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Gift of Hand |
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Sunshine
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since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart 
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palm up, take my hand for this promise of grand dreams entwine then our hands and if you were to believe in me, what treasures will we uncover… like Adam and Eve anew to the sense of love's first kiss would we know then Eden's bliss… all gifts I would gift to you for I see pleasure in your smile, I see walks of many miles, I see fantasy in the gifts I give to thee bless me with your smile, take me in your embrace, grant me the kiss of you, from your princely face thus is your gift you give to me strength in tender, love's command merciful, love's touch chide me not for these my dreams but carry me forth on tides of beams bear me up to the clouds transport me to the land of proud for you would have my all of me this I give you most graciously cans't thou see the truth of me in these thy words of love Ah my dear, dear heart, come and take my hand, 'tis reaching for you, cross this chasm wide nay I cannot hide this smile on my lip nor not feel thee with this my fingertip when for a promise of dream, grand entwined forever [This message has been edited by Sunshine (edited 12-29-2000).] |
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Denise
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since 1999-08-22
Posts 22648 |
Very beautiful, Karilea! Lovely romantic thoughts beautifully expressed! Denise |
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Mark Bohannan Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-21
Posts 7269In the winds of Cherokee song |
Stunningly beautiful my friend. I truely loved tripping through this one alot. |
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VAS Member Rara Avis
since 2000-11-16
Posts 7450Oregon |
Very interesting form and languaging. A mixture of historical tongue and contemporary. Is this an identified form, or is it like one I tried, to denote a conversation between two. |
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Sunshine
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since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
denise, kind words, thank you... Mark, tripping the light fantastic is fun, hey?...thank you... Virginia...a blend of styles now and then doesn't hurt anything...I roam around too much to keep to one form for long...thank you for reading... |
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inot2B Member Elite
since 2000-09-18
Posts 2205Arkansas |
It is so nice to hold our loved ones hand that is freely offered and dream the dreams of only love puts forth. |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
palm up, take my hand for this promise of grand dreams entwine then our hands and if you were to believe in me, what treasures will we uncover… like Adam and Eve anew to the sense of love's first kiss would we know then Eden's bliss… =============== tender touch of hand strength in tender, love's command merciful, love's touch chide me not for these my dreams but carry me forth on tides of beams bear me up to the clouds transport me to the land of proud =============== Ah my dear, dear heart, come and take my hand, 'tis reaching for you, cross this chasm wide nay I cannot hide this smile on my lip nor not feel thee with this my fingertip when palm up, take mine hand for a promise of dream, grand entwined forever ============= very cool Sun..very...this is a groovy  love the whole premise of this... and the presentation and cool rhyme scheme as well as unique vocab ... yep....way cool later-hand held out-gator jm Some people find subtlety in strangers if you find anything~let me in Your eyes~you see everything my eyes~I see it all together now~and I know |
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Balladeer
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since 1999-06-05
Posts 25505Ft. Lauderdale, Fl USA |
Stunning once again, sunshine... Believing in one another can indeed be the key to open Heaven's door you have described this so well....I hope you're comfortable in my library...you've been going there a lot lately!!!  |
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Passions Voice Member
since 2000-10-23
Posts 291Michigan |
This is very wonderful. I'm awed. passion is life. . . ~Diana |
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Marsha
since 2000-07-10
Posts 7423Maidstone Kent England |
Kari love, can I? This is awesome it really is. Didn't I say you are growing moment by moment. And it's wonderful to see love it really is. I love it, it's truly scintilating. Utterly you, pure Sunshine. Take care love Majestic Marsha Take back the hope you gave,- I claim Only a memory of the same Robert Browning |
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Sunshine
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since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
inot2B, it most certainly is, thank you... JM, you are not OLD enough to remember "groovy"...but if you say so, then I accept, with 'open hands'...thank you dear... 'Deer, if I am gracing your library shelves, then perhaps I am finally doing something right...you have all taught me many wonderful things, and one of the most important of them, is to be honest with your feelings, and let them come out through our pen...thank you... Passions Voice, I love your pen name...and I blush at your comment, and appreciate it much...thank you... Marsha...today I found "The Library Shakspeare" Millenium Edition...perhaps with a bit of research and serious reading, I might really do it right someday...and I know for a fact, you'll be watching! Thank you love... |
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Sven
since 1999-11-23
Posts 14937East Lansing, MI USA |
a gift again given hands joined. . . beautiful my friend. . . ----------------------------------------------------- That which gives light must endure burning --Victor Frankl |
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Sunshine
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since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
Thank you Sven... |
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