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Word Benders
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Word Benders |
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1slick_lady Member Ascendant
since 2000-12-22
Posts 6088standing on a shadow's lace 
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Word Benders word benders message senders be careful with your lines words that heal some still kill hidden treasures in your rhymes deceivers some believers spinning your silver twine misconstrue thoughts of you your words are all prime some soft some take right off phrases that are sublime be leery we are weary understanding your chime yet, find no shame within your game but all things do come back in time |
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HiddenSparklez Member
since 2000-12-29
Posts 190British Columbia, Canada |
Great poem! It follows all into one with your rhyming scheme. |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
I liked your form in this...not sure of the message...as ya know, sometimes intrepretation is half of the art of poetry, and ya just never know what chord you're gonna strike in somebody when they read. It's all relative. But I did like the style of this one....glad to see you're having fun. |
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spiked Senior Member
since 2000-01-13
Posts 873Hammond, La USA |
Slick aren't we all word benders in one way or another? Great poem Rich |
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Member Rara Avis
since 1999-06-15
Posts 7136Mobile, AL |
I see your point clearly I think, and you've done a wonderful job of getting it accross fluently.  Can I be your willful breeze, Come to touch, Your heart to ease? |
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brian madden Member Elite
since 2000-05-06
Posts 4374ireland |
well said, our words have the power to touch and in some sense influence others. A message worth noting and a poem well written. It's in your eyes a fire that's wild and glorious Unhibited, unfinished in everything I do Let the morning rise like our hearts desire" whipping boy |
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doreen peri Member Elite
since 1999-05-25
Posts 3812Virginia |
i've heard it said that words are just words. or are they? what power do they hold? i'm a firm believer that the old saying, "the pen is mightier than the sword" didn't become an "old saying" for no reason... words linger. sometimes things are spoken and once they are spoken, there's no way to retract them. anyway... all this to say that i enjoyed the structure and rhyme of this and the theme behind it regarding the power of words.... i'm still learning, myself, but i'm trying my best to think first, speak or write second. words can have a deep effect on people.... thanks for an interesting read.... |
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maxtec1 Senior Member
since 2000-12-09
Posts 577Garland, Tx |
Bravo!!!! Standing O This one of the best poems Ive read in a while. Gee wished I had wrote it. LOL great job friend. Love and light, Richard |
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