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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738
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It should soothe your very soul to watch my solitaire flash cold a sparkle on a finger's whim the irony of ice--from HIM. To feel the heaviness refrain to think I trusted once again and all the sparkling of dew is all my memory left of you. strange, how teardrop from a star outshines a diamond, charcoaled scar... naught but ashes in compress proof that fire never rests in the trailing of my tears mascara mapping out my fears, from my eyes and down my cheek-- a tiny spark of me, in seek, outshining diamonds treasured keep a universe in one tear's weep. " Only those who risk going too far can possibly find out how far one can go." T.S. Eliot |
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ethome Member Patricius
since 2000-05-14
Posts 11858New Brunswick Canada |
This is so very sad and painful Celeste! I can just envision those tears outshining diamonds flowing from you in your time of loneliness and hurt. You really captured me with this it's so emotional and presented with a crying heart...take care.....good writing! The poet is like a cocoon; in him the caterpillar of the past finds rest, and from him the butterfly of the future emerges. [This message has been edited by ethome (edited 02-28-2001).] |
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Packratmike Senior Member
since 2001-02-25
Posts 632California, USA |
from my eyes and down my cheek-- a tiny spark of me, in seek, outshining diamonds treasured keep a universe in one tear's weep. Very touching.....nice. |
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Dee Member Elite
since 2000-08-19
Posts 2330Queensland, Australia |
serenity, what a beautiful touching poem. hugs to you Dee I wish you every happiness and may you always have the best of the good things in life. a brand |
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JamesMichael Member Empyrean
since 1999-11-16
Posts 33336Kapolei, Hawaii, USA |
Hope everythings is alright...excellent writing...James |
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Irish Rose Member Patricius
since 2000-04-06
Posts 10263 |
This is excellent. Kathleen Blake "When red-haired girls scamper like roses over the rain-green grass, and the sun drips honey." Laurie Lee |
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mystic requiem Member
since 2001-01-26
Posts 144 |
*applause* Simply wonderfully woven. Love the mascara trailing down...great imagery. *thanx*   |
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Sunshine
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
Serenity...sadly beautiful, and relating, my dear, relating.... |
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Sven
since 1999-11-23
Posts 14937East Lansing, MI USA |
the things that a tear reveals. . . wonderful my friend. . . --------------------------------------------------------- To the world, you may only be one person. But to one person, you may be the world. |
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walker Member Elite
since 2001-02-11
Posts 2240Florida |
This is so sad, but I had a thought when I was reading this, when I was little I used to laugh so hard, I cried. I wonder if the tears of joy and sadness are made up of the same thing? Really touching! A quarter of a century must pass, for the writer to understand what and why he writes. |
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CocoBaci Member Elite
since 2000-05-06
Posts 3043 |
>To feel the heaviness refrain to think I trusted once again and all the sparkling of dew is all my memory left of you... >strange, how teardrop from a star outshines a diamond, charcoaled scar... >a universe in one tear's weep... ~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~ Serenity, you've penned something close to home here... This is excellent writing and my sincerest thanks for this read... ~coco~ |
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Member Seraphic
since 2000-01-18
Posts 22676with you |
Serenity~ this tugged at my heart......very emotional  SEA |
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ATelamon Member
since 2001-02-06
Posts 328Purgatory, Last Staircase, Up |
This reminds me of a poem titled: "Scattered Diamonds" I relive the former as I read the latter. Thank You |
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DreamLess Member
since 2001-02-28
Posts 92 |
really touching i almost cry . .  |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
It should soothe your very soul to watch my solitaire flash cold a sparkle on a finger's whim the irony of ice--from HIM. ===================== strange, how teardrop from a star outshines a diamond, charcoaled scar... naught but ashes in compress proof that fire never rests in the trailing of my tears mascara mapping out my fears, from my eyes and down my cheek-- a tiny spark of me, in seek, outshining diamonds treasured keep a universe in one tear's weep. ======================== "strange, how teardrop from a star outshines a diamond, charcoaled scar... naught but ashes in compress proof that fire never rests" that has got to be one of the coolest damn verses I have ever read. your muse is remarkable ... as is your gift of rhyme ... and level of inspire and expression Strange ... the desire for certain pleasures is a part of my pain. ~Kahlil Gibran~ |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
ethome...thank you my tender hearted friend! mike...thank you as well...I've been enjoying your work as well and hope to be replying more often now! dee...hugs back m'friend. James Michael...not to worry, I just get da blues sometimes! But thanks, was sweet of you to ask! Kathleen...thank you lovie! Stay well and hugs. mystic...thanks, sometimes I think "running mascara" IS my ink...sigh. Thank you. karilea...just hugs for relating. smiles to you across the miles. sven...yes. thank you my friend. walker...I will let you know if I ever find out! sniff..sniff...  Thanks!Coco..I just wish I present them as beautifully as you do...thank you, my kind friend! SEA...Yes, I've often said you could track my female cycle through my poetry...lol AT....please send as I would not want it to be too similar? wouldja? Thanks! dreamless...now stop that--crying is MY job...now smile for me? Thanks. JM....glad you are back! Hope you are well...missed you at Carnival---they all axed fer you! Thanks to all and HUGS TO FORUM. " Only those who risk going too far can possibly find out how far one can go." T.S. Eliot |
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Dennis Member
since 2001-02-19
Posts 235Indiana |
sure diamond are what women like but a good woman deserves that AND a PURE GOLD BAND, Dennis |
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Paula Finn Member Ascendant
since 2000-06-17
Posts 5546missouri |
Ive never understood the fascination of a diamond...they speak of its fire and brilliance...but all I ever see is a cold cold light...and you are right darlin...that tear on your cheek and the ones sparkling in your eyes speak more eloquently than the flash on your finger...a ring can be a shackle as well as a symbol...hugs sweet babe |
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sans38 Member
since 2001-03-03
Posts 117Westland, Michigan |
serenity....this was a truly touching poem, it brought tears to my eyes! p.s. thanks for the welcome : ) |
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