Open Poetry #11 |
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Caught In An Emotion & LoveStruck (two short ones) |
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jwesley Member Rara Avis
since 2000-04-30
Posts 7563Spring, Texas ![]() |
...here are two I wrote earlier this month that I hesitated posting because I wasn't sure they said enough, but they've not changed so here goes...jimmy Caught In An Emotion Caught in an emotion, memories trapped inside, visions of loving, warmth like fire, inside, oh, I feel like shouting; my god, what's this feeling, this ecstascy...I feel so alive, and baby, it's your face I see, your hair, your eyes, your body next to mine; oh my, oh...my, what love my heart does know. LoveStruck Your glass sits next to mine, empty with just a hint of sweet red wine, two sparking vessels, barely touching, like our softly holding hands gently feeling one anothers presence, aware of the world awaiting just inches away, knowing the love of intimate sharing, fingers caressing, lingering with each touch, slowly, sweetly, tentatively saying so much; your hand and mine... lovestruck. w. james beard, jr. © November 2000 [This message has been edited by jwesley (edited 11-28-2000).] |
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Startime Member Ascendant
since 2000-10-03
Posts 5918Canada |
*sigh* you said in these wonderful two stanzas what I take pages to say. *sigh* and you say it with such romance. Beautiful, my friend, I loved it. Thank you so much for sharing with me. Love I leave with you my friend whether it be in your life or of yet the essense of your dreams. [URL=http://path2riches.com]http://path2riches.com |
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Marsha![]()
since 2000-07-10
Posts 7423Maidstone Kent England |
Jwesley, they say all they need too, they are beautifully simple and I love them. Wonderful work from you, really super. take care Mushy Marsha ![]() Take back the hope you gave,- I claim Only a memory of the same Robert Browning |
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SEA![]() ![]()
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Member Seraphic
since 2000-01-18
Posts 22676with you |
JWesley~ I'm so glad you posted these! ![]() ![]() ![]() |
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Denise
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-08-22
Posts 22648 |
These are lovely, Jimmy! Denise |
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Martie
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
Jimmy--I'm glad you didn't try and change these...they are lovely love poems just the way they are! |
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Interloper![]() ![]()
since 2000-11-06
Posts 8369Deep in the heart |
Us guys can't "sigh" (at least not in public), so I'll just say thanks. Live for love. Without love, you don't live. |
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Butterflies_dont_cry Member Elite
since 2000-03-06
Posts 3733Michigan |
I'm not sure how either one of these could possibly say more than what they do...they are beautiful just the way they are! It's not the number of words used to weave the emotion...it's the emotion used to weave the words...and it's obvious you used the perfect amount of both~ The best and most beautiful things in the world cannot be seen or even touched ---- they must be felt with the heart~ *??* |
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Marge Tindal![]() ![]() ![]() ![]()
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
JWesley~ Would a great big WOW ! convince you ? These are both PERFECT ! ~*Marge*~ ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~ [email protected] |
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jwesley Member Rara Avis
since 2000-04-30
Posts 7563Spring, Texas |
Mucho surprised here! Thanks to ALL of you for your more than gracious comments. Touched my heart. jwesley |
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Gemini Senior Member
since 1999-12-15
Posts 1203Wisconsin, USA |
jwesley-They were both wonderful! Complete in and of themselves and I loved both of them. |
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TerryW Senior Member
since 2000-03-23
Posts 779Louisville, Mississippi, USA |
jwesley~ My friend, seems like you are an *incurable* romantic at heart, too! These are wonderful, my friend. Straight from the heart!!! ![]() ~you reached inside, you touched my heart, and I am all the better for it~ Terry A. Woodson, Jr. |
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jwesley Member Rara Avis
since 2000-04-30
Posts 7563Spring, Texas |
Thank you Gemini and TerryW (My wifes name is TerryB) and may Romantics rule the world. Deep bow here, my friends.... |
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kaile![]() ![]()
since 2000-02-06
Posts 5146singapore |
short in length they may be but short in impact they are not... unlike Startime, i doubt all the pages i use will ever convey such emotions as effectively as you do so here... enchanting read ![]() |
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