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Mystic Moons, Guide My Way (thanks SEA)
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Mystic Moons, Guide My Way (thanks SEA) |
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Poet deVine
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-05-26
Posts 22612Hurricane Alley |
This is from a challenge phrase by SEA. I've written before of the 'Immortal Clan' a band of immortal women who have children with mortal men, then must kill them (like a black widow spider). In my poems, the mortals hunt the Immortal women - as no man can resist their tempting beauty. Mystic Moons, guide my way Tara, child of Immortal clan gained full her seven years smiles for all, this red-haired child rarely succumbed to childish tears A secret game of hide and seek only played by mortal kin though hidden now, Tara found a lesson learned for her sin Lost within the forest deep fear her guide this night she kept a silent vow that she would show no childish fright Immortal girls are early taught the ways of clannish lore mortal man will hunt them down to even ancient score So she began her childish chant “Mystic Moons, guide my way keep me safe Immortal Ones to live another day” As dawn’s first rays embraced Immortal child’s fiery head Tara found her safe haven and victory from her dread |
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Irish Rose Member Patricius
since 2000-04-06
Posts 10263 |
I like this very much, it has a very interesting theme, very unusual. "When red-haired girls scamper like roses over the rain-green grass, and the sun drips honey." Laurie Lee |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
And I will say it out loud...this great, but just a taste....we want more, don't we? (hear the applause?) I wanna know what happens to Tara.  MORE!!!! (ouch...serenity just burned her fingers holding aloft her bic lighter) |
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Mark Bohannan Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-21
Posts 7269In the winds of Cherokee song |
Now somehow this one doesn't seem quite right!!!! LOL Wonderful piece of FANTASY let's hope. Great write and I am fast coming to the agreement that you can write about anything when challenged. |
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Sunnyone Member Ascendant
since 2000-07-06
Posts 5334Staffordshire, England |
Ah, yes......I love fantasy-lore, and you have just proved how talented you are in all forms of writing!! This is really wonderful, and I, too, want more!! Live...Love...Be grateful for both!! |
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Poet deVine
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-05-26
Posts 22612Hurricane Alley |
Thank you all!! I was in a writing mood last night I guess..I will continue the tale..I promise.  |
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Sven
since 1999-11-23
Posts 14937East Lansing, MI USA |
WOO HOO! You know that I've always loved this series of yours. . . so glad that you've brought it back. . . -------------------------------------------------------- To the world, you may only be one person. But to one person, you may be the world. |
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SEA 
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Member Seraphic
since 2000-01-18
Posts 22676with you |
EXCELLENT!!!! I had that phrase running around in my head, and finally gave up on it......kept coming up empty.......this is amazing......looking forward to the rest of the story!! SEA |
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CocoBaci Member Elite
since 2000-05-06
Posts 3043 |
An outstanding write PDV... And I echo our PoetFriends above... "MORE...applause...MORE...applause" ~coco~ |
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Elizabeth
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Member Ascendant
since 1999-06-07
Posts 6871Minnesota |
Looking forward to the sequel! |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
DeVine One, Enjoyed this read, will be waiting for more. |
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bsquirrel
since 2000-01-03
Posts 7855 |
You're ah wonder t' watch at work... ********!!!! (verycool) She said burn ... together. |
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