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Communication Breakdown |
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wayoutwalt Member Elite
since 1999-06-22
Posts 4870TEXAS (it's all big) 
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They fly as if through hidden waves Beget from towers that stab the air Their's, it's said, is a widened path Though their power is surely there The tower snakes from charcoal earth Born of time and ancient pyre Callused hands chart out its birth So they can slash the length of wire Seek the temple to shield the hate And find the destroyers at the door No service for their distracting ways Still for later, they will not ignore From the towers, to clear their message They bounce about the callused earth They change the minds of all the weary Who want their power to match their worth From ear to ear the grin is shedding The destroyers have turned another mind Through the unseen, they travel lightly And leave still another tower behind I won't be a communicator of sin I will not spend my days in hiding Wherefore in trade for lost connection Jesus Christ, my Lord residing! I, in the temple of the sacred holy Deny connection to the deceiver Take forth a vow to become a temple And slam down the dead receiver I step onto the soggy ground Voices whisper, I stand not fearing In the world of the unbeliever It’s God who gave me hearing They fly as if through raging storm Beget from God who gave them sight That all may seek the mighty glory They shine as beacons in the night Turn off the power of the destroyer’s hate Find a shield but do not hide Become a temple and disrupt the service To the dark and wretched evil side Dream of flight through sky so pure Beget from God who snuffed out sin There’ll be a time when towers fall Let us, now, prepare for heaven then. [This message has been edited by wayoutwalt (edited 02-22-2001).] |
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Saxoness
since 1999-07-18
Posts 1102Texas |
Walt. This completely struck me dumb. It's absolutely marvelous...I'm in Awe. Bravo on a masterpiece. "Glory remains unaware of my neglected dwelling where alone I sing my tearful song which has charms only for me." [This message has been edited by Saxoness (edited 02-22-2001).] |
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ethome Member Patricius
since 2000-05-14
Posts 11858New Brunswick Canada |
Hey Walt this is sooo very good I loved it!! The poet is like a cocoon; in him the caterpillar of the past finds rest, and from him the butterfly of the future emerges. |
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Irish Rose Member Patricius
since 2000-04-06
Posts 10263 |
"Find a shield but do not hide" YOU'RE one of the poets I came back for, to read and be inspired! way to go wayoutwalt!!!!!!!!! "When red-haired girls scamper like roses over the rain-green grass, and the sun drips honey." Laurie Lee [This message has been edited by Kathleen (edited 02-22-2001).] |
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wayoutwalt Member Elite
since 1999-06-22
Posts 4870TEXAS (it's all big) |
saxoness, et, and kathleen you inspire me to keep on. thanky muchly |
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elisaseyes Member
since 1999-07-15
Posts 196fort worth texas |
Sweetheart... many thoughts here |
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Sunshine
Administrator
Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
Well done Walt....this reads as it took a lifetime to prepare... don't tell me you snapped it out in a moment.... Enjoyed, very much! |
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JamesMichael Member Empyrean
since 1999-11-16
Posts 33336Kapolei, Hawaii, USA |
Walt I enjoyed reading your poem...very meaningful...James |
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Poet deVine
Administrator
Member Seraphic
since 1999-05-26
Posts 22612Hurricane Alley |
Interesting..this is a different style than your usual..it's nice to see you stretching yourself. There is a darkness in this and an underlying theme that I am unable to fathom. I'm sure you'll tell me what it is!!  |
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SEA 
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Member Seraphic
since 2000-01-18
Posts 22676with you |
........directly to my library........ |
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Meadowmuse Member Elite
since 1999-12-27
Posts 3263 |
Ah, so this is what became of it ~ it's wonderful, Walt. Claire Could a greater miracle take place than for us to look through each other's eyes for an instant?......Henry David Thoreau |
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wayoutwalt Member Elite
since 1999-06-22
Posts 4870TEXAS (it's all big) |
thanking you all for the positive replies and yuh PDV i explained well? |
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Nan
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-05-20
Posts 21191Cape Cod Massachusetts USA |
Nicely done, walt - You present a conflict and poetically resolve it in wonderful style - I, too, enjoy seeing you show the diversity of your talents, my friend..  |
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cruz Member
since 2000-07-18
Posts 282Dallas,Texas USA |
i like the thought surrounding this one. this new age of telecommunication and it doesnt even work. Im in this elevator at school and I get no signal on my phone. It makes me want to break down my communication. I like how you can translate everyday life into "poet" (hahaha)! I picture these towering snakes bouncing waves of info to and fro satellites and other towering snakes. It looks like you see them fighting with regular phone lines (so they can slash the length of wire). The ending is the most powerful part of your poe. My preparation has begun. |
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Voiceless Senior Member
since 2001-02-19
Posts 686Under the stars upon the wind |
I bow down to the writer of another great poem! ~*Peachy Be*~ |
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JLR Senior Member
since 2001-02-04
Posts 1785 |
Well...this is different for you and I really love it! You are so full of surprises. |
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wayoutwalt Member Elite
since 1999-06-22
Posts 4870TEXAS (it's all big) |
wow thank you all |
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Temptress
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Member Rara Avis
since 1999-06-15
Posts 7136Mobile, AL |
Powerful and inspiring, Walt. I did enjoy this. |
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Dark Angel Member Patricius
since 1999-08-04
Posts 10095 |
Well, Mr Minokie, you have penned pretty powerful images here. I am flabergasted heheh in a wonderful way of course. Love this side of you m'dear into my library you go. hugs Maree |
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Dark Angel Member Patricius
since 1999-08-04
Posts 10095 |
heheeh forgot to check that library box ooopsie doosie  |
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Dark Angel Member Patricius
since 1999-08-04
Posts 10095 |
er hmmm I forgot again sheeesh! got it this time hehe I'm out of ere |
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