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Magic Tonight............
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Magic Tonight............ |
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SEA 
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Member Seraphic
since 2000-01-18
Posts 22676with you 
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Tonight was made for magic dreams to come true sweet enchantment an incantation for two Fairies playing music quiet whispers in rhyme with their thoughtful gesture stopped the hands of time A mystical potion flavor bursting for lips to taste slowly.............savoring............ nothing done in haste Eyes so bewitching lost in each other's gaze surrounded in quiet light .......the moon's caressing rays I feel your touch.....before we touch our Aura's mesh and sigh in each other's arms this night for you and I Our dance begins and so the spell has been cast two hearts ~ now beat as one with love meant to last ~SEA~ [This message has been edited by SEA (edited 02-23-2001).] |
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Voiceless Senior Member
since 2001-02-19
Posts 686Under the stars upon the wind |
A beautiful and timeless thing that we all dream to have happen to us. Beautiful!! ~*Peachy Be*~ |
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Agust P Member
since 2000-12-29
Posts 157 |
A beautiful poem, I liked it a lot, thanks! AP |
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snowpants Member Elite
since 2000-09-16
Posts 2061KS |
'Tonight was made for magic dreams to come true sweet enchantment an incantation for two' 'Eyes so bewitching lost in each other's gaze surrounded in quiet light .......the moon's caressing rays' Ya know, SEA, you just write the most romantic stuff! This, most definitely included! I love it!! sp  everytime I close my eyes, I see your face, I taste you on my lips... every night I fantasize that I can feel you on my fingertips... |
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VAS Member Rara Avis
since 2000-11-16
Posts 7450Oregon |
Very nice, lyrical and mesmerizing. I will say the last stanza seems to depart from the rhythm a bit and is not as strong as the rest. This is such a beautiful piece, I think it would be great to try to tweak that last stanza just a tiny bit. What do you think? Is it just the way I read it or do you feel a different rhythm, too? |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
Oh my ... this is rhyme divine.. Sea-girlie .. you are inspired and desired in this gem of your pen this is one of your best me thinks... very well written... the imagery and anticipation are written so that they have a dreamy, magical feeling to them... magic fairy dust sprinkled on this one  very cool write my gator girl Love is my religion, I believe in nothing else. To find that inspiration, live that inner vision. Love is my religion...I believe in you. ~T Kimmel |
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walker Member Elite
since 2001-02-11
Posts 2240Florida |
Love's sweet potion must be sipped slowly,so that we trully taste it. Very romantic indeed! A quarter of a century must pass, for the writer to understand what and why he writes. |
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JLR Senior Member
since 2001-02-04
Posts 1785 |
I have decided to read every poem I can find of yours...so that maybe, as you said...I can do romance. |
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SEA
Moderator
Member Seraphic
since 2000-01-18
Posts 22676with you |
Voiceless~ thank you  AP~ glad you liked! Thanks SP~ makin me blush....thank you for the love it! VAS~ I dunno, I like the last stanza, but I'm sure there were other ways for it to go....do you have any suggestions? I'd love to read them....thank you Janet~to have you say such nice things makes me feel sooooo good...thank you Walker~ thank you!! JLR~ ok, I'll be waiting for one from you........... ~SEA |
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Poeminister Senior Member
since 2000-02-26
Posts 1862Regina SK; Canada |
SEA--enchanting.. soft... dreamy,...a pleasure to experience as always your writes are...beautifully penned. Poeminister "At the touch of love, everyone becomes a poet." -Plato |
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Martie
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
Sea--Such a sweet treasure of love you have shared in this poem...beautiful! |
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Lone Wolf Member Ascendant
since 2000-03-16
Posts 5842Lansing, MI USA |
SEA, You are making me *sigh*. This is beautiful my friend. Sounds like the perfect evening for two! LW Poetry should surprise by fine excess...it should strike the reader as a wording of his own highest thoughts and appear almost a remembrance. -J.Keats |
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wayoutwalt Member Elite
since 1999-06-22
Posts 4870TEXAS (it's all big) |
hope it does sea and if not then write on and if does that too |
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Marge Tindal
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
Oh, SEA~Gal~ I LIKE where you went with this beauty ! My favorite part ~ 'Our dance begins and so the spell has been cast two hearts ~ now beat as one with love meant to last' What better ending is there than this ? Two hearts - into one. So very you ! Just amazing how you let love touch you and take you on a magical trip such as this each time. Lucky girl ... *kissed* by the magic poet fairy dust ! Love ya' ~*Marge*~ ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~ noles1@totcon.com |
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Aimster Member Elite
since 2000-02-19
Posts 4297Charlotte, NC |
SEA~ oh girl lovely write this is! beautiful just simply beautiful. such a delicate and moving poem from your heart. truly wonderful...the love shines in this. take care amy "A friend is someone who knows the song in your heart & can sing it back to you when you have forgotten the words." |
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Rex Allen McCoy Member Elite
since 2000-01-30
Posts 2863Sippin a Timmy's in London |
Very nice Sea ... I like magical love stories ... I tend to write that way sometimes too Hey ... love is magic right? |
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Paula Finn Member Ascendant
since 2000-06-17
Posts 5546missouri |
Sea...this is just so very lovely and I can feel the magic |
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EagleOne Member Elite
since 2000-03-07
Posts 2829Between a laugh and a tear... |
Delightful! "I've done all the dumb things"....Paul Kelly |
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Cerenity Member Elite
since 2000-02-16
Posts 2637Escondido-California |
Hi Sea, Lovely ride through a dreamy magical night, Love, Cerenity "God doesn't have to be reminded that we exist. We have to be reminded that He exist!" (Writer Unknown) |
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suthern
since 1999-07-29
Posts 20723Louisiana |
I like this very much, SEA... especially the last verse which is wrapped in hope. *S* |
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SEA
Moderator
Member Seraphic
since 2000-01-18
Posts 22676with you |
Thank you all so very much for your sweet comments! SEA |
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Bill Charles Member Patricius
since 2000-07-11
Posts 10619highways, & byways, for now |
SEA - I almost missed this one. A romantic beauty you have done. I'm glad I saw this! BC |
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SEA
Moderator
Member Seraphic
since 2000-01-18
Posts 22676with you |
BC~ thank you so much! SEA |
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