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kcsgrandma Senior Member
since 2000-09-24
Posts 1522Presque Isle, ME 
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Reality As real as snowplow sounds upon the street, As rain on roof, or song of spring-swift streams, So surely heard, your soft voice does entreat Me into an enchanted world of dreams. As palpable as breeze upon my face, Or fragrant blossom on the summer air, Yes, even more, I feel your warm embrace Encompassing my being everywhere. As clearly as I see the sky above And note the ordered placement of each star, I gaze into your dark eyes, soft with love, Unhindered by how far away you are. Though distant still, you are more real to me Than what my senses deem reality. |
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JLR Senior Member
since 2001-02-04
Posts 1785 |
Your emotion and sincerity show in every word and I love the idea of distance not defining reality. Those last two lines...blew me away. Absolutely love this! Thanks! |
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Bill Charles Member Patricius
since 2000-07-11
Posts 10619highways, & byways, for now |
kcsgrandma - I would critique if I could only find something, but this is just wonderful. Perhaps a critique next time. BC |
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Pixydust Junior Member
since 2001-01-14
Posts 36 |
very nice mar..  send it to him as a valentine.....  hugs, g **OOPS!! THIS POST IS FROM DGVARNER...SORRY..PIXY USED MY PUTER..AND I DIDNT CHK FOR THE NAME CHNG...!! ** [This message has been edited by Pixydust (edited 02-13-2001).] |
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suthern
since 1999-07-29
Posts 20723Louisiana |
This is great... I especially like the last two lines! Well done! |
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jellybeans Member Elite
since 2000-10-13
Posts 2298 |
ok, seems I am following suthern around this afternoon, lol, guess we have the same tastes...but yep, like this alot |
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Sunnyone Member Ascendant
since 2000-07-06
Posts 5334Staffordshire, England |
kcsgrandma.... This poem is so very special to me, and your words are touching. I agree with Bill on this.....there is nothing here I could critique....it is perfect! Live...Love...Be grateful for both!! |
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laryalee Member
since 2000-06-19
Posts 352Alberta, Canada |
Ah Marilyn - I love your version of reality! And even more, I love how you invoke it...wonderful, as usual... a gentle smile you offer us, and I return a smile to you Lary |
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kcsgrandma Senior Member
since 2000-09-24
Posts 1522Presque Isle, ME |
JLR - Thank you for your kind words. I see a lot of people (especially poets ) here and at other sites dealing with the same feelings and questions. Modern life has, perhaps, re-defined what is real, especially in matters of the heart.BC - You have put a huge smile on my face.  Thank you for attempting to find something to critique. I will look forward to next time.Pixy OOPS g -  Thanks. You know, I'd love to send it as a Valentine, but I'm so impatient, I sent it as soon as it was written. Oh well, will have to come up with something else. hugssuthern - Thank you. Glad you enjoyed it. jellybeans - Thank you. Glad you both stopped in. Sunnyone - Thank you for your very sweet reply. Lary - Thank you. As you can see, I received your smile, and it is warming the February night.  To love another person is to see the face of God. - Les Miserables Marilyn |
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ellie LeJeune Member Elite
since 2000-01-10
Posts 4156King of Prussia, PA USA |
You are so right, sometimes reality can be a little different than we percieve it. This is so beautiful...I miss you in the Pub though! Love, Ellie A friend hears the song in my heart, and sings it to me when my memory fails. |
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Poet deVine
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-05-26
Posts 22612Hurricane Alley |
This is lovely! I'm going to put it in my library collection of future possible poems for the newsletter (if you agree)! |
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kcsgrandma Senior Member
since 2000-09-24
Posts 1522Presque Isle, ME |
Ellie - You are always sweet. You, who make us all believe in fairies, surely understand that reality is not always what we think it is. I haven't completely left the Pub, just decided to branch out a little, but thanks for missing me. hugsPdV - I would be honored to be included in that library of yours. Thank you for asking. To love another person is to see the face of God. - Les Miserables Marilyn [This message has been edited by kcsgrandma (edited 02-14-2001).] |
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