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snowpants Member Elite
since 2000-09-16
Posts 2061KS |
I’m trying to pull my heart Out of this, But your face still shines in my eyes. I’m desperately attempting To keep the strings of my soul From becoming entwined with yours, But this fierce wind keeps blowing, Making futile my endeavor. If there was something I could do, If there was a way To keep my spirit from lifting Each time you come into sight, Dear soft-hearted love, I would assuredly be my most accomplished. I’m rendered hopeless; I’m afraid the only thing I can fathom being occupied with Is the sweet melody of the affection You send my way On those emptiest of nights When the stars don’t seem To know my name anymore, And the raging waves of the sea Threaten to uproot the stability I’ve gained. So, to answer your question, My Love, I am trying to pull my heart Out of this, But your face still shines In my eyes. 'cause I am hanging on every word you say, and, even if you don't want to speak tonight, that's alright, alright with me... |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
’m trying to pull my heart Out of this, But your face still shines in my eyes. I’m desperately attempting To keep the strings of my soul From becoming entwined with yours, ============== I can fathom being occupied with Is the sweet melody of the affection You send my way On those emptiest of nights When the stars don’t seem To know my name anymore, And the raging waves of the sea Threaten to uproot the stability I’ve gained. So, to answer your question, My Love, I am trying to pull my heart Out of this, But your face still shines In my eyes. ============== this is such an emotional piece of work my goodness... you really put it all out there wonderful expressive mix of imagery and emotions very well done SP ... very well done indeed take care jm Sprayed across my heart and hers Danced butterflies in the wild This angel, this woman , who loves me with the innocence of a child. ~DeVante~ |
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Tony Abbot Member
since 2000-11-18
Posts 209North Wales,UK |
Emotionally charged and moving piece.Thanks. 'Humankind cannot bear too much reality' T.S.Eliot |
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Interloper
since 2000-11-06
Posts 8369Deep in the heart |
Sometimes we can see more clearly with sunshades protecting our eyes. You didn't try ... you succeeded! Live for love. Without love, you don't live. |
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Startime Member Ascendant
since 2000-10-03
Posts 5918Canada |
Sometimes when it involves love we should let our hearts be our guides. This was a moving,heartfelt poem and I loved it. Much love to you from me. Love I leave with you my friend whether it be in your life or of yet the essense of your dreams. http://path2riches.com |
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Charisma
since 2000-09-30
Posts 5906lost in blue pages |
heartfelt poem....wonderful penned. excellent as always. Charisma |
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snowpants Member Elite
since 2000-09-16
Posts 2061KS |
JM: well, thanks! I'm glad you enjoyed it!! Your words are a great compliment!!  Tony: thank you! I'm glad to share it!  Interloper: yep! you're right! Thanks for reading!! Startime: thank you for your reply. you are right. glad you liked it!! Charisma: thanks! I'm glad you enjoyed it!! sp 'cause I am hanging on every word you say, and, even if you don't want to speak tonight, that's alright, alright with me... |
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catalinamoon
since 2000-06-03
Posts 9543The Shores of Alone |
Ah, my friend, you are still in that hard spot. Love is a many edged sword, isn't it? This is a great poem, you expressed that feeling so well. Sandra |
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Aimster Member Elite
since 2000-02-19
Posts 4297Charlotte, NC |
Kris-- amazing, this is! this is simply full of that beautiful heart of yours m'friend. each piece of your work demonstrates more and more of your exceptional gift of poetry. i sit in awe of you. i am loving watching you grow as a poet. i am sorry that this piece happens to hold such a sad piece of your heart, but i have learned thru writing we do begin to heal...the following line struck a major chord with me. take care sweets. your friend, ~amy~ "I’m afraid the only thing I can fathom being occupied with Is the sweet melody of the affection You send my way On those emptiest of nights" amazing!! ~~~~~~~~~~~ ~a~ When the stars don’t seem To know my name anymore |
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snowpants Member Elite
since 2000-09-16
Posts 2061KS |
Sandra: yes, it is. I thank you for stopping by to read! Aim: thank you, my dear friend. You flatter me with each and every reply. You know I'm always glad to see you here! -e ~~~~ sp 'cause I am hanging on every word you say, and, even if you don't want to speak tonight, that's alright, alright with me... |
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Robert Joseph Member
since 2000-10-07
Posts 491South Carolina |
I’m afraid the only thing I can fathom being occupied with Is the sweet melody of the affection You send my way K, Love lingers, doesn't it...like a print in the soul. Compelling work! Robert Joseph |
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snowpants Member Elite
since 2000-09-16
Posts 2061KS |
Very well put, Robert! Thanks! Glad you liked it. sp 'cause I am hanging on every word you say, and, even if you don't want to speak tonight, that's alright, alright with me... |
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