should have believed," i sing to myself. it doesn't carry a tune, but it's so catchy. and so i hum to myself, making it up as i go along. the interference heightens in a growing crowd. "... i can still feel you." but the signal is dulled by those around, infuriated by the bandwidth interference. scarce do i make out a full transmission. "where are you now?" "... what is the difference - the distinction - between a swisch and a whistler?" and some more chatter. "... these are audio-frequency radio waves." and that is what you are. you are beautiful, and carry a warm tone. but you are so open to interruption. and this is where we are. eight seasons later, and this is where we are. sometimes the end is whisper quiet./ |
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Member Seraphic
since 2000-01-18
Posts 22676with you |
I think this is fantastic........  SEA |
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VAS Member Rara Avis
since 2000-11-16
Posts 7450Oregon |
Very interesting piece. It has a captivating feel to it, especially at the end. I don't really understand what emotion is being portrayed, for certain. I do sense extreme uncertainty. Perhaps a few reads through would make it clearer to me. Or, maybe it's just too late. However, I think it has inspired me...well not the poem, but the title, has inspired me to write a spoof of a piece called "Grimaldi's Four Seasons." So we shall see what comes of it. Are you familiar with any of PDQ Bach? |
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ATelamon Member
since 2001-02-06
Posts 328Purgatory, Last Staircase, Up |
Sorry but to this Musician did your title call only to say Vivaldi spoke in a language so belovedly universal it does more tham survive his words passions sounds he inspires Moreover redefines who and all we are and he spoke his insight in more then merely four seasons It is there for all who seek life Sorry I know your poem has little to nothing to do with the composer. My apologies, but that man's`music has held true for EVERY GENERATION THAT HAS FOLLOWED. Your forgiveness, please at my composers overraction AT "Does the unsighted bird begin the singing? Or are we, as would it more likely seem to these humble ears, recapiants of the chain reaction, as is now said, of God's affirmation in affection, each sunrise, uniquely whole and holy ?" |
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Sven
since 1999-11-23
Posts 14937East Lansing, MI USA |
I see it. . . instead of Four Seasons of time. . . Eight Seasons of the heart. . . excellent writing. . . --------------------------------------------------------- To the world, you may only be one person. But to one person, you may be the world. |
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doreen peri Member Elite
since 1999-05-25
Posts 3812Virginia |
quote: jason, you amaze me.... the above lines i quoted were my favorites from this piece... it's a wonderful write i am proud to call you my son, the Poet -all you can really expect out of life is a sincere apology and some decent poetry - (me) |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
You...c'mere you! GET IN MY LIBRARY! LOL...J, this is superb...just superb. It flowed like vivaldi, how'd you do that without knowing the four season? clever, you!  |
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bsquirrel
since 2000-01-03
Posts 7855 |
Awesome. And are you aware "all my excuses turn to lies" is a nine inch nails quote? Maybe that was unintentional, but now I have nine inch nails AND vivaldi in my head. D'oh. Mike |
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gnosis Junior Member
since 2000-05-14
Posts 12 |
quote:i am well aware. "all your excuses turn to lies." - Nine Inch Nails "... i can still feel you." - Nine Inch Nails (all i do, i can still feel you; i can still feel you, even so far away.) "where are you now?" - Radiohead (where do we go from here? the words are comin' out all weird, where are you now?) "... what is the difference - the distinction - between a swisch and a whistler?" - Meat Beat Manifesto "... these are audio-frequency radio waves." - Meat Beat Manifesto i love quotes! thank you all. i enjoy posting here ever so rarely |
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LRbaba Junior Member
since 2002-05-07
Posts 30Dallas, Texas, |
very nice, jason I guess it's in your genes looking forward to meeting you we'll kick some tunes around I just wrote one composed of lines ripped from other composers called SO SUE ME |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
loved the ending |
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