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Night Unending |
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Meadowmuse Member Elite
since 1999-12-27
Posts 3263 |
Night UnendingUnheard, my sighs to narrow night as memory's touch trails, fingering upon these shoulders, lunar white, alone in sorrow's lingering. For I have turned away from love, denied with heart full flowering as bloom of wistful foxesglove, its velvet dewdrops showering. I cannot bear what day has borne when once the mist, in scattering, reveals my failing, fragile form, awakened, torn and tattering. I pray swift sun will not arise, that dark will stay descending. Alone but for my memory's cries, I plead for night unending. Could a greater miracle take place than for us to look through each other's eyes for an instant?......Henry David Thoreau |
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Lighthousebob Member Elite
since 2000-06-14
Posts 4725California |
Meadowmuse, Your poetry is full of clutching imagery... you have left my mind with many foms and textures. for me, I envision a fragile white body groping in the darkness praying that the night will never end. I enjoyed the art and flow of your poem very much, Bob <>< |
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CocoBaci Member Elite
since 2000-05-06
Posts 3043 |
MM... It's soooooooooo great to have your poetry grace these pages... I enjoyed the read very much... ~coco~ |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
Both gripping and fluid at once...emotional, and still in perfect construct. This was tight, claire! Into my library you go...AGAIN. Awesome poet you...so, so glad you are back! |
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Honeybee Member Ascendant
since 1999-12-26
Posts 5372Ontario, CANADA |
Oh my! Claire, this is so well expressed from the depths of sorrow. The imagery, the flow and the rhyme are just outstanding. You never cease to amaze me. Take care, Melissa~ |
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Cerenity Member Elite
since 2000-02-16
Posts 2637Escondido-California |
Hi Meadowmuse, This is so lovely and full of imagery, I am also very glad to see you, Love, Cerenity "God doesn't have to be reminded that we exist. We have to be reminded that He exist!" (Writer Unknown) |
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Meadowmuse Member Elite
since 1999-12-27
Posts 3263 |
Hi everyone. Thanks very much for the enthusiastic response to my poem. I'm trying to find more time for Passions, but have been submerged in several projects of late. This is still one of the friendliest spots I know of to share poetry online. (o: Take care, and keep writing! Claire Could a greater miracle take place than for us to look through each other's eyes for an instant?......Henry David Thoreau |
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Elizabeth
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Member Ascendant
since 1999-06-07
Posts 6871Minnesota |
Claire, this is sadly beautiful. I too sometimes wish the night would never end...well done. |
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wayoutwalt Member Elite
since 1999-06-22
Posts 4870TEXAS (it's all big) |
blissful read to me yuh |
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Martie
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
Claire--Your poetry is always full of grace and surety...yet lit with the impact of emotion. |
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Sven
since 1999-11-23
Posts 14937East Lansing, MI USA |
but the night must surely end my friend and bring with it the promise of the sun for when the night has come to its end then surely will the race be won. . . wonderful Claire. . . it's so good to have you back here. . .  -------------------------------------------------------- To the world, you may only be one person. But to one person, you may be the world. |
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Mike Member Elite
since 1999-06-19
Posts 2462 |
once more sweet pain of sorrow's bite... entrancing splendor forth ebon night... [This message has been edited by Mike (edited 02-19-2001).] |
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JamesMichael Member Empyrean
since 1999-11-16
Posts 33336Kapolei, Hawaii, USA |
So this is what happens when you turn from love...I as usually the one that is turned from love...James |
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Meadowmuse Member Elite
since 1999-12-27
Posts 3263 |
Elizabeth, thank you. Sometimes making the sadness at least "sound" beautiful feels right to me. Thanks for reading and letting me know you relate to my poem. Walt, thanks. (yuh) Martie, your words are gracious and so appreciated. Thank you. Sven, a lovely poem reply. Thank you so much. It's good to be able to share poetry with everyone here again. (I like the smileyhearts!) Mike, your couplet is enchanting... thank you, my friend. James, turning from love is not easy, but sometimes seems necessary. The right decision? It's hard to say. Thank you for reading my poem. Claire Could a greater miracle take place than for us to look through each other's eyes for an instant?......Henry David Thoreau |
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Parker Member Elite
since 2000-01-06
Posts 3129ON |
Clair, this is such a beautiful piece... I just love the way you write.  Parker |
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Voiceless Senior Member
since 2001-02-19
Posts 686Under the stars upon the wind |
I love how you wrote this! It's beautiful.. Simply beautiful! ~*Peachy Be*~ |
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jellybeans Member Elite
since 2000-10-13
Posts 2298 |
wow, night unending.....wow...yep its good to have you back.....this is heart grabbing...really nice writing |
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Meadowmuse Member Elite
since 1999-12-27
Posts 3263 |
Parker, hi. Thanks for your always sweet words. I just love the way you respond. Voiceless, thank you very much. Welcome to Passions Could a greater miracle take place than for us to look through each other's eyes for an instant?......Henry David Thoreau |
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Meadowmuse Member Elite
since 1999-12-27
Posts 3263 |
Jellybeans (love your pseudonym) you bounced in here when I wasn't looking! Thank you very much for reading. I am delighted to be able to spend some time with you folks. Claire Could a greater miracle take place than for us to look through each other's eyes for an instant?......Henry David Thoreau |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
claire, I turn away from love all the time...I guess it could be sad...this poem made me feel a little sadness, but it was good |
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SEA 
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Member Seraphic
since 2000-01-18
Posts 22676with you |
So gently sad.......beautifully done! SEA |
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suthern
since 1999-07-29
Posts 20723Louisiana |
I can remember wanting to sleep forever... but then nightmares came to visit and I hurried the dawn. *S* But I still hope to find a night unending, filled with joy. *S* Great work! |
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