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Severn Member Rara Avis
since 1999-07-17
Posts 7704
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For those of you who don't know I am visiting Tennessee for a short time and there are just some impressions I have garnered Maple Syrup It carries flavour of sticky childhood, of demands for more - I see them, forming accents, American-eyed babies, understanding home. For me, it surprises the tongue, this foreign thing. Lifeway People here are slower than at home their lives jolt like slow basketballs rolling along the slopes ending in the security of family plots Train-song I'm almost compelled to find a home beside any tracks and sway in the rush of train-song imagining fields of wheat green trees shuddered by passage cows scattered in man-made thunder the music of journey River The Tennessee river is weighted under the city it rides through sluggishly it measures the distance of escape to the sea and thinks 'Why hurry?' K.M 20001 - it was not an unmusical sound: long, falling, half a sigh, like wind in the wires, or a train distancing. The Muse of Distance, A. Williamson [This message has been edited by Severn (edited 02-12-2001).] |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
Thanks for the postcard K....I love the look through the newling's eyes...smiles. but just one little itty bitty thing? I really think the addition of a few ellipses would have added...drama...to...the slowness of the ...Tennessee river...  I happen to have a few extra, perchance that you have run out! ROFL...Love ya much Oh K of the Lovely Voice!!!! |
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Michael
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Member Rara Avis
since 1999-08-13
Posts 7666California |
There never is a hurry for those who know how to enjoy the scenery, Kamla. Looks like you do. Nice imagery, here.Michael |
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Marge Tindal 
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
Kamla~ Glad to know you are finding your visit to Tennessee to be full of poetic adventure. Enjoyed the Chamber Of Commerce read, dear. ~*Marge*~ ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~ noles1@totcon.com |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
I'm almost compelled to find a home beside any tracks and sway in the rush of train-song imagining fields of wheat green trees shuddered by passage cows scattered in mad-made thunder the music of journey ================= have the lovely people in Tennesse ever seen an NZ butterfly slipper before  very cool write Kam ... you presented it so that the reader felt the laid back country pace... excellent use of metaphor and imagery you must try the southern fried chicken and sweet tea nectar of the gods ya know *L* Where the touch of the lover ends And the soul of the friend begins There's a need to be separate and a need to be one And a struggle neither wins [This message has been edited by Janet Marie (edited 02-12-2001).] |
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Severn Member Rara Avis
since 1999-07-17
Posts 7704 |
Heh...Karen you evil woman... Really...that is MOST...MOST...MOST...unfair... Perhaps...I...will...just...start...talking...like...this... ???? Or will that just drive ya nuts lovey? And you're welcome on the postcard - which reminds me to start writing them - I have them all ADDRESSED - really, and they are just sitting on the table - unwritten in...you know what I am like at writing - there are several people back home probably ready to kill me by now heh... love ya hon Michael - the scenery truly is like nothing I have seen...everything really IS different...even if only in tiny ways sometimes. And I just can't stop gawking at everything! LOL...thanks for stopping in, hugs. Marge(y) - ever nice to hear your voice. Well, adventure is right...even when it is quiet it is one. Thankye...FBS (rem what that means? ) - Well, you know what - they haven't AND people either think I'm from South Africa lol OR can't understand a word I am saying heheheh. AS for sweet tea - I am drinking it now BUT with milk and sugar of course in the old English tradition...thanks hon - glad you felt the pace as that was the intent.. K |
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Poet deVine
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-05-26
Posts 22612Hurricane Alley |
I never knew maple syrup could be so beautifully described!! This is great!! I'm going to bookmark it. |
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Martie
Moderator
Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
Oh, I can see the new poetry travel guide now...the title.."Travels with Kamla"...wonderful!! |
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Sven
since 1999-11-23
Posts 14937East Lansing, MI USA |
really wonderful K. . . nice to have you here. . . these are just excellent in their descriptions and views. . . you see things wonderfully. . . and I'm with Martie, when's the "Travelogue" coming out??? ----------------------------------------------------------- To the world, you may only be one person. But to one person, you may be the world. |
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Jamie Member Elite
since 2000-06-26
Posts 3168Blue Heaven |
and fuzzy looking trees................................. Jamie Tu ne cede malis, sed contra audentior ito. - Virgil. "Yield thou not to adversity, but press on the more bravely". |
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Severn Member Rara Avis
since 1999-07-17
Posts 7704 |
Sharon - you are? Wow...thankyou...I wrote these at some ungodly hour of the morning...not really thinking about them - just finding the first words that came to mind...I'm glad you approve.  Martie - you know I'd have to entitle it 'Travels with Kamla's soul' sigh...thankyou dear. Sven - well thankyou...seeing things wonderfully in this case only comes from a new perspective perhaps? I'm so happy you enjoyed... J - and funny road signs that are too dramatic... K...and I have found that a lifetime can be lived in one moment... T.G.M. |
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Robert Joseph Member
since 2000-10-07
Posts 491South Carolina |
K, your ''southern'' is spoken so well, your train-song finds harmony in my soul. As always, a pleasure to read you. Robert Joseph [This message has been edited by Robert Joseph (edited 02-13-2001).] |
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Poeminister Senior Member
since 2000-02-26
Posts 1862Regina SK; Canada |
Severn--Lovely flow, and descriptions. Enjoyed muchly. Poeminister "At the touch of love, everyone becomes a poet." -Plato [This message has been edited by Poeminister (edited 02-13-2001).] |
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suthern
since 1999-07-29
Posts 20723Louisiana |
I like all your impressions. Hope you're enjoying your visit! *S* |
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JamesMichael Member Empyrean
since 1999-11-16
Posts 33336Kapolei, Hawaii, USA |
I know a lovely woman that writes travel guides...your travel writes are poetic...James |
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Severn Member Rara Avis
since 1999-07-17
Posts 7704 |
RJ - I'm grateful...thankyou - and I think Train-song is my favourite also. Poe - why thankyou...glad you enjoyed! Flow is always my goal so yay bounce that it was achieved. Suthern - thanks hon...I am indeed - it's been an interesting time so far... James - thankyou...that was the intent - I haven't written anything quite like these before...so I'm happy they seem to have served their purpose.. K...and I have found that a lifetime can be lived in one moment... T.G.M. |
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Jamie Member Elite
since 2000-06-26
Posts 3168Blue Heaven |
as I recall I agreed that "give way" was better.... Jamie Tu ne cede malis, sed contra audentior ito. - Virgil. "Yield thou not to adversity, but press on the more bravely". |
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Severn Member Rara Avis
since 1999-07-17
Posts 7704 |
Yes I do believe you did... because I am always right, right? Right - which is the wrong side of the road to drive on. heh  K...and I have found that a lifetime can be lived in one moment... T.G.M. |
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Skyfyre Senior Member
since 1999-08-15
Posts 1906Sitting in Michael's Lap |
Kamla, This only goes to show the truth of one of the beliefs I've held since childhood -- you have not lived until you have tasted maple syrup, especially slathered over a big steaming stack of buttery hotcakes (drooling, here -- LOL). For your next southern-US treat, try buttermilk biscuits dipped in a dark-corn-syrup-and-melted-butter mixture ... simply DE-vine (apologies, Sharon, but I had to emphasize the "de" for the accent *g*). Hope you're enjoying TN ... though I think you should stop by CA before you scoot off home *wink*. Loved the poem ... reminded me of all the 'good' things about home. Linda Remember: maintaining a positive attitude may not solve all your problems, but it will certainly annoy enough people to make it worth the effort. |
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jellybeans Member Elite
since 2000-10-13
Posts 2298 |
hmmmmmmmmm nice to see a few things that I drive right by without looking at, brought to light by a visitor's eyes |
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Jamie Member Elite
since 2000-06-26
Posts 3168Blue Heaven |
I "yield" There is society where none intrudes, by the deep sea, and music in its roar. |
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Jamie Member Elite
since 2000-06-26
Posts 3168Blue Heaven |
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