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A Touch of Frost - Reposted from Dark #2
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A Touch of Frost - Reposted from Dark #2 |
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Kethry Member Rara Avis
since 2000-07-29
Posts 9082Victoria Australia 
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I walk through spring's depression deep With miles to go before I sleep I look at lovers hand in hand Must close my eyes before tears creep The daffodils begin to flower Blazing for a golden hour I turn my head and slowly weep To move me beauty has no power When the tepid sunshine warms My weary bones as new day forms Darkness shrouds and bitterness showers I see no glory just shattering storms I close my eyes against the light Panic stricken bowed with fright While I am feeling lost, forlorn The glistening lake, lovers delight Butterflies rest in the air Dart about and hover there All I can think is, crush their wings So, they're matching my despair Those of us who refuse to risk and grow get swallowed up by life. Patty Hansen. |
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Honeybee Member Ascendant
since 1999-12-26
Posts 5372Ontario, CANADA |
Wow - you really expressed your woe extremely well. Sadly, I know this feeling well. The last verse really hit hard, what a unique and dark way to describe your emotion. It's true, when a person is in pain or in the depths of depression, even the most beautiful song or poem or garden could not touch that person in bright way. Many people assume that the best way to save a person from depression is to show them beauties, but, these once wonderful things only shows the depressed person what they are missing or can never have. Unless a person has gone through intense sorrow or hopelessness - they can not understand this. Hugs to you, this really touched me. Into the library this goes. Just wow... Take care, Melissa~ |
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Balladeer
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-05
Posts 25505Ft. Lauderdale, Fl USA |
Kethry girl, you can express such a wide range of emotions in your writings....and do them all equally well..you could be almost famous  |
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Voiceless Senior Member
since 2001-02-19
Posts 686Under the stars upon the wind |
You express your emotions perfectly, very well done. ~*Peachy Be*~ |
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Kethry Member Rara Avis
since 2000-07-29
Posts 9082Victoria Australia |
Melissa, Thanks this is my worldwide whinge with a willing audience. Deer, Thank-you, well I'm already "practically perfect" so "almost famous" would be a bonus. Voiceless, I don't know about perfect but thank you for the thought. Be well Kethry Those of us who refuse to risk and grow get swallowed up by life. Patty Hansen. |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
Kethry, Difficult form you did well, enjoyed the write. |
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suthern
since 1999-07-29
Posts 20723Louisiana |
There's a wealth of loneliness wrapped up in this one, Kethry... Depression is a cruel condition... you've written it well! |
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Charisma
since 2000-09-30
Posts 5906lost in blue pages |
Oh Kethry, how I can hear you in these wonderful lines. you expressed your feelings so well....excellent as always my friend ((hugs)) Charisma |
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Marsha
since 2000-07-10
Posts 7423Maidstone Kent England |
Kethry dear heart, this is utterly wonderful, you can write the blackness of despair and the beauty of truth. Absolutely perfect. No love it's time for the truth, tell them all I wrote this one, you know I was going to Now just get back to work you and write me something else. Thank's 'Deer, I know I did my best, and everyone else, and it would've had my name on it but Kethry forgot. Love you dear heart Take care love as always Slushy Excellent work love Take back the hope you gave,- I claim Only a memory of the same Robert Browning |
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CocoBaci Member Elite
since 2000-05-06
Posts 3043 |
Kethry sweetie, ya know I'm not surprised at the superb quality in this poem... You can write about any subject and bring to it vibrancy of life and this dark side of writing can be from the very depth of our souls and you've graced these forum pages by sharing your thoughts and feelings in this poem... Hugs2uPoetFriend As you say to all Poets "WriteOn" ~coco~ |
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Kethry Member Rara Avis
since 2000-07-29
Posts 9082Victoria Australia |
Thank you my good friends and Marsha's right she did pen this I just stole it and posted it under my own name because my muse has left nad now I'm bereft. *wink wink* Be well Kethry Those of us who refuse to risk and grow get swallowed up by life. Patty Hansen. |
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Cerenity Member Elite
since 2000-02-16
Posts 2637Escondido-California |
Hi Kethry, The imagery is wonderful, I especially admire the honesty of the crushing of the butterfly, its hard to admit even amoung the most beautiful of things there lays anger and pain not fixed by anything but our own inner growth. Love, Cerenity "God doesn't have to be reminded that we exist. We have to be reminded that He exist!" (Writer Unknown) |
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Irish Rose Member Patricius
since 2000-04-06
Posts 10263 |
Wow, this has such a touch of nature and feeling. I love it "When red-haired girls scamper like roses over the rain-green grass, and the sun drips honey." Laurie Lee |
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Kethry Member Rara Avis
since 2000-07-29
Posts 9082Victoria Australia |
Kathleen and Cerenity, thank you both so much. Kethry Those of us who refuse to risk and grow get swallowed up by life. Patty Hansen. |
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