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| Open Poetry #11 |
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My Tears |
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Kethry Member Rara Avis
since 2000-07-29
Posts 9082Victoria Australia 
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I made you soup You would not eat It's salted with my tears I gave you love You could not meet It's salted with my tears I made a life You would not live It's salted with my tears I gave you wounds You dare not give They're salted with my tears I made you hope You did not try So salted with my tears I gave you all Now give goodbye And salt it with my tears. Those of us who refuse to risk and grow get swallowed up by life. Patty Hansen. |
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Nan
Administrator
Member Seraphic
since 1999-05-20
Posts 21191Cape Cod Massachusetts USA |
Sometimes they just don't understand that it's a two way street, do they?... Well said, Keth..  |
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Kethry Member Rara Avis
since 2000-07-29
Posts 9082Victoria Australia |
Nan, it is indeed a two way street. Thanks for responding Keth Those of us who refuse to risk and grow get swallowed up by life. Patty Hansen. |
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Charisma
since 2000-09-30
Posts 5906lost in blue pages |
oh Kethry....have you peeked in my heart...this could be my song too....but I hope that I don't have to say goodbye...oh my....its such a worst time. ((warm hugs)) Charisma |
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Sudhir Iyer Member Ascendant
since 2000-04-26
Posts 6943Mumbai, India : now in Belgium |
Very well written one, O Kethry... (but then when don't you write well... NEVER) Regards, Sudhir |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
way cool Keth ... great use of metaphor the repetative lines worked perfectly in this it reads lyrically well done me gator-girl  jm Sprayed across my heart and hers Danced butterflies in the wild This angel, this woman , who loves me with the innocence of a child. ~DeVante~ |
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Marsha
since 2000-07-10
Posts 7423Maidstone Kent England |
Kethry love, this is absolutely perfectly wonderful. It is all I was saying before about talent, and there is the proof of the pudding. Utterly poetic perfection Take care kid Slushy Take back the hope you gave,- I claim Only a memory of the same Robert Browning |
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Mark Bohannan Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-21
Posts 7269In the winds of Cherokee song |
Spendid writing my friend. Spoken straight to the point and masterfully at that. |
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Irish Rose Member Patricius
since 2000-04-06
Posts 10263 |
Yes, salt also seasons us and I think that sometimes we forget that. "Every man dies. Not every man truly lives." Braveheart Kathleen |
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ethome Member Patricius
since 2000-05-14
Posts 11858New Brunswick Canada |
Keth I know how hard it's been but maybe the tears won't end up wasted...maybe you'll be free and thinking new and jumping with joy with a new love....never know! in the meantime!!! Keth don't walk out on our date now! I'll make the whole picnic if you like and I'll even carry you from the car to the shady spot under the tree but don't stand me up I just couldn't take it! |
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Balladeer
Administrator
Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-05
Posts 25505Ft. Lauderdale, Fl USA |
a picnic? and I wasn't invited??? I'll bring my tears for salt  a very realistic poem, Keth, and very well said |
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Sven
since 1999-11-23
Posts 14937East Lansing, MI USA |
excellent words Kethry. . . your heart and your gift show well in this one. . .  ------------------------------------------------------ That which gives light must endure burning --Victor Frankl |
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Daniel J D Senior Member
since 2000-10-01
Posts 1471Hillcrest, Queensland, Australia |
Kethry, This is so beautifully written, straight from the heart. I hope things get better very soon. Respond to my call and let the waves of my heart fill your life with the wonders of love (Daniel J D) |
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Denise
Moderator
Member Seraphic
since 1999-08-22
Posts 22648 |
Great writing, Kethry! Very well expressed! Denise |
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Kethry Member Rara Avis
since 2000-07-29
Posts 9082Victoria Australia |
Charisma, Sorry my poem reflected your situation. I hope things get better soon. Sudhir, Thank you for the outrageous lie and charm for the start of the year. Janet Marie, its always an honor when you respond. Thank you. Marsha, you say this confection is poetic perfection I think you lie it's more like suet pie. Speaking of pudding I have four, no five slightly used ones from Christmas, if you like I can package them and send them to you all I need is you home address, private telephone number,DOB, astrological sign, real name... Mark, yeah I was aiming for pointed lol. Irish Rose, well it was my seasonal write. *laughs* ethome, I haven't forgotten my picnic promise how about the next blue moon for a date? 'Deer you could come along if you don't mind being a gooseberry. You could bring the Spam I'll bring the Vegemite Sven, It always brightens my day when you drop by. Daniel JD Thanks for stopping by and adding your praise dsyner, thanks for the praise and the come by. Be well Kethry Those of us who refuse to risk and grow get swallowed up by life. Patty Hansen. |
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Temptress
Moderator
Member Rara Avis
since 1999-06-15
Posts 7136Mobile, AL |
May I say that I really enjoyed this? I love the idea you had with salt by tears. A very sad, but excellent poem. Can I be your willful breeze, Come to touch, Your heart to ease? |
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maxtec1 Senior Member
since 2000-12-09
Posts 577Garland, Tx |
very sad when something like this happens. I feel the pain you pened. Love and light, Richard |
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Sunshine
Administrator
Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
Kethry, I could taste this one...literally...and all I can say is, thank you... |
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Kethry Member Rara Avis
since 2000-07-29
Posts 9082Victoria Australia |
Temptress, well I was thinking of the salt of friendship and the poem grew from there. maxtec1 thank you for your words of strength and comfort. Sunshine thank you that you could taste it not a pleasant taste but better than dust and ashes. Be well Kethry Those of us who refuse to risk and grow get swallowed up by life. Patty Hansen. |
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Cerenity Member Elite
since 2000-02-16
Posts 2637Escondido-California |
Hi Kethry, Found this in the back pages and thought its just to beautiful to be back there and i've salted alot of soup and wasted alot of me, I hope you find the sweetness that love can bring, wonderful poetry here. Love, Cerenity "God doesn't have to be reminded that we exist. We have to be reminded that He exist!" (Writer Unknown) |
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