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Snow
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desert flower looking for rain

0 posted 2001-01-12 11:28 PM



Shiver...Slowly

Hey lover, c'mere...
Let me towel you off
Then crawl into the sheets
I've scented with musk talc

let me tangle myself
up in your willing limbs
I'll be the sky, you be the clouds
and rush through me

take me whole, all at once
devour and make me yours
paint your name across my soul

release the gates that held me back
trace your lips ... just barely touch
eyes, raining down emotion
only heard with our hearts

deeper, shiver, whisper, tremor
the earth slows and you take
me further

I'll be the sky ... you be the clouds
       and rush through me
shiver ... slowly


1/12/01

this is a link from my site
with a voice recording.

© Copyright 2001 Snow - All Rights Reserved
Nate Dogg
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1 posted 2001-01-13 12:30 PM


Nice imagery....wonderful write!

Nathan

Snow
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2 posted 2001-01-13 05:53 AM


thank you, Nathan ;-)
Lady Lightning
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3 posted 2001-01-13 06:43 AM


I'll be the sky ... you be the clouds
       and rush through me
shiver ... slowly

WOW..I don't know what else to say..this was a wonderful read...Simply it made me say.. WOW..Hugs   ~LL~
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The way to love anything is to realize it might be lost.  author unknown

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Sunshine
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4 posted 2001-01-13 06:56 AM


Snow, you did this very, very well....{~,^}
Snow
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5 posted 2001-01-13 12:17 PM


~LL~ and Sunshine, thank you both very much, I'm glad you enjoyed this one.

snow < !signature-->

"...I am a river in winter,
quiet in the eyes of most
but deep,
swift and full of life
to one, lucky enough to fall through the ice."
from "Watercourse" by Snow


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Irish Rose
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6 posted 2001-02-05 12:58 PM


OH BOY - WHERE IS MY IRISH SPRING!!!!

"I walked beside the evening sea and dreamed a dream that could not be." George William Curtis



Robert Joseph
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7 posted 2001-02-06 05:19 PM


Neve,I love your words (and you) more each day.
A trancing shimmer of your heart's light.

Robert Joseph
    ~fc~

Sunshine
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8 posted 2001-02-06 05:22 PM


So good to see this one back on top!
jonmcm
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9 posted 2001-02-06 05:26 PM


Wow!

Jon

dgvarner
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10 posted 2001-02-07 11:13 PM


love this...!  such emotion, such a wanting in your words...

very nice!

hugs, g


"maybe one day
we can turn and face our fears
maybe one day
we can reach out through our tears..."
-a grant

SEA
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with you
11 posted 2001-02-07 11:40 PM


oh yea, likin' this very much! Very well done!   -SEA
Snow
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12 posted 2001-02-14 03:21 PM


*VBS* i'm so glad you liked this one!!
thank you for those wonderful replies!

snow

Wolf777
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13 posted 2001-02-28 04:02 PM


THIS is one my favorites!
you are incredible.

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