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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738
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I did not believe in love until I heard your voice-- I did not believe at all, and now I have no choice. You are too slick for likes of me or so you think so let me be-- no more of this sweet Judas kiss-- no more silver crosses palm. What did I do to make you cruel? But crave to be where I belong? No, I never had a chance. But still, I tried. I learned to dance. I tried to follow every step.... I stayed I prayed for you--you slept through my tears all of my fears and all my secrets kept. Did you think me so absurd I could not read the written word? You warned me, yes I know it's true, admonishment of loving you... and now my heart's a dying thing, I wish that I could cry, could sing--- I wish, wishes were everything to repaint rainbow's shades of blue, forgiving of the icy sting winter's rain in love with you. |
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ethome Member Patricius
since 2000-05-14
Posts 11858New Brunswick Canada |
My goodness Celeste you have described a lover's ambivalnce here so well....kind of like milkshakes are your favourite food but you're are allergic to dairy products... well done and "poof te betts!" love ya kiddo...write'em up! |
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nakdthoughts Member Laureate
since 2000-10-29
Posts 19200Between the Lines |
you slept through my tears all of my fears and all my secrets kept... this was wonderful phrasing and so true to many of us *huggzz* ~Wynter "The worst prison would be a closed heart". ...Pope John Paul II |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
I did not believe in love until I heard your voice-- I did not believe at all, and now I have no choice. ================== But crave to be where I belong? No, I never had a chance. But still, I tried. I learned to dance. I tried to follow every step.... I stayed I prayed for you--you slept through my tears all of my fears and all my secrets kept. Did you think me so absurd I could not read the written word? You warned me, yes I know it's true, admonishment of loving you... and now my heart's a dying thing, I wish that I could cry, could sing--- I wish, wishes were everything to repaint rainbow's shades of blue, forgiving of the icy sting winter's rain in love with you. =============== oh baby....I know I know... we cant control who we fall for... me thinks it would be pretty boring if we could ... besides dont we poets need to learn all our lessons the hard way yeah.... YOU KNOW and then you know I LOVE THIS POEM.. and the poet  awesome writing Sen... your poetry goes to new levels each day me twin... I E'd ya at the new addy this morn... let me know if I should go back to old addy later-baby me Some people find subtlety in strangers if you find anything~let me in Your eyes~you see everything my eyes~I see it all together now~and I know |
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Irish Rose Member Patricius
since 2000-04-06
Posts 10263 |
you just wait...spring is coming and those rain drops are gonna thaw and you'll be blushing....... "Every man dies. Not every man truly lives." Braveheart |
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LngJhnAg Member Elite
since 1999-07-23
Posts 3508Boot+Kitty=Poetry in motion |
Celeste - I know exactly how you feel - I once felt this way for Balladeer, and I then I discovered he was a man! Imagine my shock! I sincerely hope this poem is not from a personal experience. |
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Sven
since 1999-11-23
Posts 14937East Lansing, MI USA |
nothing so cold. . . however, there's always warmth. . . perfect. . .  ---------------------------------------------------------- That which gives light must endure burning --Victor Frankl |
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Martie
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
You sure know how to create a mood...and then write a feeling around it..well done! |
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Greeneyes 
since 2000-09-09
Posts 9903In Your Poetic Mind |
I did not believe in love until I heard your voice-- I did not believe at all, and now I have no choice" ohhhhh, every word written in this poem, I have felt, we all have at sometime....how I relate to this so vividly as though the canvas was painted yesterday.... Greeneyes~ *** "Within you I lose myself Without you I find myself Wanting to be lost again." -Unknown |
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Wilfred Yeats Member Elite
since 2000-08-04
Posts 2704Wilmington, Delaware |
I'm with Greeneyes on this one - I'm totally convinced like you, like me - nearly all of us have 'been there - felt that' - awesome write!!!!!!! |
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Balladeer
Administrator
Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-05
Posts 25505Ft. Lauderdale, Fl USA |
very slick, my lady....one of the beauties of serenity is that she doen't mince words...I love your eat and die attitude! |
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Kethry Member Rara Avis
since 2000-07-29
Posts 9082Victoria Australia |
Celeste, you certainly know how to tell it like it is. write on, be strong Keth Religion is for people frightened about going to hell - Spirituality is for people who have been there. Anon. |
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doreen peri Member Elite
since 1999-05-25
Posts 3812Virginia |
quote: well.... all i can say is... when do we party on basin street? *wink* damn, girl! quit writing me.... k? |
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Masked Intruder
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Senior Member
since 1999-05-23
Posts 1231Near golden sunsets |
S'ren-------------------------- Lovely start and finish; you are so good at those! Always bring you right into the mood, right into your heart and soul. You did not believe in love? Is it not love that has kept you going? I decidedly like the incorporation of your allusions (Judas, etc) into your writing. Deceit is not a friendly companion, no ma'am. (mornin...wherever yer at. *grins*) -me |
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