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brian madden Member Elite
since 2000-05-06
Posts 4374ireland 
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Was posted in Crit recently but has been reworked a few times. ======================================= 1 I used to hide from its awry gaze, and deny myself the comfort of skin worn as an ill fitting duffel coat. Not now as I ponder identity and domino philosophy in full presence of the looking glass stage Though I must confess to Alice syndrome, for I am a spectator to topsy turvy reality. With each question resolved I am left with three unsolved. Constantly I chase my chase my tail, waiting for the white hares of insanity to crown me, and proclaim me Confucius sporting stigmata scars, bandaged in swabs of vinegar. 2 My skins, my fears my everything clutter my vision like trash not worthy of a junk yard sale, .yet I live each day in self prostitution, on my knees eager to please every request. People look straight at me seeing only through tainted perception, an out of focus reception. I am the only one who dared looked inside of me. So deep my eyes now ache, I fear they will explode at their sockets like omelette volcanoes. My mirror reflection is an obsession and I am its one fixation. Two shades peer intensely at the other and see nothing not even a ghost a myth or fabrication. 3 it is all just murky water, a mask of sickly browns, reflecting distortions of knowledge already acquired. Anything new is revealed only in Braille; meaningless dots you have to be blind to read. Oh the irony. To evolve I have to dare to place my fingers into the shadows. Is that why I was given ten digits? Ten mistakes to be made, then what, be fingerless after stumbling across crocodiles and mousetraps? Too unanchored that my bed is the only safe zone, so I slip into a dream where God is still unknown, and the Universe so small that those who see it can perfectly understand. < !signature--> It's in your eyes a fire that's wild and glorious Unhibited, unfinished in everything I do Let the morning rise like our hearts desire" whipping boy [This message has been edited by brian madden (edited 12-31-2000).] |
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Denise
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-08-22
Posts 22648 |
This is some serious introspection, Brian. Very well expressed. Fabulous writing, as always! Denise |
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Mark Bohannan Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-21
Posts 7269In the winds of Cherokee song |
Quick pinch yourself. This was excellent "Sir Brian". Nice to see you back in here posting. This one sounds as if you know yourself about as well as I know myself.....or maybe it is that I just don't want to know me. |
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2dalimit Member Elite
since 2000-02-08
Posts 2228Mississippi coast |
Very profound. Good read. Melton |
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ethome Member Patricius
since 2000-05-14
Posts 11858New Brunswick Canada |
Deep look inwards Brian.... this is quite the examination of your thoughts and feelings. I enjoyed the read very much and I have to admit that it takes a lot of guts to look at oneself with a critical eye.....I have some advice.....stay away from crocodiles and mousetraps because, without fingers you won't be able to write these beautiful reflections down for all to read and that would be sad! |
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Mother_Earth Senior Member
since 2000-11-20
Posts 13701/2 year Texas & 1/2 year Michigan |
Brian, you have gone deep into the unknown, a mind! I like it and will look for more. Love and hugs and Happy New Year  ME |
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SpitFire Member Elite
since 2000-04-19
Posts 2396 |
~I have missed your thoughts. Incredibly interesting, completely captivating and worth EVERY second! I WILL be back. Every word is inside of me. *Peace you. |
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doreen peri Member Elite
since 1999-05-25
Posts 3812Virginia |
ok, bear with me here, brian... i'm awestruck... this piece ROCKS!!!!! here are some of the lines which really struck me hard (it all did, really) quote: SIGH... sigh.... SIGH.... brian... you've outdone yourself... i mean, this is sofa king good!!!!!!!... er... um... hehe... *grin... it IS!!!! i am honored to read you....... (i don't go to CA much so missed all the earlier revisions.... don't change anything else, ok?) |
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catalinamoon
since 2000-06-03
Posts 9543The Shores of Alone |
Brian, this is incredible. I have had so many of these thoughts, so many unresolved questions, but you have given it some logic in a way. Just wonderful, deep, involved, complex writing, as always. Sandra |
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Tiersdin Member Elite
since 2000-11-17
Posts 2364east coast |
This amazing! The writing was superb and the bravery to post your inner most thoughts is to be commended! thank you! -Tier |
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Lady Lightning Member
since 2000-12-04
Posts 422Kentucky |
I don't have the words to tell you how I felt when I read this...I'm still not sure what I feel and I've been back 3 times to read it ..To look inside oneself, is a sometimes scary thing..So many don't like what they see...I'm rambling...hehe..So I'll just say I really liked this .much...and go on my way...  ~LL~The way to love anything is to realize it might be lost. author unknown |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
My skins, my fears my everything clutter my vision like trash not worthy of a junk yard sale, .yet I live each day in self prostitution, on my knees eager to please every request. People look straight at me seeing only through tainted perception, an out of focus reception. =================== Anything new is revealed only in Braille; meaningless dots you have to be blind to read. Oh the irony. To evolve I have to dare to place my fingers into the shadows. Is that why I was given ten digits? Ten mistakes to be made, then what, be fingerless after stumbling across crocodiles and mousetraps? Too unanchored that my bed is the only safe zone, so I slip into a dream where God is still unknown, and the Universe so small that those who see it can perfectly understand. ================== "Who are you?" ... you are Bri-gator ...poetic prophet and you rock. and now I need to write the word DEEP ... cuz baby this is ... and you are. awesome Bri love ya eve Some people find subtlety in strangers if you find anything~let me in Your eyes~you see everything my eyes~I see it all together now~and I know |
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BloomingRose Member Elite
since 2000-08-09
Posts 3092Florida |
Interesting, although I am not sure what it all means. However you seem to know... it's one of those good poems that makes one think. Deb |
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brian madden Member Elite
since 2000-05-06
Posts 4374ireland |
Denise, just me brooding again. Thnk you for your very generous reply. Mark, thank you for your very kind words, I am know myself as a complete enigma, but I would not have it any other way. Melton, thanks. ethome, "guts", no but I am always looking for the truth, for the reason especially within myself. I will try to avoid the corcs and mice traps, thanks for your very very generous response. ME, happy new year and thank you. Spit, wow thank you those words mean a lot to me, thanks, doreen, thanks for the "ROCKS" you have me blushing now. Sandra, I think we all share the common bound of knowing ourselves as well as we can but still being strangers to ourselves.. if that makes sense. thank you for your reply. Tier, poetry is an exploration of inner thoughts, and they are not my inner most thoughts. lol, I don't know if I could post some of them here. Thank you. LL~, thanks for reading and replying, what you said was beautiful and means alot to me. eve, oh... the deep word, what have I done to deserve this. just being myself, thank you my friend for your thoughts, friendship and words of support and for your beautiful poetry. Deb, in truth either am I, just a bit of soul searching I guess. thanks for reading and replying. It's in your eyes a fire that's wild and glorious Unhibited, unfinished in everything I do Let the morning rise like our hearts desire" whipping boy |
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Startime Member Ascendant
since 2000-10-03
Posts 5918Canada |
Well, dear one, soul seaching looks very well on you if this beautiful poem is an example. Wonderful work that made me do some soul searching of my own. Much love and hugs to you from me. Love I leave with you my friend whether it be in your life or of yet the essense of your dreams. http://www.voy.com/7622/ http://www.powerpoems.com |
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kaile
since 2000-02-06
Posts 5146singapore |
oh, brian, i can honestly say that i have not gone as far to print out any poems in my stay here.. i am going to make an exception for this one...may i?? i may sound like a blabbering childish kid but i love it i love it i love it.... it amazes me that what with your thoughts so deep and profound, the flow of the poem is still so smooth... okay, i stop gushing |
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Temptress
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Member Rara Avis
since 1999-06-15
Posts 7136Mobile, AL |
What an excellent trip into yourself. In writing this, now you aren't the only one looking deep within you. I enjoyed this work and all its power. Can I be your willful breeze, Come to touch, Your heart to ease? |
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brian madden Member Elite
since 2000-05-06
Posts 4374ireland |
Startime, thank you for your wonderful reply, I ma blushing. those words mean a lot to me. thank you again. kaile, I am seriously blushing. It is a great honour that you wouyld print out my poem, feel free to print off any of them. Thank you for your very very generous words, my ego just went supernova Temptress, thank you from the bottom of my heart. There's a feeling of contentment Now that you are here I feel satisfied I belong inside Your velvet heaven" Depeche mode |
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