Open Poetry #12 |
Love's Mystique |
spiked Senior Member
since 2000-01-13
Posts 873Hammond, La USA |
The flicker of the flaming light Casts shadows on the ceiling I want so much to make it bright The way has no revealing A scream out loud That has no sound The want for love That has no bound The rain that falls so carelessly An echoed sound like in some dream Where life can always turn out right No misdirection on this flight Please take the match And light my flame In silence I will still remain The essence of a lover’s heart Deserving all for which I've fought To pass along each day. |
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Mark Bohannan Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-21
Posts 7269In the winds of Cherokee song |
The rain that falls so carelessly An echoed sound like in some dream Where life can always turn out right No misdirection on this flight ==================================== Great write and especially liked the above verse. The flow was excellent and the Title nothing short of "Perfect" |
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SEA
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Member Seraphic
since 2000-01-18
Posts 22676with you |
Rich~ this is gorgeous! Wow......I liked this very much -SEA |
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Victoria
since 2000-08-12
Posts 5869 |
Lovely Rich..enjoyed your words ~V~ A poem is never finished, only abandoned. - Paul Valery (1871-1945) |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
I really liked the form and the flow of rhyme here...and the loneliness just aches off the screen here...very, very nice, Rich! |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
I want so much to make it bright The way has no revealing ==================== The rain that falls so carelessly An echoed sound like in some dream Where life can always turn out right No misdirection on this flight Please take the match And light my flame In silence I will still remain The essence of a lover’s heart Deserving all for which I've fought To pass along each day. ================== very ... very cool write...VERY cadence kissed longing ... indeed poet sir...way cool If my slight Muse do please these curious days ... The pain be mine ... but thine shall be the praise. ~Shakespeare~ |
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spiked Senior Member
since 2000-01-13
Posts 873Hammond, La USA |
Mark very much enjoyed writing this. Give credit to the Stormy New Orleans weather today. Thank you Sea and "V" Serene Have learned I flow best in this form. Thanks Kool Reply Janet |
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Irish Rose Member Patricius
since 2000-04-06
Posts 10263 |
stormy weather is a great muse! Kathleen |
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spiked Senior Member
since 2000-01-13
Posts 873Hammond, La USA |
Very true Kathleen and much enjoyed at that. Thank you Rich |
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