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Seymour Tabin
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0 posted 2001-01-11 10:40 AM


There she blows

Swallowed by a whale so to speak
Outlook and outcome sort of bleak.
Consumed by the size of the whale
Its view and guise a sorry tail.

No spark no lark this inner tomb
Smells of nothing but rot and gloom.
My feet stuck in the clot of mire
I, listless without desire.

I miss the stars I miss the green
I miss the moon its velvet sheen.
I miss the waters of the sea.
I miss the goal I set to be.

I mark my time detest the dark
My only light the ingest spark
Feeding in depths where grows but woes
Up for a breath and then she blows.

Perhaps one day I'll clear the hole
And shear this vizier of my soul.


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SEA
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1 posted 2001-01-11 10:44 AM


Seymour~

"I miss the stars I miss the green
I miss the moon its velvet sheen.
I miss the waters of the sea.
I miss the goal I set to be."

wow......I really liked this   -SEA

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2 posted 2001-01-11 11:05 AM


I read this three times...and empathy fills me...

inot2B
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3 posted 2001-01-11 11:29 AM


I hope you can climb out of that whale and see the light of day.
Seymour Tabin
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4 posted 2001-01-11 03:18 PM


Sea,
Thanks for the WOW.

Karilea,
Thanks for the empathy. *L*

inot2B,
That is a mute question.

Mike
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5 posted 2001-02-19 06:49 PM


Glad I came across this gem in my wanderings in the depths of Passion's pages...
excellent writing.

Seymour Tabin
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6 posted 2001-02-19 09:40 PM


Thank you much Mike I wondered who dug this up.
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7 posted 2001-02-19 10:40 PM


Like they say, Sy, "all's whale that ends whale...."
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8 posted 2001-02-19 10:46 PM


Oh my Sy!!! Where did you get the inspiration for this gem!!! Loved it.
ethome
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9 posted 2001-02-20 06:26 AM


Excellent Seymour! I never envisioned you as a Jonah but hey he came back! I have to say this is one of the darker ones I have ever read of yours but it's written with such beauty...take care ethome

The poet is like a cocoon; in him the caterpillar of the past finds rest, and from him the butterfly of the future emerges.

Seymour Tabin
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10 posted 2001-02-20 09:01 AM


Balladeer,
Your feeling frisky today, thanks.

DeVine one,
It was the day I went fishing. *L*

Ethome,
Beautiful comment, thanks for the excellent.

Kethry
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11 posted 2001-02-20 04:04 PM


SY,
you have a way with words in that even darkness is beautiful. It's not the place to be but it's the place you are. I'm reminded of "bloom where you're planted"
write on
Kethry

Seymour Tabin
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12 posted 2001-02-20 04:08 PM


Kethry,
Well as they say you can't keep a good whale down. Enjoyed your comment.

NC
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13 posted 2001-02-20 05:08 PM


"my only light the ingest spark"

oh, i like that line!
enjoyed the rest of the poem as well

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