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OLIAS Senior Member
since 2000-06-20
Posts 1090Pearl city Iowa 
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Cyber You are my eprom, erasable, irresistable you, Our love, silicon stacked, micro etched, over clocked speed, no convoluted curlings of archaic banyan vines can hold us, we sing the ether net, our route is clear, we need no verification to connect, from quirky qwerty to wet wire, complete, I have your number, forever lying in my subnet mask, we no longer wear, you are my rock, my static IP, dynamic but unmoved, the hot metal hype of the world flows over us, but our connection is constant, living only for those days, of beautiful bio interface. Olias. |
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Meadowmuse Member Elite
since 1999-12-27
Posts 3263 |
Olias, what a clever poem. A modern modem love story. Very innovative. Thanks for it. Claire Could a greater miracle take place than for us to look through each other's eyes for an instant?......Henry David Thoreau |
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Member Seraphic
since 2000-01-18
Posts 22676with you |
Yes, very clever! Well done  SEA |
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VAS Member Rara Avis
since 2000-11-16
Posts 7450Oregon |
Indeed clever. May no one sever your cyber connection. The fibers around the west seem to get severed every so often. It's like being placed in limbo until they are fixed. btw, I do think there are some commas that need removing, see what you think |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
You are my eprom, erasable, irresistable you, Our love, silicon stacked, micro etched, over clocked speed, no convoluted curlings of archaic banyan vines can hold us, we sing the ether net, our route is clear, ==================== very cool writing Olias... great use of metaphor and high tech imagery to make your poetic point unique and clever vocabulary choices very well done poet sir Strange ... the desire for certain pleasures is a part of my pain. ~Kahlil Gibran~ |
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OLIAS Senior Member
since 2000-06-20
Posts 1090Pearl city Iowa |
Thank you all for your very kind words, this is my second attempt at this subject and I'm quite pleased at the outcome, its very good to know I almost hit the right spot. Regards to you all Olias. |
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OLIAS Senior Member
since 2000-06-20
Posts 1090Pearl city Iowa |
Vas, Thanks for the suggestion about the comma's sometimes I tend to go overboard, in future I'll try and practise much more restraint. Take care. Regards, Olias. |
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Paula Finn Member Ascendant
since 2000-06-17
Posts 5546missouri |
Very clever indeed...tho I have to admit for a puter illiterate like me you had me scurrying for the DOS for Dummies LOL...way cool write |
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ATelamon Member
since 2001-02-06
Posts 328Purgatory, Last Staircase, Up |
"so said Olias to build a ship" Ahh how dances the MoorGlade Mover??? From your words, construction and test flights go well. AT All will be made claer in time "Decisions are Dominoes. Pause to reflect, before you set them in motion. |
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OLIAS Senior Member
since 2000-06-20
Posts 1090Pearl city Iowa |
Paula, Thanks for your reply, I'm using my copy of poetry for dummies, its very dog eared. AT, Your words are very kind, and from here Sunhillow is lovely, take care my friend. Regards to you both Olias. |
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