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I want him to miss me...
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I want him to miss me... |
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Snow
since 2000-10-16
Posts 1170desert flower looking for rain 
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I want him to miss me ... I want his insides to ache from the lack of my touch I want it to be him that cries himself to sleep because of that word... good-bye I want his stomach to curl into knots every time he hears my name from someone innocent Or have his hands shake because he happened to read my name in the newspaper I want his body to crave how we used to sleep together, for him to feel the sheets of ice beneath his body instead of our heated passion I want his arms to reach and find a pillow brings only fluff against his chest instead my fingers... which once inscribed my name upon his heart I want him now to feel those same fingers reaching through that same chest... nails digging in and gripping, making him bleed the same way he bled me... "...I am a river in winter, quiet in the eyes of most but deep, swift and full of life to one, lucky enough to fall through the ice. |
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catalinamoon
since 2000-06-03
Posts 9543The Shores of Alone |
Oh, whew, I wish I had said that! Perfectly stated feelings, I'm right there with you. Sandra |
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Lady Lightning Member
since 2000-12-04
Posts 422Kentucky |
I want him now to feel those same fingers reaching through that same chest... nails digging in and gripping, making him bleed the same way he bled me... Snow...This is so, so powerful...I could sense myself feeling all of this so much..I really liked this, alot...I shall keep this , if you don't mind? Hugs ~LL~ The way to love anything is to realize it might be lost. author unknown |
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Pixydust Junior Member
since 2001-01-14
Posts 36 |
Wow...perfectly stated and well written, thanks for saying what we've all wanted to say at one point in our lives at least. Pixydust |
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JamesMichael Member Empyrean
since 1999-11-16
Posts 33336Kapolei, Hawaii, USA |
Snow perhaps I am missing you for him...I have felt these feelings missing someone special to me...someone new comes along and we appreciate them even more...we are all searching for the right one...even those that leave us...and someday we will find the special one...perhaps I already have...James |
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dgvarner Member Elite
since 2000-05-13
Posts 3552High Springs, Florida |
ouch thats some serious pain there snow..and it does..hurt that much..and it would be nice..if they could feel what we feel sometimes..just so they know...but..at the same time..i wouldnt wish my excruciating pains even on that other person...well--ok..maybe for a day or two.. lol ..just so they know...hmm..this one..this ones got me thinkin...those were some darned painful pains....... ouch done rambling! lol very well written..felt it all over again..glad you let us share it with you..misery feels less miserable when you can share it...!  hugs! g "oh baby baby, its a wild world..its hard to get by just upon a smile..." cat stevens |
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Robert Joseph Member
since 2000-10-07
Posts 491South Carolina |
Neve, heart piercing work...your gift always thrills me. Robert Joseph ~enb~ |
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Nate Dogg Senior Member
since 1999-11-15
Posts 1658Georgia, Fulton |
Wow, those last few lines was quite the imagery....I can truly sense your pain and frustrations in this....I wish you the best and thanks for sharing this brilliant piece! Nathan |
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Snow
since 2000-10-16
Posts 1170desert flower looking for rain |
Sandra... thank you very much! ~LL~...you have such encouraging comments to me.. thank you so much. Pixydust...and thank YOU, for that heart felt comment. James, thank you so much. g... thank you, your comment is so appreciated!! Robert, and your words always warm me. thank you. Nathan, again, thank you so much! Your comments are very much taken to heart. Thank you all, Snow "...I am a river in winter, quiet in the eyes of most but deep, swift and full of life to one, lucky enough to fall through the ice. |
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snowpants Member Elite
since 2000-09-16
Posts 2061KS |
'I want his stomach to curl into knots every time he hears my name from someone innocent' I'm going to echo dgvarner when I say, 'ouch.' But, I totally relate to what you are saying here. Excellently written! sp I won't go; I won't sleep; I can't breathe until you're resting here with me... |
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Wolf777 Junior Member
since 2001-02-28
Posts 20 |
there is something about the way you pull the reader into your words and make them feel what you're writing. it's a gift babe, please don't give it up. |
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