Open Poetry #12 |
Overheard Conversation |
Sunshine
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Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
Overheard Conversation “when it’s all said and done,” she said when she was said and done and done in by sad [what a difference a letter makes] “when it’s all said and done” he said when he was done and said that he was sadly done in [what a difference a feeling makes] “what have we to look forward to?” and they queried their thoughts, one on one when all was said, and all was done see into the eyes of the lovers now that love was past pondering thoughts entwining webs, now webs caught once love was wrought and gone you wonder what they were pondering on (are they pondering on their mistakes or just the paths that their steps take?) why was it not the same ~ where is the more in the marriage game ~ where is the forever ~ in the take of a name ~ and why can’t it be like before ~ even though decades have passed through the door ~ where did the want to please go? how did the tired of now grow? why did the sound of the sigh so change? how much more of life is there to be rearranged? and where is that 8 ball with the answers below? why would they want to miss the chance of a forever kiss? where in the world did forever go? ~*~ so somehow the question remains when pondering on others, and their games When it’s all said and done will I still see you in the set of sun? |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
when it’s all said and done,” she said when she was said and done and done in by sad [what a difference a letter makes] “when it’s all said and done” he said when he was done and said that he was sadly done in [what a difference a feeling makes] “what have we to look forward to?” ===================== why was it not the same ~ where is the more in the marriage game ~ where is the forever ~ in the take of a name ~ and why can’t it be like before ~ even though decades have passed through the door ~ where did the want to please go? how did the tired of now grow? why did the sound of the sigh so change? how much more of life is there to be rearranged? ================= *shaking me head* so..that WAS you outside the window listening so that WAS you in my mirror ... so ... now you know ... that I know ... that you know ... that we know ... now all we need to know is the answer to these poetic ponderings... when you know ... let me know...ya know? cuz I've no clue no more ... thank you for the mirror... it helps to know when were in good company...ya know? yes ... you know. If my slight Muse do please these curious days ... The pain be mine ... but thine shall be the praise. ~Shakespeare~ |
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Marge Tindal
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
Karilea~ Brilliant little piece of thinking here ! 'and where is that 8 ball with the answers below?' Where indeed ! LOVE IT ! *smiling* with the memories of that 8 ball ! Love ya' ~*Marge*~ ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~ noles1@totcon.com |
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Tennessee Angel Senior Member
since 2000-06-03
Posts 661Tennessee |
Wow! What a sad and lovely play on words! This is truly an awesome piece of poetry! |
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doreen peri Member Elite
since 1999-05-25
Posts 3812Virginia |
"and where is that 8 ball with the answers below? why would they want to miss the chance of a forever kiss? where in the world did forever go?" *sigh*.... good questions.... excellent writing, karilea! |
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Martie
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since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
Karilea...Where did forever go? Think of all the forevers that are accumulating someplace and no one can find them...someday they will fall through the heavens and crush us all with bliss. |
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Marsha
since 2000-07-10
Posts 7423Maidstone Kent England |
Kari love, this is as always just utterly truly wonderful. The thoughts flow through you like a stream, and the answers, are they really yours or ours to find. And if they're not if that's the case, and I think it is, go with the flow, stop trying to swim against the stream and flow with it. This is truly wonderful dear heart. Really fabulously written, and stop looking and start seeing. (Oh how deep is that ) Take care love as always Majestic mischievious Marsha Take back the hope you gave,- I claim Only a memory of the same Robert Browning |
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Interloper
since 2000-11-06
Posts 8369Deep in the heart |
=================== where did the want to please go? how did the tired of now grow? why did the sound of the sigh so change? how much more of life is there to be rearranged? =================== They left yesterday ... and yesterday cannot be rearranged. Forever is tomorrow reacting to today's actions, words, and thoughts. If we believe we love today, we will love tomorrow. If we say we love today, we will say we love tomorrow. If we show our love today, we will show our love tomorrow. The future is taken care of when we take care of today. You have unsettled me with this work ... Not typical of the Karilea I have come to know and love. Live for love. Without love, you don't live. |
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Irish Rose Member Patricius
since 2000-04-06
Posts 10263 |
a friend of mine said "It is easier to kill love than to nurture it" I never forgot that. Kathleen |
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Sven
since 1999-11-23
Posts 14937East Lansing, MI USA |
You've really hit it on the head Sunshine. . . Excellent writing. . . -------------------------------------------------------- To the world, you may only be one person. But to one person, you may be the world. |
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