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Midnight Dew
Member

since 2001-01-07

Posts 50
Forest Lake, MN

0 posted 2001-02-15 10:30 PM

Thoughts are racing through my brain
No room left to rest.
Have to keep on moving on
Put me to the test.
Must continue all my tasks,
Must complete them all.
Thoughts are circling faster, faster,
I feel I'm going to fall.
Fall from my heightened state
Of mind racing through the night.
Fall to resting for a while,
But I can't, without a fight.
But the fighter I am facing,
He is so great and strong.
Instead of wanting to fight or run,
I want to go along.
Along with this man, this boy,
Who conquers all my fears,
Who makes me want to stop my thoughts,
Makes me wipe my tears.
Ah, sweet love, who in my life,
Has wreaked a miracle.
My brain, it now is empty,
My heart is surely full.
I don't know why, all my life,
I wasted all that time.
With empty thoughts and processes,
When love, it could be mine.

~Caitlin Hull~

"The Holy Spirit makes up all our souls, and when it 'flexes' it makes us do great things."

OLIAS
Senior Member

since 2000-06-20

Posts 1090
Pearl city Iowa

1 posted 2001-02-15 11:23 PM

I can feel the frantic emotional pace in this piece, it moves very swiftly and powerfully to a conclusion. I enjoyed reading it. Thank you for posting.

Regards,
Olias.

Midnight Dew
Member

since 2001-01-07

Posts 50
Forest Lake, MN

2 posted 2001-02-16 09:13 AM

Thank you very much for your compliments Olias. I was trying to make it short and sweet while still saying something. Hopefully I succeeded well enough if you liked it!

~Caitlin Hull~

"The Holy Spirit makes up all our souls, and when it 'flexes' it makes us do great things."

Poet deVine

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Member Seraphic

since 1999-05-26

Posts 22612
Hurricane Alley

3 posted 2001-02-16 08:17 PM

I enjoyed reading this and found the frantic pace fit the theme.

Secret Whisper
Member

since 2001-01-25

Posts 298
Through the Looking Glass

4 posted 2001-02-26 12:32 PM

I really liked this poem, and complement you on its intonation. But I can't help but laugh picturing this guy in my head. Wonderful write!

~Alison~

"Close your eyes, and you'll see. Cover your ears, and you'll hear."

Cerenity
Member Elite

since 2000-02-16

Posts 2637
Escondido-California

5 posted 2001-02-27 09:29 PM

Hi Midnight Dew,

This was fast paced, but I loved the ending coming into love, enjoyed very much,

Love, Cerenity

"God doesn't have to be reminded that we exist.
We have to be reminded that He exist!"

(Writer Unknown)

Saunni
Senior Member

since 2000-07-11

Posts 1777
West Virginia

6 posted 2001-02-27 11:40 PM

Yes, this was very fast paced and very enjoyable.

Sauni

Sauni :)
Have you ever known the color grey when the nighttime finds you weak
I have, I've walked that road each time; that's where my angel sleeps

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