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Deeper into insanity
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Dark Angel Member Patricius
since 1999-08-04
Posts 10095
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Like a zombie I move mechanically eyes aflame falling deeper into insanity into a memory faded a flash reflected my eyes blinded from what is real and walls slam like doors sabotaging the main-spring of my mind my sanity this useless head held in fingers wide spread with the struggle of words left unsaid Angel of Darkness 2/12/2000 "If my words could blanket the skies and fill every corner and crevice of this earth, still this won't be enough" "Maree Russo" |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
I would do cartwheels Maree...but alas, I am 39 years old...and tired. LOL.. Proud of you tonite... The last two verses "wrapped" me...and even rapt me...Hugs to you, m'friend. Guess what? You did it again. |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
this useless head held in fingers wide spread with the struggle of words left unsaid ================ that verse gave me a chill ... the impact of its intention emotional and powerful images and expressions here Maree ... you always capture the reader with your style. very well done... take care angel dear jm I looked into the sky for my anthem The words and music came through But words and music can never touch the beauty that I've seen Looking into you |
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dgvarner Member Elite
since 2000-05-13
Posts 3552High Springs, Florida |
wow...some dark images here... i like this one..the struggles well written.. "into a memory faded a flash reflected my eyes blinded from what is real and walls slam like doors sabotaging the main-spring of my mind my sanity" ...i've been there..... hugs,g  "so lift your heart with mine...the depth to which it grieves is the height to which it can celebrate!" -Lisa Hussey |
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Sunshine
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
the silent power screams softly... very good... Karilea If I whisper, will you listen?... I would rather be silent and write, than speak loudly and be bound. KRJ |
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Poertree Senior Member
since 1999-11-05
Posts 1359UK |
hey there my friend lighten up will ya and start writing bad poetry  , this is too darkly good ...(L) (K) bat MP [This message has been edited by Poertree (edited 12-02-2000).] |
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Martie
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
Maree--This is heavy with emotion...Loved the last stanza....Hugs! |
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Elizabeth
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Member Ascendant
since 1999-06-07
Posts 6871Minnesota |
Powerful emotions....very well done. |
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Sven
since 1999-11-23
Posts 14937East Lansing, MI USA |
A walk into the heart my friend. . . Very powerful. . . ------------------------------------------------------ That which gives light must endure burning --Victor Frankl |
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Irish Rose Member Patricius
since 2000-04-06
Posts 10263 |
You know, I feel this way every time I sit at the computer for oh, say three or four hours. I've been between jobs and I know I'm insane! Fortunately, I begin a new job Monday. This poem I can relate to. Sometimes the words are in there, they are just exhausted. I think they fight among themselves while we sleep.... What is that you express in your eyes? It seems to me more than all the words I have read in my life. Walt Whitman |
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vlraynes Member Rara Avis
since 2000-07-25
Posts 8229Somewhere... out there... |
Maree- wow...i REALLY like this... 'into a memory faded a flash reflected my eyes blinded from what is real and walls slam like doors sabotaging the main-spring of my mind my sanity' AWESOME write...i know this place.. hugs, ~vicky "...until you have read the verse on his heart, you have not truely met the poet." -vlraynes |
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Dark Angel Member Patricius
since 1999-08-04
Posts 10095 |
Sista! Thanks for helping me out of writers block dear, I would join you in doing those cartwheels but I am not far behind ya, so I'll give it a miss as well Thanks HonJM, sorry to give ya a chill hon, but I am glad you enjoyed it! thanks for stopping by and reading dg, thanks so much hon Thanks Sunshine for stopping by and reading Philip, thanks my friend also for the (L) and (K) and batMartie, yeah writers block, not a good thing. thanks for stopping by dear Elizabeth, thank you so much Sven, actually my pen finally walked over the page Thank you. Irish Rose, all the best with your new job believe me, I think they fight with themselves even when we're not sleeping. Thanks for reading Vicky, thank you, so glad you enjoyed it. and thanks for the AWESOME! Thanks all! Maree "If my words could blanket the skies and fill every corner and crevice of this earth, still this won't be enough" "Maree Russo" |
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Aimster Member Elite
since 2000-02-19
Posts 4297Charlotte, NC |
Maree~ I FELT the impact of this completely! Superb writing my friend, even if it is on the dark side. Powerful and intensly written packed full of emotion! Excellent!! Take care. *hugs* ~amy~ |
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wayoutwalt Member Elite
since 1999-06-22
Posts 4870TEXAS (it's all big) |
Dark Angel i like the rhyme yuh yuh and the zombies booooo hehehe yuh seriously I love it! |
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Bill Charles Member Patricius
since 2000-07-11
Posts 10619highways, & byways, for now |
Evening dark angel, You do write some powerful stuff, Phew! But very good, as presented by you. BC |
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Jamie Member Elite
since 2000-06-26
Posts 3168Blue Heaven |
yup |
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Lone Wolf Member Ascendant
since 2000-03-16
Posts 5842Lansing, MI USA |
DA, My friend, it is so hard to find the right words at times. Then all of a sudden, they are pouring out faster than you can write them down. Go figure! Well done. LW Poetry should surprise by fine excess...it should strike the reader as a wording of his own highest thoughts and appear almost a remembrance. -J.Keats |
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Kit McCallum
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Member Laureate
since 2000-04-30
Posts 14774Ontario, Canada |
Wow! Powerful and gripping read Maree ... I loved this, and can relate quite well some days. Great writing! Best wishes, /Kit |
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