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sadness keeps in my heart ..
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sadness keeps in my heart .. |
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DreamLess Member
since 2001-02-28
Posts 92 |
sadness keeps in my heart.. i knew sorrows by all kind of sort.. i tried to push it far away .. but it seems it just wants to stay.. purity something i can't find.. i look for it in the dawn .. but every time i hear silence tone .. it keeps whispering in my soul .. candles of freedom light far away .. i work hard to reach them i just saw a ray .. it twinkles and sparkles there .. very far .. i am suffering.. as i am striving in war .. WRITTEN BY ME..(17 YRS HIGHSCHOOL GIRL) EASY ON ME.. I'M JUST AN AMATEUR |
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Nate Dogg Senior Member
since 1999-11-15
Posts 1658Georgia, Fulton |
You may be an amateur but, you've expressed yourself very well in this piece...you'ver provided some good insight in this piece....very nice writing! Nathan |
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Midnight Dew Member
since 2001-01-07
Posts 50Forest Lake, MN |
You did express yourself very well! This was a very interesting and depthful piece that I really enjoyed reading. Thank you so much for sharing, and keep on writing until you're no longer an amateur. I know I'll keep reading! ~Caitlin Hull~ "The Holy Spirit makes up all our souls, and when it 'flexes' it makes us do great things." |
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EagleScorpion Senior Member
since 2000-03-08
Posts 1644Here, Now, Forever |
I loved your thoughts in this... |
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DreamLess Member
since 2001-02-28
Posts 92 |
thank you every one for taking from your time to read what i've wrote ...really greatful.. WRITTEN BY ME..(17 YRS HIGHSCHOOL GIRL) EASY ON ME.. I'M JUST AN AMATEUR |
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Lone Wolf Member Ascendant
since 2000-03-16
Posts 5842Lansing, MI USA |
DreamLess, Nice writing here. keep on practicing and it will all fall into place in time. Reading others work here will help you also. Welcome to passions.  Lone Wolf Poetry should surprise by fine excess...it should strike the reader as a wording of his own highest thoughts and appear almost a remembrance. -J.Keats |
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JLR Senior Member
since 2001-02-04
Posts 1785 |
You're doing great for an amateur! Looking forward to more. |
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Irish Rose Member Patricius
since 2000-04-06
Posts 10263 |
sadness...yes, I know about this......it should walk behind us Kathleen Blake "When red-haired girls scamper like roses over the rain-green grass, and the sun drips honey." Laurie Lee |
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Secret Whisper Member
since 2001-01-25
Posts 298Through the Looking Glass |
I hear you my friend. As a highschool girl myself I know what that kind of deep down pain and sorrow can feel like. Keeping fighting the war. Be strong, and keep writing. "Death marks the beginning, not the end. It is our journey to God." --Billy Graham |
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snowpants Member Elite
since 2000-09-16
Posts 2061KS |
Good expression of such a heavy feeling...great write! sp  do I believe we'd be better off apart? can I see my world without you in it? baby, not for a single minute... |
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Red-uni Member
since 2000-07-30
Posts 192Georgia, USA |
I know of sadness, and I know of the light at the end of the tunnel...keep writing. Take care, Red |
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Aimster Member Elite
since 2000-02-19
Posts 4297Charlotte, NC |
dreamless-- intense write you have here. you express your feelings quite well. first of your work that i read, and you can bet i'll be back to read more. really enjoyed this, though it is very sad. hold on to faith, there are brighter days ahead. till then, take care. amy "A friend is someone who knows the song in your heart & can sing it back to you when you have forgotten the words." |
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