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Ruts in Snow
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Ruts in Snow |
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VAS Member Rara Avis
since 2000-11-16
Posts 7450Oregon |
Virginia Salter trail off in both directions one, the memory of your coming the anticipation the joy the other the echo of your going the sadness leading off into the black of night carving into the pure white sheet your path for remaining days away, so far away from the we once together had become ONE © December 14, 2000 |
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ethome Member Patricius
since 2000-05-14
Posts 11858New Brunswick Canada |
The ruts in the snow seem to trail off in both directions for a lot of people. I love the metaphors for sure ... scene well painted with them......very good!! ethome |
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Startime Member Ascendant
since 2000-10-03
Posts 5918Canada |
Oh gosh this was well done. I love the shape too. You put this very well. Much love to you from me. http://www.geocities.com/karenltorbiak/index.html |
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VAS Member Rara Avis
since 2000-11-16
Posts 7450Oregon |
Thanks, ethome and Startime. I have revised this, however; I'd sure appreciate your opinions on the revision. It's posted also. |
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Lady Lightning Member
since 2000-12-04
Posts 422Kentucky |
VAS...I seen this earlier today before you revised and meant to reply then but couldn't , although I liked the first one alot , this is SOOO much better...  ~LL~The way to love anything is to realize it might be lost. author unknown |
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VAS Member Rara Avis
since 2000-11-16
Posts 7450Oregon |
HELLLLLLLP!!!! now I don't know what to do, this is not the revision, this is the 1st rendition ;o};o{ |
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Kit McCallum
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Member Laureate
since 2000-04-30
Posts 14774Ontario, Canada |
1st rendition or no .... it's wonderful VAS. Beautifully worded, and a lovely format to compliment your thoughts. E-mail me and I'll see if I can help you though if you like. Best wishes, /Kit |
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