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...by a jury of my peers
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...by a jury of my peers |
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jellybeans Member Elite
since 2000-10-13
Posts 2298
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as you saw it i was surely guilty well i should say guilty as you define it to be diffusing the situation pretrial or so i thought i handed you a gun loaded with my apology how was i to know that you planned to turn it on yourself melodramatically falling but never planning to hit the ground, held up by the arms of the many dictionary toting fans waiting to hear testimony the bleeding was purely for effect but only i could see that with a gag i could have stopped it easily linguistics and theatrics kept the many enthralled and i knew when i was out numbered so i offered you a thesaurus to aid in your self-defense put away the gun and any more apologies as i headed out the door the fans were repeating the truths brought to light that day, well, i should say the truth as you define it to be |
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Irish Rose Member Patricius
since 2000-04-06
Posts 10263 |
I'm guessing this is about an English teacher? I found it interesting but confusing. I like your style. "I walked beside the evening sea and dreamed a dream that could not be." George William Curtis |
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hoot_owl_rn Member Patricius
since 1999-07-05
Posts 10750Glen Hope, PA USA |
This is one you have to read several times...very interesting  ~ Ruth www.angelfire.com/pa/OriginalMinds/index.html |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
Jellybean, Excellent writing, those words are pure jellybeans. And your mind runs all the colors. Loved it Sy |
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jellybeans Member Elite
since 2000-10-13
Posts 2298 |
kathleen, no, not a teacher, just people politics, and how some people want to win at all costs...others just walk away hoot, thank you, most of mine is crystal clear, this one maybe a bit hazy seymore, thank you much, I thought maybe i had missed the mark on this one, till you commented |
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suthern
since 1999-07-29
Posts 20723Louisiana |
There are those who will always demand the spotlight and center stage.... but I guess I'm a candlelight and quiet corner type... for their melodramatics just make me tired! LOL This is very thought-provoking... even if it does remind me a bit of my old boss and her rants! LOL. Well done! |
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jellybeans Member Elite
since 2000-10-13
Posts 2298 |
thanks suthern I wish we could all just get along, lol, but then I was always a dreamer hugs lady |
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Secret Whisper Member
since 2001-01-25
Posts 298Through the Looking Glass |
Amazing how you can read peoples behavior so incredibly well! You express something I have a hard time even defining. Brilliant. ~alison~ "Close your eyes, and you'll see." |
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dragonpoe Senior Member
since 2000-11-12
Posts 608Palm Bay, Florida |
This is a mystifying piece. Metaphorical and challenging to understand, but that is its power. I am guessing you put alot of effort into this piece, to me, it shows.. Enjoyed the read. With the word, I am mighty, with the pen I am free.. dragonpoe |
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jellybeans Member Elite
since 2000-10-13
Posts 2298 |
well dragonpoe, i almost wanted to explain this one, but this is one that you have to have seen or been the victim of to understand, there are a few replies like seymore, suthern and secret that tell me they know exactly what I mean, if you would like more you can email me secret whisper, thank you, your reply means much |
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laryalee Member
since 2000-06-19
Posts 352Alberta, Canada |
This is fascinating, Jellybeans! I see it with a 'strobe-light' effect - every time I read it I get a different-colored flash! Some really great lines - chuckles with serious overtones....and if the parts are greater than the sum of its whole - I think that's allowed! Thoroughly enjoyed it! Lary |
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doreen peri Member Elite
since 1999-05-25
Posts 3812Virginia |
JB- your talent is showing again...... |
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Nate Dogg Senior Member
since 1999-11-15
Posts 1658Georgia, Fulton |
Wow, this piece kept me in from star to finish(which isn't an easy task)....excellent piece, Jellybeans! Nathan |
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David2 Member
since 2000-03-22
Posts 407 |
Jellybeans, You have a definite knack for grabbing your reader and enthralling them. I truly enjoyed reading this. thanks, David2 |
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jellybeans Member Elite
since 2000-10-13
Posts 2298 |
doreen...it is???? where??? lol not really talent, its just the ability to get the words out of my head with enough clarity to let my muse sleep at night Nate, thank you very nice of you to say, this was a funny piece, some got it, some didnt', glad you diddavid, what a nice compliment, thank you much |
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emily Member
since 2000-10-03
Posts 142USA |
I don't understand why a poem has to be "gotten" shouldn't it be written to be understood by the reader, whomever he or she may be? I enjoyed it, but not the guessing game .... |
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jellybeans Member Elite
since 2000-10-13
Posts 2298 |
emily, thank you for your comments, there was no guessing game, it was just the kind of poem that you either 'got' it or you didn't...not to say that all people got it the same, but to say that it brought about an understanding......i will explain my poems if asked, but to me a better poem is one that doesn't need explanation |
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Sven
since 1999-11-23
Posts 14937East Lansing, MI USA |
this is excellent. . . it holds so much for the reader. . . I loved it. . . and I know what it's like to be in front of that jury. . . ---------------------------------------------------- To the world, you may only be one person. But to one person, you may be the world. |
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