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Could I Ever |
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DreamSeeker Member
since 2000-11-17
Posts 72 |
In Truth Could I Ever Bring Myself To The Final Ending Goodbye As We All Are Told We Must Bid The Landscapes Sinrises Sunsets Painted In Our Corporeal Eye That In Truth Would Be Farewell To Dreams To Every HeartBeatShared No Not I Tomorrow Nor Today Could Ever Turn From SoulsWovenClose I Cannot Deny We Are Beyond The FleshRealm Splitting Of An Atom Nothing When The Fusing Is 1,000 Times More Powerful Lights All Life Silent Vigil Screams Haze Of Fear Cloaks Eyes Cannot Tear My Heart From Home No One No Thing Can Ever Touch Me There The See Is To Realize The Knowing Is Believing The Ultimate Trust Holds To Bonds Unseen Makes Reality Of Every Dream The Song That Is Soul It Reaches Defiant Giving It In And Given Calling All Souls Rise |
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Sunshine
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
Yours is an interesting format...esp. "Sinrises"... and leaves one thinking... thank you... Karilea If I whisper, will you listen?... I would rather be silent and write, than speak loudly and be bound. KRJ |
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DreamSeeker Member
since 2000-11-17
Posts 72 |
Do we not All Feel SinRises, would that we could fel that rising! Being human, in honesty can we bring all, wihout the foolishness magnified. I thank you for your comments. As I should have you and others intitally. I in my trepidation, have spoken only in stanzas. Foolish, nay, too careful me. I too once hosted sites similar and compliment you on your skills. |
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Sven
since 1999-11-23
Posts 14937East Lansing, MI USA |
this is excellent. . . challenges the reader to think about what you're saying. . . well done. . . ------------------------------------------------------- That which gives light must endure burning --Victor Frankl |
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DreamSeeker Member
since 2000-11-17
Posts 72 |
Thank You, If one replies: "You have made me think" is to me the Ultimate Compliment. Stepping from the shadows.... |
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BloomingRose Member Elite
since 2000-08-09
Posts 3092Florida |
To trust the dream, but know the unseen to be the truth of it, is the reality of faith. Interesting write from you. Deb |
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wayoutwalt Member Elite
since 1999-06-22
Posts 4870TEXAS (it's all big) |
dream so nice a poem you have written not evil in anyway. i likes it alot |
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Poeminister Senior Member
since 2000-02-26
Posts 1862Regina SK; Canada |
"No One No Thing Can Ever Touch Me There The See Is To Realize The Knowing Is Believing" DreamSeeker, You have such a unique way with words...I like your compounds --"HeartBeatShared" and "SoulsWovenClose" -the way you put those words as one-- I've seen that much in your comments too and it's a very unique and effective way of expressing yourself. Very insteresting thoughts here. Enjoyed the read. take care, Poeminister < !signature--> "...no single sound too rude upon thy slumber shall intrude, Our thoughts, our souls- O God above! In every deed shall mingle, love." -Poe [This message has been edited by Poeminister (edited 11-25-2000).] |
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Startime Member Ascendant
since 2000-10-03
Posts 5918Canada |
To see the truth within the weaving of the dream. Ah yes, this caught my eye as I love to weave dreams that are wrapped up in the truth that is me. Thank you for such a wonderful read. |
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Denise
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-08-22
Posts 22648 |
Very nicely penned, DreamSeeker! Denise |
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doreen peri Member Elite
since 1999-05-25
Posts 3812Virginia |
you have a very unique style... i've read several of yours now... this, being the first i responded to (please excuse me if you can, there are SO many poets here and i try to read as much as i can).... i wonder about the "initial caps"... why you incorporate every word with a capitalized first letter... but that's not for here in Open... more of a "critique" thing, maybe... just wondering why... anyway... this one is strong in phrasing and imagery, as the others were of yours which i've read.... and i look forward to reading more.... clearly, you have a lot to say... and i would like to listen.... nice work.... welcome to passions!  |
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