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Open Poetry #12

Red Thread And Sprinkles

SpitFire
Member Elite

since 2000-04-19

Posts 2396

0 posted 2001-02-25 10:07 PM

Red Thread And Sprinkles

Red Thread
my head.
Oh god
tied tight.
I was
a cat
fight - won.
I have hips,...
I have hips and sprinkles!

It was
honeydew
and ashes
and red thread all around!

She swam
then drowned.
Poor thing
was she.
So sad
her eyes.
Twisting there -
fluorescent skies.
Now gray.
She was
ink all
seeping.
Oh god
she's weeping!
Too careless
tonight - to see.
Red thread
red thread and sprinkles.

[This message has been edited by SpitFire (edited 02-25-2001).]

insect
Senior Member

since 2000-04-22

Posts 1014

1 posted 2001-02-25 10:32 PM

All right Fire!
Neat piece!
I love it.

insect
Senior Member

since 2000-04-22

Posts 1014

2 posted 2001-02-28 05:38 PM

I came back to do the bump with those
hips and sprinkles in red thread

catalinamoon

Member Rara Avis

since 2000-06-03

Posts 9543
The Shores of Alone

3 posted 2001-03-05 05:56 PM

Hey, this got swallowed without being seen. Awesome write, SF. Glad to see you here again.
S

jellybeans
Member Elite

since 2000-10-13

Posts 2298

4 posted 2001-03-05 06:00 PM

Red Thread
my head.
Oh god
tied tight.
I was
a cat
fight - won.
I have hips,...
I have hips and sprinkles!

love this beginning.....great stuff here

Martie

Moderator

Member Empyrean

since 1999-09-21

Posts 28049
California

5 posted 2001-03-05 08:47 PM

SpitFire--Hi...I really liked this...I'm not sure I understand it...but it caught me with the hips...yup, me too.

wayoutwalt
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since 1999-06-22

Posts 4870
TEXAS (it's all big)

6 posted 2001-03-05 08:54 PM

I understand the hips thing and I like that ALOT

Seymour Tabin
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since 1999-07-07

Posts 31720
Tamarac Fla

7 posted 2001-03-05 09:50 PM

Spitfire,
Interesting I enjoyed the read.

Red-uni
Member

since 2000-07-30

Posts 192
Georgia, USA

8 posted 2001-03-05 10:06 PM

Hi Spits,
Liked it.
Are you the spitfire that I know?
Red

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