Open Poetry #12 |
Natures Law |
OLIAS Senior Member
since 2000-06-20
Posts 1090Pearl city Iowa |
Natures Law Slumped in the singles bar, my favourite hyde of anonymity, I surveyed the marble serenghetti, the herd of hearts grazing before me. Humming birds flitting from frying pan to fire, bewildered wilderbeast, drowning in cocktailed waterholes, and versace clad vultures, preening and posturing, twenty two carat talons, perched high on chrome pedestals, looking for prey. Intrigue, one lone predator breaks, wheels around the room, eyes bourbon bright, prey spotted, injured from neglect, bleeding from lost love, dying for affection. In a flurry of gold cards and silk, the strike, predator and prey gone, half an hour later, a flapping of cell phones, the rest, licentiously picking over the bones of machismo. Olias. |
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Poet deVine
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-05-26
Posts 22612Hurricane Alley |
Marvelous!!!! Perfect description of a singles bar!! |
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SEA
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Member Seraphic
since 2000-01-18
Posts 22676with you |
WOW!! LOVE this!! Absolutely perfect........... SEA |
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OLIAS Senior Member
since 2000-06-20
Posts 1090Pearl city Iowa |
P.D. Thank you for your reply, you can where I spend most of my time lol. SEA, Thanks for your kind comment, it was much appreciated. Regards to you both, Olias. |
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suthern
since 1999-07-29
Posts 20723Louisiana |
This depiction was so great I could smell the smoke and spilled drinks... and see the slump of shoulders going home alone to scrub off the artificial sparkle... great job! |
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Sunshine
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
Wow....perfect in presentation....I enjoyed every word as it is the truth of nature.... well done, Olias.... |
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JLR Senior Member
since 2001-02-04
Posts 1785 |
'Eyes bourbon bright'...loved this especially and all the rest. |
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sonagolese Junior Member
since 2001-02-26
Posts 18Virginia |
Beautifully seedy and provocative imagery...outstanding!! |
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Effigy Member
since 2000-04-11
Posts 486disbelief |
Outstanding. Comepletely outstanding. I loved this. Very well done. |
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OLIAS Senior Member
since 2000-06-20
Posts 1090Pearl city Iowa |
Suthern, You cant scrub away the sparkle in your soul, thank you for your reply. Sunshine, Thank you for your kind comments, be well. JLR, Bourbon eyes are a hazard of bars me thinks, thanks for replying, take care. Sonagolese, Welcome to passions and thanks for taking the time to read and comment, much appreciated. Effigy, Your very kind, its funny that wherever you go in the world, bars speak a universal truth.Thank you for your comments. Regards to everyone. Olias. |
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