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Echoes of Your love
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Echoes of Your love |
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CocoBaci Member Elite
since 2000-05-06
Posts 3043 |
Echoes of Your Love I know we've said once before We can't go back to times before But how can I dim this light When you whisper to me in dark of night... Today and always I'm in your heart This carousel that I ride on Keeping me in conflicting spin Between reality of you not here And dreams of what could have been So, around and around these feelings whirl As I try to dismount from the ache of turmoil And ask myself with exhausted breath What more could we have changed If my only wrong was believing You loved me every day Since you chose to leave this home Your memory still a flirtatous taunt Like the dates circled on calendar page That change in theme each month And so I plea with all my might With each drop of ink from pen To release me from the solitude Where my heart is caged inside a dream This place amid the hush of echoes Of love you hold for me... Today and always I'm in your heart ~coco~  [This message has been edited by CocoBaci (edited 02-23-2001).] |
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SEA 
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Member Seraphic
since 2000-01-18
Posts 22676with you |
Coco~ a very emotional read from you........pulling at my heart.....very well done!!  SEA |
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Agent696_DS Junior Member
since 2001-01-31
Posts 33NY, USA |
Excellent piece I really felt it... |
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Interloper
since 2000-11-06
Posts 8369Deep in the heart |
Well done and tugging at my heart strings. A big HUG for you! Live for love. Without love, you don't live. |
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Voiceless Senior Member
since 2001-02-19
Posts 686Under the stars upon the wind |
Your feelings flow through it.. well done... ~*Peachy Be*~ |
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JamesMichael Member Empyrean
since 1999-11-16
Posts 33336Kapolei, Hawaii, USA |
I know this feeling...to desperately hold onto love we shared...James |
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CocoBaci Member Elite
since 2000-05-06
Posts 3043 |
PoetFriends, SEA-AGENT696-LOPER-VOICELESS-JAMESMICHAEL, Thank you all so very much for your kindness in reply and hugs2u5 for reading the heart that talks sometime in rhyme Psst.. SEA nice 2 see you again sweetie ~coco~ |
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snowpants Member Elite
since 2000-09-16
Posts 2061KS |
'I know we've said once before We can't go back to times before But how can I dim this light When you whisper to me in dark of night... Today and always I'm in your heart' Beautifully written poem from you, coco! Wonderful expression of such longing! sp  everytime I close my eyes, I see your face, I taste you on my lips... every night I fantasize that I can feel you on my fingertips... |
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SEA
Moderator
Member Seraphic
since 2000-01-18
Posts 22676with you |
Psst......Coco......I've missed reading you........(and everyone else) SEA |
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walker Member Elite
since 2001-02-11
Posts 2240Florida |
Sad but sooooo CAPTIVATING. Love it! A quarter of a century must pass, for the writer to understand what and why he writes. |
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JLR Senior Member
since 2001-02-04
Posts 1785 |
Between reality...and dreams. Well, there lies just about everything we know as love. Beautiful! |
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Martie
Moderator
Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
Coco--Very emotive and touching poem, my friend...I think I remember the place where you are in the poem...and it felt just like that. |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
But how can I dim this light When you whisper to me in dark of night... Today and always I'm in your heart ================== Since you chose to leave this home Your memory still a flirtatous taunt Like the dates circled on calendar page That change in theme each month And so I plea with all my might With each drop of ink from pen To release me from the solitude Where my heart is caged inside a dream This place amid the hush of echoes Of love you hold for me... Today and always I'm in your heart ==================== I LOVE THIS!!! what an expressive impassioned plea and purge wonderful writing Coco just laying it all out on your sleeve and the page... "Your memory still a flirtatous taunt Like the dates circled on calendar page That change in theme each month" what a very cool metaphor that is... excellent work poetess!! Strange ... the desire for certain pleasures is a part of my pain. ~Kahlil Gibran~ |
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ALIKUTWO New Member
since 2001-02-23
Posts 3 |
I chose to read this poem because of the title,looking for the echoes which I understood to be the candle shape of the concrete poem nicely done. |
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VAS Member Rara Avis
since 2000-11-16
Posts 7450Oregon |
So much passion in your message! |
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Poeminister Senior Member
since 2000-02-26
Posts 1862Regina SK; Canada |
Poigniantly expressed...wonderful write. Poeminister |
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EagleOne Member Elite
since 2000-03-07
Posts 2829Between a laugh and a tear... |
I don't know what else to say except Wow! Another excellent write from your pen, take care! "I've done all the dumb things"....Paul Kelly |
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CocoBaci Member Elite
since 2000-05-06
Posts 3043 |
Snowpants, you know I just adore that name and thank you sweetie for your friendly replySea, Walker, thank you for the 'captivating' I appreciate your reply JLR, you're so right PoetFriend and thank you for commenting once again Martie, my dear friend, thank you hun for your comments on this poem embrace my heart JM, you're a treasure of a friend and I trust you know that your poetry as well as your replies to all who reside among these pages blue always leave us with smiles in our hearts and well okay I confess tears too because you write so beautifully... Thank you PoetFriend ALI, thank you for taking a peak and I appreciate your reply to me VAS, your right sweetie, it's all about that element of "passion" yearning for that once upon love that in this poem only resides in dreams... Your reply was truly wonderful and I thank you hun Poe, you're too kind sweetie, and I hope you know it's a treat for me to have your tender replies show up on screen... hugs2u2PoetFriend EAGLE, my friend, nice to see you come by and I'm truly delighted that you found this to be an enjoyed read... this means alot to me |
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suthern
since 1999-07-29
Posts 20723Louisiana |
This carousel that I ride on Keeping me in conflicting spin Between reality of you not here And dreams of what could have been Sometimes those echoes whisper and sometimes they scream... and neither voice gives answers. This is powerful and painful... well done, Coco! |
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jonmcm Member
since 2000-10-11
Posts 222England |
A wonderful poem to read Cheers Jon |
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CocoBaci Member Elite
since 2000-05-06
Posts 3043 |
Suthern, thank you for your comments and I concur with what you said in reply with regards to perhaps the echoes may sometimes be whispers or in some cases crying screams and btw I'm truly glad you let me know that you stopped by Jon, thank you for your kind reply and I'm pleased to know that you've enjoyed my poem ~coco~ |
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