Open Poetry #12 |
- Choke The Flower - (Not sure if this fits Janet Marie's Challenge) |
Honeybee Member Ascendant
since 1999-12-26
Posts 5372Ontario, CANADA |
~I originally wrote another poem that heavily focused on the circus and clowns, but, I felt that it was too forced, however, this second poem just flowed from me, so this is my entry for Janet Marie's challenge, I hope that it is good enough~ Choke The Flower Take advantage of a rose in remorse |
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Sven
since 1999-11-23
Posts 14937East Lansing, MI USA |
you have moved my heart with this one Melissa. . . it's excellent. . . one of the best that you have ever written. . . it's full of powerful emotions and deep pain. . . the words show it all. . . HUGS to you my friend. . . and I'd say that you met the challenge superbly. . . ------------------------------------------------------ To the world, you may only be one person. But to one person, you may be the world. |
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Charisma
since 2000-09-30
Posts 5906lost in blue pages |
oh my what a wonderful......heartfelt piece have you penned here. excellent my friend...' ((hugs)) Charisma |
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ethome Member Patricius
since 2000-05-14
Posts 11858New Brunswick Canada |
My dear Melissa were you ever hard on that poor rose! I kept feeling sorry for it all the way through so I guess you accomplised what you set out to do...very well done I'd say! It was a pleasure to read! ethome Reality seldom bears the possibilities of imagination! |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
Take advantage of a rose in remorse change the destiny of it's course, fill the earth with thunder shower, watch it drown, choke the flower, provoke the quicksand of dirt beneath it to swallow it's pride, forcing it to submit, burn the rose in the sting of the sun rip it's petals off, one by one, ======================= Melissa, this is excellent... the imagery here is awesome ... as is the power of the emotions expressed excellent use of phrase and metaphor very well done girlie. your pen is on fire of late which is way cool Tomorrow holds only mystery And who's to say what might be But in you I've found a love so strong The sun and the moon look on in jealousy ~VH~ |
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Honeybee Member Ascendant
since 1999-12-26
Posts 5372Ontario, CANADA |
Good to see that this fit the challenge more than I thought it would. Thank you all for reading this~ Take care, Melissa~ |
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