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Morning Light-1st attempt at a paradelle, weak at best
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Morning Light-1st attempt at a paradelle, weak at best |
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VAS Member Rara Avis
since 2000-11-16
Posts 7450Oregon |
Morning Light Virginia Salter morning light peeking in morning light peeking in giving dawn its rise giving dawn its rise light of morning peeking in giving dawn rise to its day the black of night fades to blue the black of night fades to blue something like the color you something like the color you the color you fade to blue as something of the black of night rests upon the whole of me it rests on me much as the sea it rests on me much as the sea rests upon the land in waves rests upon the land in waves as the sea’s waves rest upon the land and me morning light is peeking in to give the dawn its rise that it may rest much as the sea upon the land and whole of me in waves that mirror something of the black of night’s fade to blue and you © December 29, 2000 |
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Kethry Member Rara Avis
since 2000-07-29
Posts 9082Victoria Australia |
VAS, if this is your first attempt, it's not too bad. In my first attempt I kept wanting to add words in the fifth and sixth line too. Look! by the third verse you got the idea though, and you finished well. Well done! Keth Religion is for people frightened about going to hell - Spirituality is for people who have been there. Anon. |
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Irish Rose Member Patricius
since 2000-04-06
Posts 10263 |
I have never done one. I need to read and study this, it seems so very interesting, and I liked it very much. "Every man dies. Not every man truly lives." Braveheart Kathleen |
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