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Martie
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0 posted 2001-01-03 04:51 PM



Romance

You sway her
in dreams you dance
your lips her desire
wait for your glance

Splendid in fabric
where whispers linger
to feel the rhythm
of mood through fingers

From your dictionary
open you taught her
of stars upside down
and ships on water

The moon always there
the voyeur who gazes
catching the moment
in shadowed embraces

The music shimmies
dislocates to blaze
an eyelid soft  
on velvet she lays

And there in blooming
waits withering light
to see your grace
step into her night.



© Copyright 2001 Martie Odell Ingebretsen - All Rights Reserved
Sunshine
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1 posted 2001-01-03 04:58 PM


The imagery...wow...

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2 posted 2001-01-03 05:12 PM


"WOW!!!"
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3 posted 2001-01-03 05:16 PM


Oh, geesh... this is magical! I swear I heard music playing... Bravo!
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4 posted 2001-01-03 05:17 PM


Martie this is absolutely wonderful! ethome
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5 posted 2001-01-03 06:16 PM


Martie, WOW!
The beauty of seeing through your eyes my Dear, is incredible!

Maree  



I need a lullaby
a kiss goodnight
Angel sweet love of my life
Oh, I need this

~Natalie Merchant~

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6 posted 2001-01-03 06:31 PM


And there in blooming
waits withering light
to see your grace
step into her night.

loved it..beautiful writing, Martie..whoops my hands were typing in the wrong order *s
~Wynter

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7 posted 2001-01-03 06:34 PM


*wow*......excellent penned.
love the imagery.

((hugs))
Charisma

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8 posted 2001-01-03 06:41 PM



Perfect flow from start to finish! loved it!

-Tier{Robin}

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9 posted 2001-01-03 07:10 PM


sounds like a wonderful romance to me, beautifully penned.

It's in your eyes a fire that's wild and glorious
Unhibited, unfinished in everything I do Let the morning rise like our hearts desire" whipping boy

Martie
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10 posted 2001-01-03 09:07 PM


Karilea--thanks for the wow.

Mike--copy cat  

Suthern--if you heard music playing, then it is you who are magical, thank you!

ethome--thanks for the wonderful reply.

Maree--Thanks sweet one.

Wynter--I'm so glad that you liked my poem...thanks.

Charisma--thank you so much for your sweet words.

Robin--I appreciate your comment...never sure about rhyme.

brian--romance is who...my imagined view.

jwesley
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11 posted 2001-01-03 09:10 PM


Definitely magical, martie, as is that pen of yours...and the heart behind it.

jwesley

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12 posted 2001-01-03 09:23 PM


You never cease to amaze me, Martie! Absolutely beautiful!!

Denise

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13 posted 2001-01-03 09:54 PM


Definitely magical Martie...your images are so gorgeous...beautiful work!

*Krista Knutson*

I'm a slow dying flower
In a frost-killing hour
The sweet turning sour and untouchable...
-Natalie Merchant

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14 posted 2001-01-03 10:40 PM


"seeing through your eyes my Dear, is incredible!" -(said above) to do that AND have verses so small with images so great is phenomenal. I've never felt so speechless

Mark Bohannan
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15 posted 2001-01-04 12:57 PM


Shadows of touch
Shimmers of kiss
Taking two...
       to twilights bliss

Cleansing of wakes
Caressing the shore
Breaking against...
       fears solid door

Ripples of tide
Raging against fear
Stroking soft...
       the one I hold dear

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Superb writing my friend but that has become mere routine for you long ago as we all know.

Martie
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16 posted 2001-01-04 01:38 AM


jwesley--ahhh, what a sweet thing to say...thanks.

Denise--I'm so glad to here that...but I think you are too kind.

Hi Krista--thanks for stopping by to read..it's been awhile.  I've missed you.

Bill--you please me with your reply...thanks so much!

Mark--what romance you weave with your verse reply...very lovely...I especially liked th middle stanza..thanks so much..I'm honored.


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17 posted 2001-01-04 01:51 AM


Martie~

Splendid in fabric
where whispers linger
to feel the rhythm
of mood through fingers'


Just lovely.
Almost like stepping into a photograph.
*Hugs*, sis.
~*Marge*~


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18 posted 2001-01-04 08:42 AM


This is just excellent verses, Martie, thank you for this.

"Every man dies.
Not every man truly lives."
Braveheart

Kathleen


Martie
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19 posted 2001-01-04 12:42 PM


Thanks for the hug, sis...sending you a photograph.  

Kathleen--Thank you so much...I'm very glad that you like this.

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