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serenity blaze
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0 posted 2000-12-28 03:12 AM


I did not believe in love
until I heard your voice--
I did not believe at all,
and now I have no choice.
You are too slick
for likes of me
or so you think
so let me be--
no more of this
sweet Judas kiss--
no more silver crosses palm.
What did I do
to make you cruel?
But crave to be where I belong?

No, I never had a chance.
But still, I tried. I learned to dance.
I tried to follow every step....
I stayed
I prayed
for you--you slept
through my tears
all of my fears
and all my secrets kept.

Did you think me so absurd
I could not read the written word?
You warned me, yes I know it's true,
admonishment of loving you...

and now my heart's a dying thing,
I wish that I could cry, could sing---
I wish, wishes were everything
to repaint rainbow's shades of blue,
forgiving of the icy sting
winter's rain in love with you.

© Copyright 2000 serenity blaze - All Rights Reserved
ethome
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since 2000-05-14
Posts 11858
New Brunswick Canada
1 posted 2000-12-28 06:13 AM


My goodness Celeste you have described a lover's ambivalnce here so well....kind of like milkshakes are your favourite food but you're are allergic to dairy products... well done and "poof te betts!"  love ya kiddo...write'em up!
nakdthoughts
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Between the Lines
2 posted 2000-12-28 07:05 AM


you slept
through my tears
all of my fears
and all my secrets kept...

this was wonderful phrasing
and so true to  many of us *huggzz*

~Wynter


"The worst prison would be a closed heart".
...Pope John Paul II



Janet Marie
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since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554

3 posted 2000-12-28 03:11 PM


I did not believe in love
until I heard your voice--
I did not believe at all,
and now I have no choice.
==================
But crave to be where I belong?
No, I never had a chance.
But still, I tried. I learned to dance.
I tried to follow every step....
I stayed
I prayed
for you--you slept
through my tears
all of my fears
and all my secrets kept.

Did you think me so absurd
I could not read the written word?
You warned me, yes I know it's true,
admonishment of loving you...

and now my heart's a dying thing,
I wish that I could cry, could sing---
I wish, wishes were everything
to repaint rainbow's shades of blue,
forgiving of the icy sting
winter's rain in love with you.
===============
oh baby....I know I know...
we cant control who we fall for...
me thinks it would be pretty boring if we could ...
besides dont we poets need to learn all our lessons the hard way
yeah.... YOU KNOW
and then you know I LOVE THIS POEM..
and the poet  
awesome writing Sen...
your poetry goes to new levels each day me twin...
I E'd ya at the new addy this morn...
let me know if I should go back to old addy
later-baby
me

Some people find subtlety in strangers
if you find anything~let me in
Your eyes~you see everything
my eyes~I see it all together now~and I know

Irish Rose
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since 2000-04-06
Posts 10263

4 posted 2000-12-28 03:13 PM


you just wait...spring is coming and those rain drops are gonna thaw and you'll be blushing.......

"Every man dies.
Not every man truly lives."
Braveheart



LngJhnAg
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Boot+Kitty=Poetry in motion
5 posted 2000-12-28 03:14 PM


Celeste - I know exactly how you feel - I once felt this way for Balladeer, and I then I discovered he was a man!  Imagine my shock!  I sincerely hope this poem is not from a personal experience.
Sven
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Posts 14937
East Lansing, MI USA
6 posted 2000-12-28 08:08 PM


nothing so cold. . . however, there's always warmth. . .

perfect. . .  

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That which gives light must endure burning
--Victor Frankl


Martie
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7 posted 2000-12-28 08:13 PM


You sure know how to create a mood...and then write a feeling around it..well done!
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In Your Poetic Mind
8 posted 2000-12-28 08:20 PM


I did not believe in love
until I heard your voice--
I did not believe at all,
and now I have no choice"

ohhhhh,  every word written in this poem, I have felt, we all have at sometime....how I relate to this so vividly as though the canvas was painted yesterday....

Greeneyes~

***


"Within you I lose myself
Without you I find myself
Wanting to be lost again."
-Unknown


Wilfred Yeats
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since 2000-08-04
Posts 2704
Wilmington, Delaware
9 posted 2000-12-29 02:20 PM


I'm with Greeneyes on this one - I'm totally convinced like you, like me - nearly all of us have 'been there - felt that' - awesome write!!!!!!!
Balladeer
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Ft. Lauderdale, Fl USA
10 posted 2000-12-29 06:31 PM


very slick, my lady....one of the beauties of serenity is that she doen't mince words...I love your eat and die attitude!  
Kethry
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since 2000-07-29
Posts 9082
Victoria Australia
11 posted 2000-12-30 01:41 AM


Celeste, you certainly know how to tell it like it is.
write on, be strong
Keth


Religion is for people frightened about going to hell - Spirituality is for people who have been there. Anon.


doreen peri
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since 1999-05-25
Posts 3812
Virginia
12 posted 2000-12-30 01:47 AM


quote:
Did you think me so absurd
I could not read the written word?
You warned me, yes I know it's true,
admonishment of loving you...


well.... all i can say is... when do we party  on basin street? *wink*

damn, girl! quit writing me.... k?

Masked Intruder
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Near golden sunsets
13 posted 2000-12-30 03:32 AM


S'ren--------------------------
Lovely start and finish; you are so good at those!  Always bring you right into the mood, right into your heart and soul.
You did not believe in love?  Is it not love that has kept you going? I decidedly like the incorporation of your allusions (Judas, etc) into your writing.  Deceit is not a friendly companion, no ma'am.

(mornin...wherever yer at. *grins*)

-me

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