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winter tanka
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winter tanka |
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Beki Senior Member
since 1999-09-15
Posts 1569Newport Beach, CA, USA |
This winter evening cold ocean fog rolls over high tide and sand berms; even hungry seagulls pause, shiver with its ghostly touch. |
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Kethry Member Rara Avis
since 2000-07-29
Posts 9082Victoria Australia |
Beki, Lovely Tanka, but what are sand berms? write on Kethry. Those of us who refuse to risk and grow get swallowed up by life. Patty Hansen. |
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Charisma
since 2000-09-30
Posts 5906lost in blue pages |
oh Beki .........see now I am shivering from the cold.....great one my friend.  Charisma |
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VAS Member Rara Avis
since 2000-11-16
Posts 7450Oregon |
Wow! This almost made me want to put on a sweater...that would have been a 3rd layer of clothing. |
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Lady In White
since 2001-02-12
Posts 2799USA |
Kethry "berm...a ledge..." Well done Beki....most enjoyable! |
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kaile
since 2000-02-06
Posts 5146singapore |
nice one...this reminds me of a haiku i read before..it goes something like this: the winter so cold- even the monkey needs a sweater |
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Poeminister Senior Member
since 2000-02-26
Posts 1862Regina SK; Canada |
I like this. Well done tanka. Poeminister |
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Gentle Spirit Member Patricius
since 2000-10-09
Posts 13989 |
I am a true sucker for the tanka form, and this is one of the finest examples I have ever seen. Well done, and beautiful. Enjoy life...this is NOT a dress rehearsal. *s* |
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Beki Senior Member
since 1999-09-15
Posts 1569Newport Beach, CA, USA |
Thanks everyone, I have experienced this fog often living my whol life in southern calif beach cities  Kethry, where i live there are many beach houses standing shoulder to shoulder for miles along the beach. Only a 5 foot wide sidewalk separates them from the sand.It is a fairly wide beach but still in extreme storm condiftions, as with El Nino a few years ago, the high tide can reach all the way to the houses causing flooding. So they started building these berms, 6 foot high ridges of sand, about 8 feet the other side of teh sidewalk from the houses...it seems to protect them better than the sand bags they used before. Unfortunately it also destroys their ocean view, and that of anyone walking on the beach along the sidewalk. But then again, very few houses are only one story high so they still have their second story view.... |
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Honeybee Member Ascendant
since 1999-12-26
Posts 5372Ontario, CANADA |
I really like this tanka, extremely well expressed! Take care, Melissa~ |
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Beki Senior Member
since 1999-09-15
Posts 1569Newport Beach, CA, USA |
Thank you Gentle and Melissa, I appreciate your comments |
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SEA 
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Member Seraphic
since 2000-01-18
Posts 22676with you |
Beki~ for me....when I lived at the coast, it was the sand dunes......I miss that fog SO much.....with the roar of the ocean, greeting me each morning and rocking me to sleep each night....*sigh* I miss it ......thank you for this tanka. SEA |
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Beki Senior Member
since 1999-09-15
Posts 1569Newport Beach, CA, USA |
It's my pleasure, Sea |
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Beki Senior Member
since 1999-09-15
Posts 1569Newport Beach, CA, USA |
now I have posted responses to others poems and they move to the top but my posts on my thread are not moving...what's up with that?  |
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Krawdad Member Elite
since 2001-01-03
Posts 2597 |
It's called the "unbump". One of the changes that came with the server switch last month. One of the moderators can explain it better than I can. Your answer in your own thread no longer bumps up the post. Oh, and nice tanka, by the way. I gotta start trying this extension to Haiku. You do it well. [This message has been edited by Krawdad (edited 02-28-2001).] |
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DreamLess Member
since 2001-02-28
Posts 92 |
FEW WORDS ...BUT IT GOT A REAL BIG MEANING KEEP THE GOOD WORK.. |
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ethome Member Patricius
since 2000-05-14
Posts 11858New Brunswick Canada |
Can be a ghostly touch can't it? Well done Beki! The poet is like a cocoon; in him the caterpillar of the past finds rest, and from him the butterfly of the future emerges. |
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Dee Member Elite
since 2000-08-19
Posts 2330Queensland, Australia |
I enjoyed this, Beki. Well done. And a bump for you! Dee I wish you every happiness and may you always have the best of the good things in life. a brand |
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Beki Senior Member
since 1999-09-15
Posts 1569Newport Beach, CA, USA |
Thanks again everyone, I am pleased so many could relate to my frequent experience with beach fog :-) As for the unbump feature, it kind of sucks, doesn't it? So often here because it is so busy posts get buried before they get read...doesn't seem quite fair. Oh well....c'est la vie! |
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