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DreamSeeker
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since 2000-11-17
Posts 72


0 posted 2000-12-29 08:40 PM


I like
All Others
All I SayDo
Human Dichotomy

Searching

Sailing Twixt
Heart and Mind
A Breathtakingly Slow
And Constricting Instant Race

EvermoreSearching

I, I Question ALL
ALL the Time
Demanding Aceeptable Proofs
Who Defines That I Recalculate

Reaching Reaching

Unfortunately Seen
Too Many Ministers Punch
The TimeClock
And Run

ScreamPonderingSees

PracticeWhatYouPreach
Would Love To Say
That is Me Being Human I
Constantly Nullify That Dream

SomeHowBelieving

Wish I Had
No Prejudcies
No Anger
No PreJudged Beliefs

Sorry Self Cannot Live Again
Each Day Again
Reclassifying Thoughts
I Was Given

SeekingPastTearedWindows

I Was Given Many Things
As We All Love of Love
Biases To Hatreds Painted On
That List Of Growing

I Must Apologize
I Am Just A Human Being
Look Round With X Billions Of Us
What Have We Created

ScreamingRendingLife

Looking To What We Swear Allegiance To
What We have BeenShould Be
ToldShowPreachedPresented
All Invoking Dying Loyalty

Death In A Minor key

My Heart I Say
Has Loyaltys Too
I Wish I Wish They Were
Dedicated All To Wisdom And Truth

StrivingBloodySoulSeeing

I Cannot Claim Neither Wisdom Nor Truth
Could That Ever Come True
This Life A Pathways Portal Human
I Feel Fault and Folly Rising Always


HearingSelf ScreamingWorld

But I Do, Strive To Be
To SeeFeel The Ways BeyondVision
Wrestle With The Question GOD
Via ever KnownToMe Religion

I Still EndUpSaying
That Which We Call God
How I Wish I Was Enlightened
Regular Stroll The Golden Mile

OpeningHeartKnowsSoul

Sorry Self Still Human
Cannot Seem To Find The Mile
One Thing Need To Say
Aches In Every Moment

I Breathe Haunts Me Stalks
Me From Youth No Escape
Voluntary Blinders In Place
Worn By Masses Tear Away The MindsNight

TearsBringingHopeRemaining

OH PEOPLE WHAT COULD
WE BE IF WE OPENED
OUR HEARTS OUR MINDS
OUR EYES OUR SOULS

Where Would We Be

RisingFeelingBeingLight

That World of Unconditional Grace
If Only We Could Be
Inside, How I Wish
I Was Love, And Love Only



The Song That Is Soul
It Reaches Defiant
Giving It In And Given
Calling All Souls Rise


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Sven
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Posts 14937
East Lansing, MI USA
1 posted 2000-12-29 08:43 PM


ThenLoveBe And Love You Shall Be
For In Your Words You Show Your Love
AndInYourLove
Shall Be Love For All

excellent DreamSeeker. . .

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That which gives light must endure burning
--Victor Frankl


DreamSeeker
Member
since 2000-11-17
Posts 72

2 posted 2000-12-29 09:01 PM


Merci

Many Thanks,

A poem of this length, let alone the subjectivity it reeks of,  I kow can be a difficult read indeed.

Again My Thanks for your reading my Wrestliing with words,
How I wish I could Convey.
Still one tries to speak of that inside.


doreen peri
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since 1999-05-25
Posts 3812
Virginia
3 posted 2000-12-29 10:06 PM


quote:
I, I Question ALL
ALL the Time
Demanding Aceeptable Proofs
Who Defines That I Recalculate

Reaching Reaching

Unfortunately Seen
Too Many Ministers Punch
The TimeClock
And Run


and

quote:
I Must Apologize
I Am Just A Human Being
Look Round With X Billions Of Us
What Have We Created

ScreamingRendingLife

Looking To What We Swear Allegiance To
What We have BeenShould Be
ToldShowPreachedPresented
All Invoking Dying Loyalty

Death In A Minor key


first, i think "Death In A Minor Key" would be a GREAT title for this....

second... you've blown me away with some of the images and phrasing .... excellent work (still don't get the initial caps, though... sorta makes it harder to read, but that's just me...)... i don't usually make comments about the structure of a poem or anything in Open forum but ... lol... i did!!! so oh well... forgive me...

'human dichotomy' indeed.... what a perpexing situation we all are in, huh?

i truly am enjoying your writing.......



[This message has been edited by doreen peri (edited 12-29-2000).]

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