Open Poetry #12 |
Joyous Ode to my Pen |
laryalee Member
since 2000-06-19
Posts 352Alberta, Canada |
Task-wielding master, obedient slave - to your power I bow, your approval I crave, yet push you relentlessly over my page. Stern-visaged teacher and volatile sprite - you surge as I steer on our journey of write: we delve ancient depths, leap unheralded heights. Appendage of thought on a vertical climb - driving me, pulling me, stretching my mind; dancing with fantasy, unearthing time. Magnificent wanderer - capturing light from sun-rolling heavens and opening night for the rocketing thrust of our destiny flight. You guide as you follow - my heart's in your flow; we sail on desire, emotions in tow with unexplored fathoms of hunger below. |
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Irish Rose Member Patricius
since 2000-04-06
Posts 10263 |
What a truly magnificent metaphor. I applaud you for this!! "I walked beside the evening sea And dreamed a dream that could not be." George William Curtis |
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Wesley the Blue Member
since 1999-09-02
Posts 426Forest Lake, MN, USA |
This is a wonderful poem, did your pen make you write it? Great work Keith every day is a new day with which we can change the world |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
we delve ancient depths, leap unheralded heights. Appendage of thought on a vertical climb - driving me, pulling me, stretching my mind; dancing with fantasy, unearthing time. Magnificent wanderer - capturing light from sun-rolling heavens and opening night for the rocketing thrust of our destiny flight. You guide as you follow - my heart's in your flow; we sail on desire, emotions in tow with unexplored fathoms of hunger below. =========== this is outstanding ..and very cool ... yes wonderful poetic use of metaphor and very cool in its vocabulary choices, its verbiage,and phrases. imagery as well is wonderful and wisdom kissed as well you have captured the way writing makes us feel ... the places it takes us...the way it sets us free. very cool write Lary. If my slight Muse do please these curious days ... The pain be mine ... but thine shall be the praise. ~Shakespeare~ |
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Honeybee Member Ascendant
since 1999-12-26
Posts 5372Ontario, CANADA |
Laryalee~ A wonderful write! I love this, you express the relationship with the heart and pen so well. All poets here should read this gem Take care, Melissa |
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kcsgrandma Senior Member
since 2000-09-24
Posts 1522Presque Isle, ME |
You are clearly a lady of diverse talents! I love the flow of this one. Those pens are complex creatures, aren't they? To love another person is to see the face of God. - Les Miserables Marilyn |
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jwesley Member Rara Avis
since 2000-04-30
Posts 7563Spring, Texas |
Great write, pen, me friend...er, I mean laryalee. Are you the alias or the pen?? Enjoyed the way you did and said this. Those "pens" are miserable masters at times aren't they?? jwesley |
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laryalee Member
since 2000-06-19
Posts 352Alberta, Canada |
Kathleen - Thank you, and may your pen be blessed (it already is *g*)! Keith - How did you guess?! Thanks! Janet Marie - I cherish your words - it's so nice to meet new friends on this journey... Melissa - I will search you out! Nice to meet a fellow Canadian - so glad you enjoyed it. kcs - Yep, mine usually pulls me out of bed at 6 am (or sooner), works best in the morning, heh heh! jwesley - Thanks for the comments - hmm-mm - 'the alias or the pen' - nudge of an idea *g*. Truly appreciate your responses! Lary |
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dgvarner Member Elite
since 2000-05-13
Posts 3552High Springs, Florida |
"appendage of thought"...what a great line! awesome poem..very much liked this one hugs, g "maybe one day we can turn and face our fears maybe one day we can reach out through our tears..." -a grant |
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