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Enola
Member

since 2000-02-11

Posts 138
England

0 posted 2001-02-08 06:28 PM

Any title suggestions would be apprieciated.

You've got to die now,
I've not been rumbled
And I still can't see through this distortion.
I'm back on the floor
Everythings the same.
I can't stand it,
I hate you,
I hate you more than ever,
But I still need you.
My fingers bleed from holding on so hard,
But whenever I try to let go,
You hold on too tight.
The grip tears my flesh.
I'd kill myself to keep you away,
But I can't die.
Why don't you let me go?
I don't want to be here,
I want to live.
You make me hurt my friends,
You make me hurt my family,
You make me hurt myself,
And I hate you,
But I need you to exist.
Why are you still my obsession?
Why can't I stop needing you?
Go away
Please
Just leave me alone,
Don't tempt me anymore.
I don't need the pain,
I DON'T.
I have to live without you,
One more fall would kill me.
Why does the pain seem easier?
The jar seems easier,
Hating myself seems easier.
Someone tearme apart,
I'll suffocate in here.
Cut me out,
I'm too weak to do it myself,
The steam is rising,
And I can't see my reflection.

"Knowledge speaks, wisdom listens"

doreen peri
Member Elite

since 1999-05-25

Posts 3812
Virginia

1 posted 2001-02-08 06:48 PM

ouch!

LOVE this line:
"The grip tears my flesh."
for a title? how about "obsession hated" (seriously)

and excuse my levity, but here's a few more ideas....

or "tear me up why don't you, you greedy love object!"

or "oh how i love to hate you!"... hehe

or "dammit! you're in control of me!"... *wink*

***
but for another serious suggestion, how about "bleeding fingers"

well, this was one clearly speaks the human anguish relative to controlling relationships and how sometimes people can't seem to remove themselves from situations and relationships which are detrimental... thanks for posting

StumperDaBumper
Junior Member

since 2000-12-20

Posts 19
State of Mind, Compassion USA

2 posted 2001-02-09 08:42 PM

Bumpintine
Bumpintine
Won't a bump
be mighty fine
Another trip
around the forum
cause I think
it's awful boring
without a little
bump or two
Here's one from me
just for you!

Happy Bumpintine!

Are we having fun yet?

angelswing
Senior Member

since 2000-02-10

Posts 705
United Kingdom

3 posted 2001-05-17 11:28 AM

Hey hey Debbiedo, how be you . I thought I had replied to this one, but when I looked, I saw I hadn't, so I just thought I'd say how good I thought it is briefly .... FANTASTIC .
Ta Debbie dear .
L.of.L. Tommy .
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'There is only a very thin line between genius and insanity, this is measured only on sucess; I am proud to be considered an under-achieving genius'.

angelswing
Senior Member

since 2000-02-10

Posts 705
United Kingdom

4 posted 2001-05-17 11:32 AM

Sorry I came back again . How about 'Seeing myself in the wound' . As a title as it brings in the whole idea of the not being able to see oneself through hurt part . Or possibly 'Reflections in the Blood' . Just a suggestion though . Gotta go . Ta .
L.of.L. Tommy .

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'There is only a very thin line between genius and insanity, this is measured only on sucess; I am proud to be considered an under-achieving genius'.

Enola
Member

since 2000-02-11

Posts 138
England

5 posted 2001-05-17 05:03 PM

Thank you for your replies you lovely people, I don't want to write another like that for a long time. Still stuck on the title though, I like your idea Tommy darling, but, hmm, I dunno. I'll think about it. LoL xxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxx

"Knowledge speaks, wisdom listens"

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