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Please Forgive Me
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Please Forgive Me |
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Marsha
since 2000-07-10
Posts 7423Maidstone Kent England 
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Please Forgive Me Please just forgive me, you softly say And I reply just as softly with, nay Your puzzlement reflects in your eyes Why no, echoes your sorry sigh There is no sin to forgive or forget With no crime there is debt I hurt you so, your eyes tell me And I answer just as tenderly It was my fault I misunderstood I didn't listen, as I should There is no hurt, there is no pain Come once more love me again I said so many hurtful things to you And I respond now that's not true For I love your voice far too much I heard no words, just felt their touch There is no anger, there is no shame This is all a part of lovers' game How can you still feel love for me And I whisper my love will ever be But how when I've done all this And I reply with a simple kiss There is no end to this my lovers heart My love will never ever depart Marsha Take back the hope you gave,- I claim Only a memory of the same Robert Browning |
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Sunshine
Administrator
Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
Marsha...you know I like this...a lot... {~,^} |
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Marsha
since 2000-07-10
Posts 7423Maidstone Kent England |
Kari love, I'm trying the less is more, did it work? Thank you muchly love, as always I thank you Majestic Marsha  You can't keep a good bubble down Take back the hope you gave,- I claim Only a memory of the same Robert Browning |
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ethome Member Patricius
since 2000-05-14
Posts 11858New Brunswick Canada |
I'd say it worked very well and I enjoyed the content very much...great to experiment with these different styles...you have lots of great pictures and ideas to go with a good vocabulary, so these styles should intrigue you quite a bit Marsha...and you're asking Sunshine who is really one of the best at it...and this one is great!!! have a nice day...ethome |
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Kethry Member Rara Avis
since 2000-07-29
Posts 9082Victoria Australia |
Marsha, does an angel need to be be forgiven living in a world that's torn and riven should we forgive a love that's clear and surrounds throughout the year should you forgive humanity for trying to rise and live free no forgivenes needed and none given for the taste and touch of heaven. Mushy my how you've grown. On you, less is definitely more, and more is more also. Write on, be strong Kethry Those of us who refuse to risk and grow get swallowed up by life. Patty Hansen. |
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Marsha
since 2000-07-10
Posts 7423Maidstone Kent England |
P T love, thank you for that compliment, again I really don't think I deserve praise because I'm just playing with a few different styles. Kari is being very patient with me, and you know I do tend to try the patience of a saint. (Which she is of course) Thank you muchly love, and yes I am trying to have a bit of fun with it. It is too easy for me to stick with the forms I'm most comfortable with. Take care love Mushy Kethry love, thank you sweetie, that is far too kind of you. I'm trying which is all I can say, (I know very trying )Take care love Slushy Take back the hope you gave,- I claim Only a memory of the same Robert Browning |
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Mark Bohannan Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-21
Posts 7269In the winds of Cherokee song |
The shorter style of your lines in these verses works greatly my friend. You are learning well and I for one don't think you really needed any more help than putting your mind to it. Excellent write. |
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Sunshine
Administrator
Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
Marsha...yes! |
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Marsha
since 2000-07-10
Posts 7423Maidstone Kent England |
Mark my friend, thank you so very much, It is thanks to Kari's endless encouragement, that I tried this. It is always a case of deciding that I should try something different, and then saying do it now. I do indeed thank you for you have always encouraged me to try to extend my reach. I must admit that it was a challenge to cut my style down by an awful lot. Paring away the excess as it were. Anyway thank you most sincerely for your constant encouragement. Take care Mushy Kari love,  Does that me I can have a gold star for effort or do I have to do some more love?I'm only teasing love, as you know, thanks as always love Majestic Marsha be good kid Take back the hope you gave,- I claim Only a memory of the same Robert Browning |
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