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wayoutwalt
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0 posted 2001-02-22 12:10 PM


They fly as if through hidden waves
Beget from towers that stab the air
Their's, it's said, is a widened path
Though their power is surely there


The tower snakes from charcoal earth
Born of time and ancient pyre
Callused hands chart out its birth
So they can slash the length of wire

Seek the temple to shield the hate
And find the destroyers at the door
No service for their distracting ways
Still for later, they will not ignore

From the towers, to clear their message
They bounce about the callused earth
They change the minds of all the weary
Who want their power to match their worth

From ear to ear the grin is shedding
The destroyers have turned another mind
Through the unseen, they travel lightly
And leave still another tower behind

I won't be a communicator of sin
I will not spend my days in hiding
Wherefore in trade for lost connection
Jesus Christ, my Lord residing!

I, in the temple of the sacred holy
Deny connection to the deceiver
Take forth a vow to become a temple
And slam down the dead receiver

I step onto the soggy ground
Voices whisper, I stand not fearing
In the world of the unbeliever
It’s God who gave me hearing


They fly as if through raging storm
Beget from God who gave them sight
That all may seek the mighty glory
They shine as beacons in the night


Turn off the power of the destroyer’s hate
Find a shield but do not hide
Become a temple and disrupt the service
To the dark and wretched evil side


Dream of flight through sky so pure
Beget from God who snuffed out sin
There’ll be a time when towers fall
Let us, now, prepare for heaven then.







[This message has been edited by wayoutwalt (edited 02-22-2001).]

© Copyright 2001 Walt Burns - All Rights Reserved
Saxoness
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1 posted 2001-02-22 03:25 AM


Walt. This completely struck me dumb. It's absolutely marvelous...I'm in Awe. Bravo on a masterpiece.

"Glory remains unaware of my neglected dwelling where alone
I sing my tearful song which has charms only for me."


[This message has been edited by Saxoness (edited 02-22-2001).]

ethome
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2 posted 2001-02-22 04:53 AM


Hey Walt this is sooo very good I loved it!!

The poet is like a cocoon; in him the caterpillar of the past finds rest, and from him the butterfly of the future emerges.

Irish Rose
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3 posted 2001-02-22 05:52 AM



"Find a shield but do not hide"

YOU'RE one of the poets I came back for, to read and be inspired!
way to go wayoutwalt!!!!!!!!!

"When red-haired girls scamper like roses over the rain-green grass,
and the sun drips honey."
Laurie Lee





[This message has been edited by Kathleen (edited 02-22-2001).]

wayoutwalt
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4 posted 2001-02-22 10:04 AM


saxoness, et, and kathleen you inspire me to keep on. thanky muchly
elisaseyes
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5 posted 2001-02-22 03:11 PM


Sweetheart... many thoughts here
Sunshine
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6 posted 2001-02-22 03:24 PM


Well done Walt....this reads as it took a lifetime to prepare...

don't tell me you snapped it out in a moment....

Enjoyed, very much!

JamesMichael
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7 posted 2001-02-22 03:52 PM


Walt I enjoyed reading your poem...very meaningful...James
Poet deVine
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8 posted 2001-02-22 07:13 PM


Interesting..this is a different style than your usual..it's nice to see you stretching yourself. There is a darkness in this and an underlying theme that I am unable to fathom. I'm sure you'll tell me what it is!!
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9 posted 2001-02-22 07:16 PM


........directly to my library........
Meadowmuse
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10 posted 2001-02-22 07:22 PM


Ah, so this is what became of it ~ it's wonderful, Walt.

Claire

Could a greater miracle take place than for us to look through each other's eyes for an instant?......Henry David Thoreau


wayoutwalt
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11 posted 2001-02-22 09:42 PM


thanking you all for the positive replies and yuh PDV i explained well?
Nan
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12 posted 2001-02-22 10:17 PM


Nicely done, walt - You present a conflict and poetically resolve it in wonderful style - I, too, enjoy seeing you show the diversity of your talents, my friend..
cruz
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13 posted 2001-02-24 09:11 PM


i like the thought surrounding this one. this new age of telecommunication and it doesnt even work. Im in this elevator at school and I get no signal on my phone. It makes me want to break down my communication. I like how you can translate everyday life into "poet" (hahaha)! I picture these towering snakes bouncing waves of info to and fro satellites and other towering snakes. It looks like you see them fighting with regular phone lines (so they can slash the length of wire). The ending is the most powerful part of your poe. My preparation has begun.
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14 posted 2001-02-24 09:17 PM


I bow down to the writer
of another great poem!


~*Peachy Be*~

JLR
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15 posted 2001-02-24 09:23 PM


Well...this is different for you and I really love it! You are so full of surprises.
wayoutwalt
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16 posted 2001-02-24 10:47 PM


wow thank you all
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17 posted 2001-02-26 07:37 PM


Powerful and inspiring, Walt. I did enjoy this.
Dark Angel
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18 posted 2001-02-26 10:17 PM


Well, Mr Minokie, you have penned pretty powerful images here. I am flabergasted heheh in a wonderful way of course.

Love this side of you m'dear

into my library you go.

hugs

Maree

Dark Angel
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19 posted 2001-02-26 10:19 PM


heheeh forgot to check that library box

ooopsie doosie


Dark Angel
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20 posted 2001-02-26 10:22 PM


er hmmm I forgot again

sheeesh!

got it this time hehe

I'm out of ere

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