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Here In My Room
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Here In My Room |
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JLR Senior Member
since 2001-02-04
Posts 1785 |
Here In My Room I won’t talk to you from this alcohol haze But I’ll talk to you here in my own room I wondered about giving up control I wondered about being myself You said it was safe You agreed that if you didn’t like what you saw You may as well know it was me. Well, it’s me babe Here in my own room Trusting you Not trusting---that what I’ve shown you is worth keeping You’ve got someone Right in front of you Talking, god knows what. How come, I’ve wanted to get to know you Yet you’ve only been concerned with How I felt about you How she felt about you How much have you told either of us-------what you felt? Go ahead…get pissed I got nothing to lose Here in my room Talking to you Where you can’t hear Me saying to you I love you I will die if I don’t have you----- Only here in my room. Will you ever hear this. |
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Celeste Senior Member
since 2000-11-11
Posts 597 |
the hurt and pain of this brings tears to my eyes. An emotional writing. And in writing we find freedom. Hugs, Kellie "The secret of change is to focus all of your energy, not on fighting the old, but on building the new. Socrates |
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Nate Dogg Senior Member
since 1999-11-15
Posts 1658Georgia, Fulton |
What a sad write, JLR...wonderful job! Nathan |
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walker Member Elite
since 2001-02-11
Posts 2240Florida |
Very emotional and sad, but worth expressing. |
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Moon Dust
since 1999-06-11
Posts 2177Skelmersdale, UK |
Beauiful writing. ~FKA Maria Byrne~ |
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Member Seraphic
since 2000-01-18
Posts 22676with you |
my gosh.....this made my heart ache......and made me wonder......fantastic!  SEA |
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JLR Senior Member
since 2001-02-04
Posts 1785 |
Dream, Nate, Walker, Moon, Sea--- Thanks for responding. I wrote this several months ago and happened to come across it last night. Thanks again. |
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Lady In White
since 2001-02-12
Posts 2799USA |
I enjoy your work, but I do appreciate the lighter side of your verse....this is very moving... |
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jellybeans Member Elite
since 2000-10-13
Posts 2298 |
sad but honest...honesty is a great quality for penetrating writing...and this is |
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Sven
since 1999-11-23
Posts 14937East Lansing, MI USA |
Isn't it strange what we'll say when we're alone in our rooms??? Wonderful JLR. . . ---------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------- To the world, you may only be one person. But to one person, you may be the world. |
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Aimster Member Elite
since 2000-02-19
Posts 4297Charlotte, NC |
JLR~ this was truly a very honest poem..the pain speaks volumes in this...but it is good that you are writing through it. as a wise poet is always telling me...by writing it, we live through it... and with that comes healing. hope things start to look up for you soon. take care amy "A friend is someone who knows the song in your heart & can sing it back to you when you have forgotten the words." |
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ATelamon Member
since 2001-02-06
Posts 328Purgatory, Last Staircase, Up |
Do we ever know the unsaid or what is heard can we ever hope to reach a moment of simple pure honesty exacts its own toll more than giving to open the all and it be missed our soliloqy improvied or reahearsed the effect trough fog is always the same And yet we ponder If I had said it differently it would have made no difference "From the moment I reached out to Hold, I felt a song" J Anderson |
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JLR Senior Member
since 2001-02-04
Posts 1785 |
Lady----Wish I could find the lighter side again Jelly----Porbably the only place I don't lie is here Sven----And aren't we glad no one else can hear it...unless, of course, we choose to betray our own privacy for the sake of the word. Amy----Thank you for rebreaking the ice. When you're flat on your back, there's nowhere to look but up (or so they tell me---Ha! I just keep rolling over). AT----You enhance me. Thank you for the Time! |
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ParisGrl Senior Member
since 2000-06-01
Posts 610 |
R.J. Am I an open book??? LOL Again i could have written this one. We are to much alike. It's good to vent isn't? I love the alcohol haze part. :-) Keep up the good work! TTYS! ~Laura~ |
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Paula Finn Member Ascendant
since 2000-06-17
Posts 5546missouri |
And arent you glad wall dont talk? I know I am...for the secrets they hold...the lies Ive told myself within them...the screams no one else ever hears...you really touched me with this one |
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Saunni Senior Member
since 2000-07-11
Posts 1777West Virginia |
Oh how sad.....but put into words so well! Sauni Sauni :) Have you ever known the color grey when the nighttime finds you weak I have, I've walked that road each time; that's where my angel sleeps |
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Irish Rose Member Patricius
since 2000-04-06
Posts 10263 |
I wish I could stop talking to myself, I've been answering lately... Kathleen Blake "When red-haired girls scamper like roses over the rain-green grass, and the sun drips honey." Laurie Lee |
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