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kaile
since 2000-02-06
Posts 5146singapore 
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an intruding beep an inanimate message "the sky is clear tonight" slowly squashed to exasperating existence by overbearing obligations I marvelled at how you found your delight in the distant stars, not remotely relevant to our lives p/s:I did go out and witness the majesty of the stars though |
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Temptress
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Member Rara Avis
since 1999-06-15
Posts 7136Mobile, AL |
 This is too good to be on the bottom of the page already. A bump because I enjoyed this very much and think others should see it.  |
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Lone Wolf Member Ascendant
since 2000-03-16
Posts 5842Lansing, MI USA |
Heavenly perspective, kaile. Very nicely described.  LW Poetry should surprise by fine excess...it should strike the reader as a wording of his own highest thoughts and appear almost a remembrance. -J.Keats |
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Cerenity Member Elite
since 2000-02-16
Posts 2637Escondido-California |
Hi Kaile, "I marvelled at how you found your delight in the distant stars, not remotely relevant to our lives" This piece is spectacular I mean it and the lines above amazing, I have found this to be so true of a statement, to my library thank you so much, I just love finding such goodies, Love, Cerenity "God doesn't have to be reminded that we exist. We have to be reminded that He exist!" (Writer Unknown) |
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VAS Member Rara Avis
since 2000-11-16
Posts 7450Oregon |
OOOhhhhh, I'm glad you took time to take them in...He didn't put them there to just 'hang' but to sparkle the night and enamor your dreams...surely! |
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Saunni Senior Member
since 2000-07-11
Posts 1777West Virginia |
Truly amazing and beautiful! I loved this one! Sauni Sauni :) Have you ever known the color grey when the nighttime finds you weak I have, I've walked that road each time; that's where my angel sleeps |
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Irish Rose Member Patricius
since 2000-04-06
Posts 10263 |
The stars witnessed to you didn't they? "When red-haired girls scamper like roses over the rain-green grass, and the sun drips honey." Laurie Lee |
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ethome Member Patricius
since 2000-05-14
Posts 11858New Brunswick Canada |
I don't know Kaile but the others are commenting on the beauty of the stars which I agree are so beautiful...but is there something else there, like maybe frustration with a mate that has gone distant on you...or maybe it's just me...whichever it's a very thought provoking write! The poet is like a cocoon; in him the caterpillar of the past finds rest, and from him the butterfly of the future emerges. |
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Cerenity Member Elite
since 2000-02-16
Posts 2637Escondido-California |
Ethome, I thought the same as you, thats why I thought it was so wonderful how she put it, I find this happening all of the time to me and I think this very way, but the way she put it was just so perfect, Cerenity |
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mystic requiem Member
since 2001-01-26
Posts 144 |
Wonderful insight to how someone has chosen the best in the life. The stars are free for anyone to gaze upon. Great!! *thanx*   [This message has been edited by mystic requiem (edited 02-28-2001).] |
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Sven
since 1999-11-23
Posts 14937East Lansing, MI USA |
distance and not relevance. . . excellent kaile. . . ------------------------------------------------------- To the world, you may only be one person. But to one person, you may be the world. |
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