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serenity blaze
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0 posted 2001-02-23 12:21 PM


tell me now about the moats
and bridges drawn in chains of spoke
tell me? about keys occur--
the ways of fit within a spur?
about the taste of finger's lick?
exquisite timing? sweet drawbridge?
drifting fingers, trail of ghost,
the finger's love I want the most
whispered secrets, draw me in.
Again. Again. And then? ...again.
I do not have the brushes fine-
in taste of you and sweet sublime.
I've no access to northern sky...
regretfully, you'll not be mine.

But may I have a long days' night?
to capture you charcoaled in light?
and all the darkness but a whim
to knead eraser once again?

I know that I must frighten you.
All that I feel, must scare you too
within me? is no line to cross?
a scarf of sadness...Boa's Moss.

that all my love lost, once was mine,
etched in edges, lingered rhyme.


" Only those who risk going too far can possibly find out how far one can go."
T.S. Eliot



[This message has been edited by serenity (edited 02-23-2001).]

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Janet Marie
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1 posted 2001-02-23 12:32 PM


I do not have the brushes fine-
in taste of you and sweet sublime.
I've no access to northern sky...
regretfully, you'll not be mine.

But may I have a long days' night?
to capture you charcoaled in light?
and all the darkness but a whim
to knead eraser once again?

I know that I must frighten you.
All that I feel, must scare you too
within me? is no line to cross?
a scarf of sadness...Boa's Moss.

that all my love lost, once was mine,
etched in edges, lingered rhyme.
=================

*shaking my head* ....
damn ...
just damn!!!!
going to bed with poetic envy tonite for sure
gotta bad case of rhyme jealousy
cant think of anyone better to catch it from


Love is my religion, I believe in nothing else.
To find that inspiration, live that inner vision.
Love is my religion...I believe in you.
~T Kimmel

wayoutwalt
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2 posted 2001-02-23 12:34 PM


o wow great read kept me going sen you are so good at what you do
Marge Tindal
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3 posted 2001-02-23 12:44 PM


Serenity~
And long may it linger ~
~*Marge*~


~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~
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serenity blaze
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4 posted 2001-02-23 12:49 PM


Marge? If I could have it surgically removed tonite? I WOULD. it hurts.
Balladeer
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5 posted 2001-02-23 12:50 PM


Pure exquisite writing, serene one....
ggrn3
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6 posted 2001-02-23 01:01 AM


Serenity
I can't help but to echo Balladeer's comments. This was just exquisite.

Garfield

Paula Finn
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missouri
7 posted 2001-02-23 01:09 AM


Girl girl girl...saying I love this doesnt even come close to telling you how it touches me...
Poeminister
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8 posted 2001-02-23 11:22 PM


Excellent write serenity...as always your flow and rhyme blows me away. Well done.

Poeminister

Aimster
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Charlotte, NC
9 posted 2001-02-24 12:24 PM


serenity~
wow! this was just awesome....very cool
as Jan would say lol wonderful write...
full of excellent and amazing rhyming
schemes...i stand in awe.

take care
amy

"A friend is someone who knows the song in your heart & can sing it back to you when you have forgotten the words."


Rex Allen McCoy
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10 posted 2001-02-24 12:51 PM


Very nicely done serenity ... leaves me with a feeling of deep longing

catalinamoon
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The Shores of Alone
11 posted 2001-02-24 03:09 PM


Oh, this one is so intense. You always outdo yourself. Glad I found this. Awesome..
Sandra

serenity blaze
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12 posted 2001-02-25 04:42 PM


JM.....you flatter me, keep it coming, please!

wow...yer so sweet yuh! with hugs.

Marge...just a sad moment, my apologies for the blue reply.

Thank you michael....grinning here...remember the "sweet serenity" oh well...maybe I'll just try for serene.

gg...thank you, I love echoes.

Paula? How are you my friend? been crazy around here...thank you, sorry I've been "away" we will catch up soon, k?

amy? Thank you much, you are truly a sweetheart!

Rex...simply HUGS...I know you've been through some difficult times of late--I pray that you are well.

Poe...your kindness and graciousness always touches my heart, thank you.

sandra? I thank you so much...to me? it is ALL about personal best. so I appreciate your comment very very much.

and sorry so late with my replies...but boy, DO I HAVE BEADS? I have BEADS....

Thanks and love with my customary HUGS TO FORUM

" Only those who risk going too far can possibly find out how far one can go."
T.S. Eliot


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