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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738
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I cannot swear another vow till I knew you? I knew not how... and vow is still a word I choke, but you, somehow, remain unspoke. You are the soul's remembering, no need to always call you friend no promises to beg too proud you are a simple honest vow. A difference of spark within-- like sunlight gleaming in the glen, a cast of light through forest's speak a spark of snow on sunlit peak... the etchings of the clouds in sky the whimper in my song of sighs the keening in my whispered why-- and every word I cannot speak. You are wonderment, my love. The very thing I'd not dreamt of. |
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Poet deVine
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-05-26
Posts 22612Hurricane Alley |
Your writing is getting smoother and smoother. May I suggest you start submitting to the main site if you haven't already. And maybe even to some magazines. Go get a 'Poet's Market 2001' book and find addresses of magazines that are accepting submissions.  |
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TerryW Senior Member
since 2000-03-23
Posts 779Louisville, Mississippi, USA |
serenity~ Hello, my lovely friend!!! Long time no see! I am so glad that I came back in time to see this one! It is truly lovely. You always have a way of capturing my heart with your words, my dear! Happy Valentine's Day to you!! ~you reached inside, you touched my heart, and I am all the better for it~ Terry A. Woodson, Jr. |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
A difference of spark within-- like sunlight gleaming in the glen, a cast of light through forest's speak a spark of snow on sunlit peak... the etchings of the clouds in sky the whimper in my song of sighs the keening in my whispered why-- and every word I cannot speak. You are wonderment, my love. The very thing I'd not dreamt of. ==================== oh my ... me thinks the Mardi gras water has extra cadence in it today ... (send me some damnit)  this is poetry in motion... sang to me when I read it aloud... and then lets talk about the imagery.. then lets talk about the shakespearean like summation lines ... then lets talk about this going in me library.  When you see thru loves illusion, theres the danger your perfect lover looks like a perfect fool you go running off in search of a perfect stranger |
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Mark Bohannan Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-21
Posts 7269In the winds of Cherokee song |
Well, I wouldn't have believed it if someone had told me that you would pass from "MASTER" status in poetry to "UNTOUCHABLE"....... I have been left in awe of you many times but now it is just plain envy. This goes in my library and I do hope you listen to Sharon when she says "SUBMIT" already!!! |
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ATelamon Member
since 2001-02-06
Posts 328Purgatory, Last Staircase, Up |
So well said. How I reach for words when trying to express the heart. Then I feel the knowing and no pen can keep pace, as all pours forth. My, my apparently Valantine's day, no, something someone has enchanted me. And I cannot deny nor hide, my not so silent words are hers. If she knows or not. Be well this day. AT "Time is merely change. It neither enslaves nor determines us. It is instead our opportunity for self-definition" |
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suthern
since 1999-07-29
Posts 20723Louisiana |
Now, wait a minute! LOL. I've drunk that Mardi Gras water and it didn't make ME write like this! LOL Could it have been the added Chivas? *G* Excellent writing, serenity! |
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Aimster Member Elite
since 2000-02-19
Posts 4297Charlotte, NC |
Serenity- this is just amazing beautiful! your words always touch a place within me but seems there must be "something" in that water you're drinking...for your writing has gone from wonderful to superb to now just flat out amazing! i agree w/ the others...you should definitely submit. you certainly pass the talent sweets! take care amy "A friend is someone who knows the song in your heart and can sing it back to you when you have forgotten the words." |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
(serenity peers into her rock glass, puzzled...."ya mean there's WATER in this stuff????" ROFL...) sharon...I thank you mostly for your wonderful friendship...you are a treasure! Terry....good to see you again my friend, it's wonderful to have you back!!! thanks. Janet Marie...you're gonna have to come see me or get a very long straw...hmmm...can't believe I just typed that! LOL and hugs, m'twin. Mark...I just love when you beg me to submit! HUGS and thanks you's.ATel? Just open up our heart and she'll say "ahhh..." Thanks for your kindness.suthern...not really one for chivas...Johnny Walker, black, in tall glass over ice, thank YOU! ahhhh...amy, my sweet friend...thanks for popping in and warming my heart like that! Hope all is well with you...Hugs to heart and thank you! Thank you....and HUGS TO FORUM! [This message has been edited by serenity (edited 02-15-2001).] |
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ethome Member Patricius
since 2000-05-14
Posts 11858New Brunswick Canada |
You know Celeste you're doing something that I can't exactly explain to myself but it seems that your writing is dealing with life more simply but so much more clever than ever...if that makes any sense?? I love the direction you are going in lately...thanks.... your old poet buddy! Reality seldom bears the possibilities of imagination! |
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Paula Finn Member Ascendant
since 2000-06-17
Posts 5546missouri |
Hey girl...this is great ya know? |
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CocoBaci Member Elite
since 2000-05-06
Posts 3043 |
I'm so pleased to have found this poem, and I cannot begin to tell you how touching these words are when I read them so for now I'll just say this, dearPoetFriend, another excellent write you have shared with us... |
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Poeminister Senior Member
since 2000-02-26
Posts 1862Regina SK; Canada |
"You are wonderment, my love. The very thing I'd not dreamt of." Serenity--Enjoyed this read. Excellent writing. [This message has been edited by Poeminister (edited 03-01-2001).] |
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Irish Rose Member Patricius
since 2000-04-06
Posts 10263 |
This is lovely.... Kathleen Blake "When red-haired girls scamper like roses over the rain-green grass, and the sun drips honey." Laurie Lee |
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Zinsser Senior Member
since 2001-02-27
Posts 1641Calif. |
I love it. Beautiful! Thank You ~~~Connie~~~ |
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