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This Is Joy
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This Is Joy |
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Severn Member Rara Avis
since 1999-07-17
Posts 7704
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You immortalise all definitions of truth (I fail to spill my fire onto a wick of mere words) love, you haunt and caress all these crevices I keep hidden and held away so gently you carve my fear into chiseled remains, so real, so alive, you quicken in the air under my fingertips and I taste the arising run with me, follow, yet it is only your shadow – you curve before me, my guide, I am your penumbra earth-struck I realise this is not made of the mythical stillness stillness I’m aflight, afire waved in hope hushed into flame. This is joy. © K.Mahony 2001 |
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ethome Member Patricius
since 2000-05-14
Posts 11858New Brunswick Canada |
Very well written! Such a unique way to view the depth of joy......and anyone that can include penumbra into a delicate poem.... well.... they will eventually be aflight, afire.. waved in hope....and of course hushed into flame......well done!! |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
and it is joy for me as well, m'love. I have waited to see ya post again? and to see you post this, this, THIS way? HUGS TO HEART FROM ME TO FRIEND... love ya much. |
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Sunshine
Administrator
Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
Oh Little K.....do you know the joy I had in reading this? Wonderful, my friend! Now I get to smile ALL day....{~,^} |
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Elizabeth Santos Member Rara Avis
since 1999-11-08
Posts 9269Pennsylvania |
I'm so happy to see you posting your magic again. Your "wick of mere words", my dear is a your mere genius of poetic expression. Gosh, how I miss you LIz |
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Irish Rose Member Patricius
since 2000-04-06
Posts 10263 |
it's joy to see your face and read your words!!!!!! Kathleen |
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Poet deVine
Administrator
Member Seraphic
since 1999-05-26
Posts 22612Hurricane Alley |
You are definitely writing from your heart! I love this.  |
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Robert Joseph Member
since 2000-10-07
Posts 491South Carolina |
so gently you carve my fear into chiseled remains, so real, so alive K, Always a pleasure to read you, I feel as if I've ascended tier upon tier in the soulfulness of your words. Robert Joseph |
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Mark Bohannan Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-21
Posts 7269In the winds of Cherokee song |
SUPERB!!!!! What a wonderful way to describe joy. This one goes into the library for sure. If you find yourself stranded in a storm ...then reach for my hand and we will play in the puddles together |
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Martie
Moderator
Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
Kamla--Your thoughts of heart are so beautifully expressed here...I am touched by them, and you. |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
Severn, You blew me away with this one. Excellent writing. Sy |
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Marge Tindal 
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
Kamla~ Such pleasured joy you've written - of a heart so obviously smitten - with joy ~ It's such delight to find your quill has spilled the ink of you ... *Hugs* ~*Marge(y)*~  ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~ [email protected] |
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Kit McCallum
Administrator
Member Laureate
since 2000-04-30
Posts 14774Ontario, Canada |
Oh I needed this Kamla ... just beautiful! Lovely, descriptive emotions ... an absolute joy to read, thank you! Best wishes, /Kit |
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Sven
since 1999-11-23
Posts 14937East Lansing, MI USA |
this is Joy. . . but it's also you. . . excellent. . . --------------------------------------------------------- To the world, you may only be one person. But to one person, you may be the world. |
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Mother_Earth Senior Member
since 2000-11-20
Posts 13701/2 year Texas & 1/2 year Michigan |
A new style for me to read and I like it. Being new around here, I enjoy the "feel" of this. Will check in again, ME |
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Dark Angel Member Patricius
since 1999-08-04
Posts 10095 |
Kamla, this is beautiful, so beautiful that it brings tears. sigh Maree |
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wayoutwalt Member Elite
since 1999-06-22
Posts 4870TEXAS (it's all big) |
i'd really like to see the performance yuh yuh haunting i love it |
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Denise
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-08-22
Posts 22648 |
This was a joy to read, Kamla! Denise |
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Poeminister Senior Member
since 2000-02-26
Posts 1862Regina SK; Canada |
Severn--You spilt your fire onto this wick superbly. Enjoyed this muchly. take care, Poeminister "Awaiting welcome light of glory's gold, I search the night to fan salvation's spark." --Claire Brown Bower [This message has been edited by Poeminister (edited 01-27-2001).] |
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Jamie Member Elite
since 2000-06-26
Posts 3168Blue Heaven |
You have touched fire and felt its ability to heal.....it seems Jamie Tu ne cede malis, sed contra audentior ito. - Virgil. "Yield thou not to adversity, but press on the more bravely". |
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Alicat Member Elite
since 1999-05-23
Posts 4094Coastal Texas |
This is definately joy, K, and a wonderful poem and read...enjoyed mucho!  (still smiling big just from reading)Alicat “It is not the strongest of the species that survive, nor the most intelligent, but the one most responsive to change.” Charles Darwin |
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He Junior Member
since 2001-01-15
Posts 41 |
My love No words were ever heart felt more Nor tendered 'pon truths altar in stark giving as you I more than humbled cry tears of the purest joy knowing feeling being 'neath fiery skies your moment forever I do, I will, love you most precious till there is no thing as time if only to see the gift unrivaled sparkling in your eyes the moments we define life (Space, illusion, we traverse love, time but change, we mold, eternal lovers deciding tomorrow's fate, in your arms, the choice is made) Always Makes forever as I am Yours |
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CocoBaci Member Elite
since 2000-05-06
Posts 3043 |
hi Severn, just me dropping by to say I really like your poem and pleaaaaaaase keep writing more.... hugs2u ~coco~ [This message has been edited by CocoBaci (edited 01-28-2001).] |
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ellie LeJeune Member Elite
since 2000-01-10
Posts 4156King of Prussia, PA USA |
ooooo sweet friend, this is soooo delicious! A friend hears the song in my heart, and sings it to me when my memory fails. |
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kaile
since 2000-02-06
Posts 5146singapore |
this is not a critique...this is just one reader's reaction after reading your poem... i had problems with the line You immortalise all definitons of truth that line made me go "huh?" as compared to the rest of your verse which is wonderfully descriptive...i guess i will like to see this concept to be developed further...more details and stuff... this is going to make me sound stupid(and i suspect i might be the only one who feel this way) but this line contains "hard" words and seems to be harsh-sounding...i wasnt expecting them and i was a little disturbed upon reading them....but of course this feeling subsided after your other stanzas... more "soft" words perhaps? and seriously, i think the rest of your poem is great  really |
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Severn Member Rara Avis
since 1999-07-17
Posts 7704 |
Thanks all - there are so many responses here that I truly find it daunting to respond to everyone individually right now, honestly...I appreciate every one of these kind, supportive words - touching anyone's heart with my poetry is a joy for me... Big K smiles Ellie - thanks for bringing it up lol - you really meant it when you said you were going to go find my poetry didn't you? LOL..by bringing it up I'm able to say thanks and those people who responded will see it yay bounce! Kaile - you rock heh...and I will think about your suggestion very seriously.  Critiquing rules! K |
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Corazon Senior Member
since 2000-02-02
Posts 1209 |
wow.....no rips here...just applause |
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Dennis Member
since 2001-02-19
Posts 235Indiana |
Joy is both the beautiful poem and knowing I was in New Zealand at one time oh...if I had only known!!!!! Dennis |
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Severn Member Rara Avis
since 1999-07-17
Posts 7704 |
Hey Corazon - what, no rips? Well! That's a compliment... and Dennis - NZ is a beautiful place that is true...but - only known what exactly???? K |
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pegasus111 Member Elite
since 2000-07-27
Posts 2219ocala, fl, usa |
so...this is what a real poet writes like...mmmmmm..like fine New zealand wine..lol..love the pic too..ahhh..youth springs eternal. the woods are lovely, dark, and deep, but I have promises to keep, and many miles to go before I sleep...Frost |
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catalinamoon
since 2000-06-03
Posts 9543The Shores of Alone |
Waved in hope, this is a feeling that I know well. Wonderful poem, so happy I found it. Sandra |
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