Open Poetry #11 |
Let Me Be...... |
Balladeer
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Posts 25505Ft. Lauderdale, Fl USA |
Let me be your raincoat when dark clouds form overhead Let me be the comforter you snuggle with in bed Let me be the medicine to ease your misery Should you believe you're all alone, let your thoughts be of me. Let me be the tissue that you use to dry your tears Let me be arms open wide to override your fears Let me be a quiet thought you keep inside your brain Should life sing you a song of sadness, make me your refrain. Let me be the feel of evening breeze upon your cheek When you describe emotions, let me be the words you speak Let me be your summer day when winter comes with chill If weakness causes you to falter, let me be your will. Let me be the melody to chase away the blues When you need easy listening, let me be the one you choose Let me be the sunshine to make darkness fade from view And, most of all, I pray that you will let me be...with you. |
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PaulF Junior Member
since 2000-11-20
Posts 19 |
Beautiful work Balladeer, I've read much here before posting and this one is very deserving of praise. |
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Kethry Member Rara Avis
since 2000-07-29
Posts 9082Victoria Australia |
'Deer, if I were to let you be... could you, would you, let it be me, write on Kethry. Could a greater miracle take place than for us to look through each other's eyes for an instant - Thoreau |
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Temptress
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Member Rara Avis
since 1999-06-15
Posts 7136Mobile, AL |
Beautiful and romantic. Your work never falls short of my expectations of you. |
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Tony Abbot Member
since 2000-11-18
Posts 209North Wales,UK |
I concur,very well written and heartwarming.Thanks. 'Humankind cannot bear too much reality' T.S.Eliot |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
Better be careful sweetstuff... your gonna cause a stampede... do we need to take a number? do an audition? fill out a resume? What does one need to do to be the one to steal this heart true blue? Wonderful sincere sweet poem ... we all need to be loved like this... we all can be in poetry You know I love when ya put your heart to rhyme.. makes me feel all warm and spammy inside later-make us *sigh* gator jm Sprayed across my heart and hers Danced butterflies in the wild This angel, this woman , who loves me with the innocence of a child. ~DeVante~ |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
How could I possibly say no? This is in your usual perfect meter and lovely style... |
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Marge Tindal
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
Balladeer~ You romantic devil you ! ! Well .. OKAY ... you talked me into it ! I will let you be my shelter to keep me safe and warm Snuggle down each evening in your loving arms If you are beside me I'll have no need to cry So we can skip the tissues we don't have to buy Oh, the evening breeze of you blowing softly on my cheek Would cause me sure surrender You'd have no need to speak Hold me close and sing a song I'll hum the melody and kiss you oh, so sweetly If you'd but sing to me You are just the perfect man I'd want to hold me tight enfolded in your loving arms through each and every night I will want to be with you when the sun has gone to rest Your wish will be my command and I will love you best *Did you mean it ? ~*Marge*~ ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~ [email protected] |
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Kit McCallum
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since 2000-04-30
Posts 14774Ontario, Canada |
Oh, this is so beautiful Michael ... it sings so sweetly of thoughts I so endear, the strength to lift one up from the sadness and fill them with light ... ahhhh ... tender, delicate and treasured are these words ... beautiful thoughts from a caring and warm heart. Best wishes, /Kit |
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Poet deVine
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since 1999-05-26
Posts 22612Hurricane Alley |
I guess you better get a bigger blanket!!! We'll all be here under it with you...maybe you need to schedule snuggle time with us! |
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Martie
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since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
Balladeer--You have been so romantic lately...I love it!!!!! |
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Denise
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since 1999-08-22
Posts 22648 |
Softly romantic, very beautiful!! Denise |
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doreen peri Member Elite
since 1999-05-25
Posts 3812Virginia |
This is a great lyric, Michael... reminds me of my sister (but just a little bit)... years ago, she used to do a satire of the Beatles, "Let it Be"... while behind the bathroom door.... lol... she'd sing this - "Let me be! Let me be! Go away and let me pee! Here's my words of wisdom - Let me pee!" ohh... geez, my sister's sense of humor could sometimes be sardonic... ROFL... but, hey? I'm just hoping it's not a family thing, y'know? anyway, great poem.... lucky Muse! |
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jwesley Member Rara Avis
since 2000-04-30
Posts 7563Spring, Texas |
Well and romantically done, my friend. jwesley |
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Irish Rose Member Patricius
since 2000-04-06
Posts 10263 |
Your essence shines through with this one, Michael, as a lighthouse. This is lovely. What is that you express in your eyes? It seems to me more than all the words I have read in my life. Walt Whitman |
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SEA
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since 2000-01-18
Posts 22676with you |
Balladeer~ this felt like a warm soft hug....ummmmmm.....I like that -SEA |
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Balladeer
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since 1999-06-05
Posts 25505Ft. Lauderdale, Fl USA |
PaulF...I appreciate it. Thank you.... Kethry..saving up for the air fare as we speak! Temptress...I hope I never do..thank you Tony...and I thank you, sir! Janet Marie...an audition? I LIKE it!! LOL! You would NEVER have to audition for anyone! serenity...I was hoping you couldn't!!! Marge...WOW! Your response is better than my poem! Green Swamp Road, you say? Kit...thank you for such beautiful words. Yes, I feel that being there for someone is one of the best things one can do...I see you do, too. Why am I not surprised? deVine one...what a wonderful picture THAT paints!! Ready and willing!! Martie...I don't understand it! It just comes out that way...I'm sick!! (but glad you like it) denise...I appreciate your approval...very much. Doreen...LOL! Gotta appreciate a sense of humor like that! Yep, you two have a lot in common...you're both great!! jwesley...I appreciate it, sir, and the friendship.. Rose...being referred as a lighthouse by you is very special. Thank you! SEA....Wonderful! That's what I hoped for! Thank you.... |
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Paula Finn Member Ascendant
since 2000-06-17
Posts 5546missouri |
Bigger comforter bigger raincoat...you sure touch hearts with this one Ignore those who would clip your wings...fly ever upward...even if it means scorched wings |
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Victoria
since 2000-08-12
Posts 5869 |
Words that any lady would love to hear... ~Victoria~ A poem is never finished, only abandoned. - Paul Valery (1871-1945) |
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Butterflies_dont_cry Member Elite
since 2000-03-06
Posts 3733Michigan |
Awe...Deer you had me in the second line...in Michigan one can always use an extra comforter after playing in the snow This is so beautiful and full of that heart that makes the ladies swoon...love the way you weave~ The best and most beautiful things in the world cannot be seen or even touched ---- they must be felt with the heart~ *??* |
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Sunshine
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since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
Good gosh 'Deer, this is inspirational...whoever is whispering in your ear...keep her! Karilea If I whisper, will you listen?... I would rather be silent and write, than speak loudly and be bound. KRJ |
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ethome Member Patricius
since 2000-05-14
Posts 11858New Brunswick Canada |
Let me be another poet to tell you that this is simply a great work of poetry...and the lines are very song lyric oriented...they could be put to music very easily...they have that wonderful romance of music swimming through them.....good stuff!! Now I know why they call you Balladeer....ethome |
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Charisma
since 2000-09-30
Posts 5906lost in blue pages |
*sigh* this is a wonderful promise....LET ME BE.... worth a thread, so I can read it again, and hold you on these words of promise. truly love it. (((hugs)) Charisma |
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Sudhir Iyer Member Ascendant
since 2000-04-26
Posts 6943Mumbai, India : now in Belgium |
Fantastic work, O sir Balladeer... regards, sudhir |
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Sunshine
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since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
Oh no, let's not "Let Him Be" and crash the party... Karilea If I whisper, will you listen?... I would rather be silent and write, than speak loudly and be bound. KRJ |
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Honeybee Member Ascendant
since 1999-12-26
Posts 5372Ontario, CANADA |
Your tender heart shines in this, I love the romantic side of you. And of course, this is expressed so wonderfully. This gets a big 'awwwwwww!' Melissa~ |
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Balladeer
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since 1999-06-05
Posts 25505Ft. Lauderdale, Fl USA |
Oh, boy!! I love your awwwwwwwws, honeybee lady |
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latearrival Member Ascendant
since 2003-03-21
Posts 5499Florida |
It is that time when I go wandering and this should be read again. martyjo |
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