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The Recipe |
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Martie
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since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California 
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The Recipe In the hallowed bread of life slice me thin and give me time to express all the grainy probity absorb all the scented oil Cook me slow in embers glow like a fluff of marshmallow turned ‘til the burn takes hold in flame to melt a heart revealing Risen aged this harbinger sweet with springtime planting to log this dreary day in haze of countryside concealing Pebbles of ice have touched me and thrown their spite on lawn but now a gentle quiet voice will keep the dough from falling Heaven's parted open gate absorbs the pipes that play the cloth is open clean and dry so stay no more in weeping Down the fragment of each crumb a flowered hand has softened for time kneads dough with knowing hands and oven warm is keeping [This message has been edited by Martie (edited 02-23-2001).] |
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SEA 
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Member Seraphic
since 2000-01-18
Posts 22676with you |
Martie, this is wonderful.......  SEA |
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Voiceless Senior Member
since 2001-02-19
Posts 686Under the stars upon the wind |
A word of wisdom, in the form of cooking! Well done! ~*Peachy Be*~ |
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Denise
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since 1999-08-22
Posts 22648 |
Very creative, very beautifully expressed, Martie!!! |
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Severn Member Rara Avis
since 1999-07-17
Posts 7704 |
Lovely lovely Martie - as usual... sigh - you really are my poetic click yanno? Just a couple of errors to point out: 'and thrown there spite on lawn' - their and 'Heavens parted open gate' - Heaven's I don't have the energy to critique lol...hugs dear..see you soon!  K |
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Martie
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
Sea--thank you for the wonderful reply. Voiceless--Loved your "well done" play on words. Denise--thanks for your sweetness. Kamla--I need to go back to English 101...thanks! |
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Poeminister Senior Member
since 2000-02-26
Posts 1862Regina SK; Canada |
Love this, very creative and beautifully penned. Poeminister |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
In the hallowed bread of life slice me thin and give me time to express all the grainy probity absorb all the scented oil =================== ‘til the burn takes hold in flame to melt a heart revealing ================== Pebbles of ice have touched me and thrown their spite on lawn but now a gentle quiet voice will keep the dough from falling ================ Down the fragment of each crumb a flowered hand has softened for time kneads dough with knowing hands and oven warm is keeping ================= oh I love the feel of this..its whole essence very clever and unique writing Martie such cool use of metaphor... "so stay no more in weeping" what a beautiful little line that is ... this whole poem is a slice of Heaven ... with the crusts left on  awesome my sweet poetess Strange ... the desire for certain pleasures is a part of my pain. ~Kahlil Gibran~ |
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ethome Member Patricius
since 2000-05-14
Posts 11858New Brunswick Canada |
"for time kneads dough with knowing hands." I don't know how anyone could disagree with that! I love this recipe Martie it reminds me of the other wonderful creative works you have composed...thanks for sharing this one....take care ethome The poet is like a cocoon; in him the caterpillar of the past finds rest, and from him the butterfly of the future emerges. |
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ATelamon Member
since 2001-02-06
Posts 328Purgatory, Last Staircase, Up |
Like others the line of "time kneading..." Stuck out as probably the most forceful line. But the metaphor whole was certainly pulled from the oven with near perfect timing. AT "Decisions are Dominoes. Pause to reflect, before you set them in motion. |
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Mike Member Elite
since 1999-06-19
Posts 2462 |
wonderful poetry as always... enjoy you pennings muchly. |
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