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| Open Poetry #12 |
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Shadows of My Dreams (thanks Moondust!) |
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Poet deVine
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-05-26
Posts 22612Hurricane Alley |
Thanks to Moondust for the challenge phrase: Shadows of my dreams She, in white lace floating He, in formal tux black Together down the aisle as one, no turning back. I, watching from the edge of a circle I cannot join This would have been mine but for the flipping of a coin He chose to leave, heads I chose to stay, tails now I know loneliness and all that it entails Tears create a shadow world everything in half light it seems you live in her brightness I, in the shadows of my dreams |
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Elizabeth
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Member Ascendant
since 1999-06-07
Posts 6871Minnesota |
I like this....may have to borrow these challenge phrases. Beautifully done. |
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Poet deVine
Administrator
Member Seraphic
since 1999-05-26
Posts 22612Hurricane Alley |
Help yourself..we've started a list of them in the Challenge Forum!  |
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doreen peri Member Elite
since 1999-05-25
Posts 3812Virginia |
excellent writing, sharon!! many good lines and phrases in here...... |
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Irish Rose Member Patricius
since 2000-04-06
Posts 10263 |
a touch of sadness, but beautiful! "When red-haired girls scamper like roses over the rain-green grass, and the sun drips honey." Laurie Lee |
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Poeminister Senior Member
since 2000-02-26
Posts 1862Regina SK; Canada |
Wonderfully penned...enjoyed the read. Poeminister |
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Nate Dogg Senior Member
since 1999-11-15
Posts 1658Georgia, Fulton |
Beautifully written, I love this....brilliant poem! Nathan |
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Kit McCallum
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Member Laureate
since 2000-04-30
Posts 14774Ontario, Canada |
Wonderful Sharon! You captured such a tender mood in this piece ... the sighs of lost dreams echo beautifully in these lines. Very nicely done! Best wishes, /Kit |
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Alicat Member Elite
since 1999-05-23
Posts 4094Coastal Texas |
Whoa, deVine one! This one took me back, and showed me unconcealed memories. Not good, not bad....just memories, slightly faded and dogeared from much past perusal. Time doesn't heal all wounds. On the contrary, Time only allows one to adjust to the pain. You continue to amaze me. Alicat |
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Poet deVine
Administrator
Member Seraphic
since 1999-05-26
Posts 22612Hurricane Alley |
Thank you all...but part of the credit for this one goes to Moon Dust's phrase..it triggered my sleeping Muse! |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
, watching from the edge of a circle I cannot join This would have been mine but for the flipping of a coin He chose to leave, heads I chose to stay, tails now I know loneliness and all that it entails Tears create a shadow world everything in half light it seems you live in her brightness I, in the shadows of my dreams ============= talk about a bittersweet turn of phrase this is written with an ironic ache of unrequited that lifts off the page very well written and expressed Sharon and the cadence is perfect Strange ... the desire for certain pleasures is a part of my pain. ~Kahlil Gibran~ |
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Moon Dust
since 1999-06-11
Posts 2177Skelmersdale, UK |
Lovely use of my line there, I been trying to think what I could do with it for months ~Maria~ [This message has been edited by Moon Dust (edited 02-24-2001).] |
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Charisma
since 2000-09-30
Posts 5906lost in blue pages |
wonderful penned.....loved reading this excellent piece. Charisma |
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Gentle Spirit Member Patricius
since 2000-10-09
Posts 13989 |
Hauntingly beautiful PDevine. You took the challenge and responded excellently. A keeper for the library. *s* Enjoy life...this is NOT a dress rehearsal. *s* |
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Voiceless Senior Member
since 2001-02-19
Posts 686Under the stars upon the wind |
Great.. The scene beautiful and the way you write just as beautiful.. |
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