Open Poetry #11 |
“Pieces” |
Sunnyone Member Ascendant
since 2000-07-06
Posts 5334Staffordshire, England |
Pieces of a puzzle lying scattered on the floor, wait to be united in a frame… But in this tale, the missing piece eludes us evermore… And no one is at fault, or is to blame… There are pieces of our lives that never fit the norm… We work around them, wishing them away… While days are spent in endless effort, trying to conform… And learning rules to games we’re forced to play… But once upon a great, great while, you lose a vital piece… which throws your ordered life into the wind… You tread the waters, waiting for this new chaos to cease, but when it does, you find you’re at “The End”! The pieces of the puzzle have been left upon the floor… Left to be forgotten in the dust… Until two other hearts arrive to make love whole once more, the pieces lie there, scattered, as they must… Write on! -<--<--{(@ |
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CocoBaci Member Elite
since 2000-05-06
Posts 3043 |
Oh SUNNY1, it's such a treat to come across you this eve... I read your poem two times hun and your words expressed have touched me... A great write one I shall keep for many more reads Hugs2u PoetFriend |
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Sunnyone Member Ascendant
since 2000-07-06
Posts 5334Staffordshire, England |
Hi Coco..... Oh it is good to see you, too! Glad we could share some thoughts tonight, and glad that you enjoyed this read. I thank you for your reply, as it's always good to see you!! Write on! -<--<--{(@ |
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Wilfred Yeats Member Elite
since 2000-08-04
Posts 2704Wilmington, Delaware |
I like the puzzle imagery - great poem Sunny - Like this a lot |
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vandana
since 1999-10-22
Posts 10463USA |
enjoy the read |
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Stan Member
since 2001-01-01
Posts 120Inland Empire Southern California |
Dear Ms Twinkle-eyes I so enjoy seeing your thoughts in a style and rhythm where the meter carries the reader along and the message is packaged in a lovely synthesis of idea and form. And the idea here is one of a complex thought beautifully portrayed. |
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Sunnyone Member Ascendant
since 2000-07-06
Posts 5334Staffordshire, England |
~~~ Hi Wilfred ~~~ Yes, life has always seemed like a puzzle to me, and sometimes the pieces just don't fit!! Thank you, as I always look forward to your comments!! ~~~ Hi vandana ~~~ And I thank you, my friend........I enjoy having you stop by!! ~~~ Hi Stan ~~~ Oh.......I love how you write.......be in poetry or reply!! Thank you, my new friend!! Write on! -<--<--{(@ |
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Bill Charles Member Patricius
since 2000-07-11
Posts 10619highways, & byways, for now |
Evening Sunny, Such wisdom you have in that soft heart of yours. And what you have said, I find very true, very true indeed. BC |
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Irish Rose Member Patricius
since 2000-04-06
Posts 10263 |
Sunny I loved these lines "The pieces of the puzzle have been left upon the floor… Left to be forgotten in the dust… Until two other hearts arrive to make love whole once more, the pieces lie there, scattered, as they must…" What an alternative to dusting. Wow, thank you for this one. "Every man dies. Not every man truly lives." Braveheart Kathleen |
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catalinamoon
since 2000-06-03
Posts 9543The Shores of Alone |
I am but a leftover piece of the puzzle, but I am together enough to know this is a fantastic poem. Very, very good, loved it. Sandra |
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Sunnyone Member Ascendant
since 2000-07-06
Posts 5334Staffordshire, England |
~~~ Evenin' Bill ~~~ I suppose if most of us really took a good look, we'd find a few missing pieces!! Thank you for seeing my meaning here!! ~~~ Kathleen ~~~ Thank you for reading, my friend......I really do appreciate it when you stop by!! ~~~ catalinamoon ~~~ I wrote this for both of us.....knew you would see that when you read it. Thank you for reading, too!! Write on! -<--<--{(@ |
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Greeneyes
since 2000-09-09
Posts 9903In Your Poetic Mind |
Sunny~ the many pieces of the puzzles in my life...*s* would take a ball room to fill and piece together.....these words, what a wonderful write.... Greeneyes~ *** "Within you I lose myself Without you I find myself Wanting to be lost again." -Unknown |
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brian madden Member Elite
since 2000-05-06
Posts 4374ireland |
love can be a puzzle some times, You tread the waters, waiting for this new chaos to cease, but when it does, you find you’re at “The End”! Wonderful write. There's a feeling of contentment Now that you are here I feel satisfied I belong inside Your velvet heaven" Depeche mode |
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Mark Bohannan Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-21
Posts 7269In the winds of Cherokee song |
And we all know that your pieces are all to one of them 3-dimensional puzzles. This was a fantasic write sis. You know I love it when you reach down and pull one out of your puzzle box of a heart. |
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Kethry Member Rara Avis
since 2000-07-29
Posts 9082Victoria Australia |
Sunny, you put the pieces together so well! write on Kethry Those of us who refuse to risk and grow get swallowed up by life. Patty Hansen. |
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Sunnyone Member Ascendant
since 2000-07-06
Posts 5334Staffordshire, England |
~~~ Hi Greeneyes ~~~ Yes.......I know the feeling about having too many pieces. But at some point in time they will fit for you, and the picture will be spectacular!! ~~~ Hi brian ~~~ Oh, I'm so glad that you enjoyed "The End"!! I guess we've all had that feeling, eh? Thank you for coming by, always good to see you!! ~~~ Hi Mark ~~~ Sometimes it seems my pieces are more transparent than dimensional.......hard to find!! I thank you, big brother......and send a hugg your way, too!! ~~~ Hi Kethry ~~~ So good to see you today......and glad that you liked my puzzled!! Thank you!! Write on! -<--<--{(@ |
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Paula Finn Member Ascendant
since 2000-06-17
Posts 5546missouri |
Hey twin of my heart...once again you have written me...a puzzle missing a piece...yep thats exactly how I feel...love you |
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Sunnyone Member Ascendant
since 2000-07-06
Posts 5334Staffordshire, England |
~~~ Hi Paula ~~~ So.........we are alike in that respect once again!! It is so good to see you again.....I have missed your input!! Write on! -<--<--{(@ |
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Nate Dogg Senior Member
since 1999-11-15
Posts 1658Georgia, Fulton |
This piece is full of wisdom Sunny...great write! Nathan |
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Sunnyone Member Ascendant
since 2000-07-06
Posts 5334Staffordshire, England |
~~~ Hi Nathan ~~~ Wisdom, like beauty, is in the eye of the beholder!! Thank you so much, my friend..I do so appreciate your reading my words!! Write on! -<--<--{(@ |
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