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Etherial Sound
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Martie
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since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California 
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Ethereal Sound She sits in the orchestra pit in the dark, the stage is empty, but if you listen closely you can hear as the heavy maroon curtains sway as if something had whispered by leaving soul prints of sound dust swirls of a moment time melted and fused to the hardwood floor. She is covered with shadows as her tapered fingers reach out and pluck the air and her eyes close like soft shades across the pale glow of her cheek. She is electrifying the air around her the empty chairs vibrate into a hum and on the stage the grand piano that had been closed and mute opens and the keys move in and out as a scale falls across the dark that only she can hear and for just a minute she looks up and nods in that direction then like pearls her eyes fall into the stagnate air. |
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Kit McCallum
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since 2000-04-30
Posts 14774Ontario, Canada |
You know Martie ... just when I think I've read the most beautiful work from you yet ... you astound me with something like this treasure yet again. What an incredible portrait you penned. I could see this as clearly as if I were hiding in the back rows, watching from a distance, almost hearing the sounds as she reminsces ... exceptional Martie!  Best wishes, /Kit [This message has been edited by Kit McCallum (edited 11-26-2000).] |
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Irish Rose Member Patricius
since 2000-04-06
Posts 10263 |
This is a very well written poem, Martie, is weaves a story, makes the reader feel they are there and you've made it flow. I really liked this one. What is that you express in your eyes? It seems to me more than all the words I have read in my life. Walt Whitman |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
but if you listen closely you can hear as the heavy maroon curtains sway as if something had whispered by leaving soul prints of sound dust swirls of a moment time melted and fused to the hardwood floor. She is covered with shadows as her tapered fingers reach out and pluck the air and her eyes close like soft shades across the pale glow of her cheek. ============== as a scale falls across the dark that only she can hear and for just a minute she looks up and nods in that direction then like pearls her eyes fall =============== and you create the same magic and grace with your pen ... and may I echo Kit's perfectly said comments... exceptional, yes and add enchanting and exquisite... yes..indeed me |
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Marge Tindal 
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
Martie~ Visions from the front row - just a lovely and nostalgic piece of writing. You made me hear the music. I thank you for that. ~*Marge*~ ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~ [email protected] |
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Tony Abbot Member
since 2000-11-18
Posts 209North Wales,UK |
You've really captured the magic of music with this piece.Quite enchanting. 'Humankind cannot bear too much reality' T.S.Eliot |
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Marsha
since 2000-07-10
Posts 7423Maidstone Kent England |
Martie, this is utterly beautiful, I'm constantly amazed at how each time your poems are more and more beautiful. This is yet another perfect gem. I truly love it. Take care Mushy Marsha  Take back the hope you gave,- I claim Only a memory of the same Robert Browning |
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Martie
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since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
Kit--You do have the most lovely way of replying...thank you for that. Kathleen--that's just what I wanted to do..thanks for telling me. Janet--I thank you for your friendship and your way with words. Marge--If you could hear the music then I am very pleased. Tony--Thank you so much for stopping to read and for that word enchanting...love it! Marsha--I'm so glad that you enjoyed this poem...thanks so much for telling me how much. |
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Mike Member Elite
since 1999-06-19
Posts 2462 |
*applause* |
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Denise
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-08-22
Posts 22648 |
Very lovely, Martie! I could hear the music too! Denise |
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Dark Angel Member Patricius
since 1999-08-04
Posts 10095 |
Another beautiful, captivating and magical poem by you Martie, I love where you take me. Can't wait for the next trip then like pearls her eyes fall into the stagnate air. sigghhhh "If my words could blanket the skies and fill every corner and crevice of this earth, still this won't be enough" "Maree Russo" |
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Balladeer
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since 1999-06-05
Posts 25505Ft. Lauderdale, Fl USA |
This is it, Martie...it's number one on my list of all your work. I could actually see, not only the actions being performed, but also inside her mind. I could read her thoughts and share in her imagination...and you did it all without a leaf falling or a season turning! This poem is exquisite, dear Martie. I love it! |
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Sunshine
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since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
oh boy oh boy oh boy...I love this one... and I'll get to my promise "soon"...hugs... Karilea If I whisper, will you listen?... I would rather be silent and write, than speak loudly and be bound. KRJ |
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Poertree Senior Member
since 1999-11-05
Posts 1359UK |
better late than never the closure was just terrific, perhaps one of your best... i would love to say much more but haven't time right now.. you are very very talented P |
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Wilfred Yeats Member Elite
since 2000-08-04
Posts 2704Wilmington, Delaware |
I go away for a few days - and you are inspired to write (So far I've found) 3 great poems - each on a different subject each a masterpiece in its own right! - wow - double wow - - must I stay away? I hope not! |
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CocoBaci Member Elite
since 2000-05-06
Posts 3043 |
hi Martie, I came across this one and I'm here to say how much I enjoyed reading this tonite... It's an exquisite write... Coco |
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Martie
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since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
I must thank Coco for bringing this back up and to my attention that I hadn't thanked a few people for their replies...I'm so sorry! Mike--thank you for the applause...a curtsy here. Denise--thank you again for being there. Maree--Thanks hon for the sigh. Balladeer--what wonderful words you say...make me feel good, my friend..thank you. Sunshine...I'm always so glad to see you. Philip--you make me blush. Bill...No, don't go away. Coco--thank you so much for bringing this back up and for your kind comment. |
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